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CommissarVulpin


Formerly known as bananachips; sorry for any confusion. You can message me on Discord if you like: CommissarVulpin#8472

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When Spring Bloom's lunar cruise is interrupted by a devastating accident, she suddenly finds herself thrust a century and a half into the future, and into the midst of a conspiracy.

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I did do some vetting... really it did not need much though. Looks like it will be a nice fanfiction. Waiting for more.

How long do you think this fanfiction is going to be? 20k words? 120k words? maybe 300k?

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I'm honestly not sure how long it's going to be. Definitely longer than 20k since I'm shooting for 5k - 10k words per chapter, and there are going to be at least 10 chapters.

Finally read the whole chapter, sorry been too busy with other stuff to read this interesting story, I hope you will keep on posting more of this story again soon.

Interesting start. Competent SF is rare here, I'm curious to see how this develops.

Glad to see this continue! There's a lot of detail in your prose, but it's conveyed organically, especially regarding the worldbuilding. It feels more like a future Equestria now, and not just Earth with ponies. I was wondering what the core conflict would be, and then the ending happened. Safe to say I'm firmly invested now. My main criticism is that the myriad descriptions are a bit detrimental to the pacing, but that's mainly my hunger for plot progression and character development talking, as what's here is, again, good.

Well that trip didn't go very well looks like that protagonist is dying just on the second chapter. Over all I did enjoy reading the chapter it was nice to see trying mix in pony magic with mostly really space tech reference, I wonder how it will further be mixed in in who every is the runner up on the protagonist role?

Sorry for taking over two months to finish this chapter, but life got in the way and left me little time for writing. Hopefully Chapter 4 won't take nearly as long.

10677169 Hey, for me, the wait was worth it. For real, now there's two mysterious conspiracies I'm suspecting Spring Bloom will eventually be roped into uncovering, plus the fish out of water element. Being even farther into the future lets the technology be more interesting, and for the reader to discover it along with Spring. The tangential bits of set dressing are also great. I approve of Celestia being as terrible with computers as she is at acting, really adds to the whole 'she's everypony's wise grandma' vibe she puts out. And I laughed out loud at the Spongebob reference. All in all, this is shaping up to be excellent gem of a fic, one which won't remain hidden if there's any justice in the world.

Sonata Taco

OK, somebody tell me how that siren got to this moon! :facehoof:

[* Shimmy Shake? Shimmer escort service for an ex-siren? *]

Nice to see an update on this story, still happy that she somehow survived the vacuum of space. Interesting to hear a little what happened in the past 150 years, nice to see Celestia and Luna in this. I do like growing romance with Spring and Niddel, I wonder if this will also turn into tragedy. I do like the nodded with with the Qannon that lead to the 6th events and pointing out all the dangers to it.

Some great OC names here. I didn't even know what a Syzygy was, but it's a perfect fit for this stallion.

EDIT: And oh yeah, don't think I didn't catch the Gurren Lagann reference, you magnificently cultured fellow, you.

Why isn't there a dark tag?

And the crisis begins. I'd figured Azure would've crashed into the other space shuttles as a heroic sacrifice to cripple the mercenaries' attack, but I guess he's got more to live for than I thought. Obviously he'll be plot relevant in some other way soon, otherwise you'd have just used Blackwater's POV for that section. Syzygy and Co. may be in for a shock soon, considering that I'm fairly certain Celestia and Luna haven't had the time to get off the moon since their visit with Spring. Without them present to fight back, I'm not sure if his plans could possibly be stopped.

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I neglected to say so earlier, but I sincerely appreciate all your comments. It makes me happy that someone is enjoying the story!

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I didn't think it needed one, with the Violence and Death tags in place. Despite appearances, I don't intend for this story to become much more grim.

After much too long, here is my proof that I am still, in fact, working on this story. Along with some worldbuilding and behind-the-scenes notes.
This chapter and the next were originally meant to be a single chapter, but it was getting far too long so I split it into two. Meaning Chapter 7 shouldn't take nearly as long to release as this one.
Originally, Rosette was kind of a background character, and didn't have nearly as much of a role to play in this story as she does now. On the suggestions of my pre-reader Mockingbirb she's a much more important character.
.scr stands for .scroll, the standard document format in future Equestria.

Sincere apologies for how long this chapter took to publish. I know I said it wouldn't take long, but...yeah. Both myself and my pre-reader's schedules have been quite busy lately, so things haven't been moving along quite as quickly as I'd hoped. But it's here now, and that's what matters, I guess.

Speaking of which, I'd like to get more pre-readers to take a look at my chapters before I publish them. More eyes pointing out things that I miss can only make the story better. So if you're interested, please let me know.

“I’m just glad the launch is over,” Snowberry said with relief as he, too, unbuckled himself and floated about. “How many [1]gees did we pull? Four?”

[1] I've never seen Gs written as gees. Makes me think of a gee

Spring Bloom heard a faint hissing somewhere within the ship, and felt the cabin begin to turn. Slowly, the ship rotated ninety degrees counter-clockwise, until it’s the nose was pointed toward the north pole. Now, she could see the setting sun squarely in her window. She could hear the commotion as several other passengers from the right side of the cabin ventured from their seats to get a look out the windows on this side.

Gotta choose one or the other

“Gravity boots! They’re special shoes that let you stick to the floor so you don’t have to float everywhere! Though some ponies like [1] float around, I prefer to keep my hooves on the floor.”

[1] Missing a "to"

Round Trip shook his head. “It’s only half a gee, but it’s enough to be comfortable, and I think it’s a nice way to get used to lighter gravity before you get to the moon.”

Nice pun

Oh yeah, totally forgot to comment on this chapter, which progressed the story nicely. My only real complaint here is that Clip feels like a deus ex machina, what with how he shows up out of nowhere and essentially saves everybody from what otherwise would've been total failure. Role in the story aside, he's a great character, though.

Hopefully they don't miss. Would suck to blow up some alien planet in ten-thousand years. Icy Knewtons is the deadliest son of a mare in space, after all. :rainbowlaugh:

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