The Loneliest Star

A little girl named Lucky Star have been homeless her entire life. But her whole world is about to change when she meets The Dazzlings. Maybe, just maybe, it's for the better.

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Prologue:The Tragic Lost · 8th Sep 2020 · 1,612 words
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Ch.1: The Three Girls · 23rd Sep 2020 · 1,453 words
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Pete100

Pete100 #1 · Sep 8th, 2020 · · · Prologue:The Tragic Lost ·

You can't even tell that the little girl was even white in the first place as her skin is covered in all shorts if dirt and grime, making her look brown.

Do you mean sorts? Also, I feel like if the father had waited a little longer he would have been able to go with her. Also, are the thugs going to be relevant?

Blueelectric

Blueelectric #2 · Sep 8th, 2020 · · · Prologue:The Tragic Lost ·

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There, fixed it. Her father didn't really have a chose as the thugs was almost there and he needed to distract them. As for the thugs, I have to think about that since they're miles away from Canterlot.

Pete100

Pete100 #3 · Sep 8th, 2020 · · · Prologue:The Tragic Lost ·

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Oh, ok

Pete100

Pete100 #4 · Sep 23rd, 2020 · · · Ch.1: The Three Girls ·

She torn her gaze from the yellow girl to find the purple one and blue one ran back to them. The one the yellow girl called, "Sonata." Was carring a bush cutter. The purple girl was watching her with an uninterested look in her face.

I would have been worried.

Sonata smiled and gave her a hug. "I promised. It's just a magic show, nothing more." She stand up and picked her up.

I don’t know if that counts as lying or not.

Outside their window, a blue eyed stranger watched smiling. She turned and walked away, her red and gold hair glint in the moonlight.

She either just felt bad for them or saw the kid, and is her eyes really blue? Also, is the author’s note gonna be relevant in the future?

Blueelectric

Blueelectric #5 · Sep 23rd, 2020 · · · Ch.1: The Three Girls ·

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I would have been worried.

This is Aria Blaze you are talking about here. Of course she is worried, she just don't want to show it. It's just her usual grouchy self.

I don't know of that counts as lying or not.

Well, it's not the truth either. Sonata just don't want to scare Lucky or lose her trust.

She either just felt bad for them or saw the kid, and is her eyes really blue? Also, is the author's note gonna be relevant in the future?

Yes. She saw them both and just followed them to their house. And yes, I'm sure her looks pretty blue to me. On her wiki page it said her eyes is a moderate cyan. and as for the author's note; the first part is just a joke I put up and as for the second part, who knows? I don't want to spoil it yet.

Pete100

Pete100 #6 · Sep 23rd, 2020 · · · Ch.1: The Three Girls ·

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I’m talking about sonata coming towards me with bush cutters.

She’s gonna lose her trust if/or when she finds out.

Who’s vanellope?

Blueelectric

Blueelectric #7 · Sep 23rd, 2020 · · · Ch.1: The Three Girls ·

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Oh she's some character from Wreck It Ralph. I was quoting what she said to Ralph. With the bush cutters, I'll change it to bush clippers to make it sound less dangerous.

Blueelectric