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Itztli FP

Mexicano (ajua) y un gran fanático de MLP


Comet Dust is an orphan rejected by his companions and most of the ponies just because his appearance. Without friends and only one pony who really cares him, he decided to spend his time alone, far away from other ponies. What happen when someday, a pony decided to adopt him. How will he adjust to his new life? Will he understand the importance of friendship? What adventures waits for him in his new home in Ponyville?

Chapters (8)
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Good beginning can't wait for the next chapter

Comment posted by Itztli FP deleted Sep 5th, 2020

Good chapter can't wait for the next chapter

For being so smart, Twilight is so ignorant...I mean come on, she knew he had a bad history with other kids, his first day of school he comes home shy and bruised and doesn't wanna talk about it/deflects. It pretty much screams bullies.

Are you still working on this story, Itztli FP?

Yes, I'm still working on it. I just uploaded a new chapter. I hope you like it.
Sorry I did´t answered sooner, I've been a little busy, but I'm actually working on the next chapter.

How long will it be before Comet starts calling Twilight ‘mom’?

Comment posted by Pony addiction deleted Dec 16th, 2020

I deleted my previous comment because I thought I was wrong, but I wasn't. You really need a editor,

“Oh, don’t worry, she will come back in a few days. She went to his family farm, a problem with parasprites if I remember. But she wasn’t the only one, Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy also left. They went to Cloudsdale to visit Fluttershy’s parents, they’ll will be back for tomorrow”. She said finishing coumb the easiest hair of Comet.

There are a LOT of spelling mistakes and other errors I can't think remember the name of

Congratulations, you are the first person to make me want to kill a pony, not even Diamond Tiara or Spoiled Milk/Rich could do that.

Yeah, I know. Actually, English it is not my native language, it is Spanish, the original language the fanfic is wrote. I made the traslating myself, and I know it is not the best, I still have a lot to learn.
I hope my errors didn't make it too confusing. I'll do my best to improve my English.

I´m not very sure if that´s a good or a bad thing, but thank you. It means that I´m doing something right.

Thank you. I'm glad you liked my work.

But, not many ponies of your age cold carry so many objects

Could carry

That was a missclick, I have "could carry" on the paper. :v

I honestly hope his old parents (if you can even call them that) don’t find out about him. Especially with him being Twilights kid.

I haven´t decided that yet, but I've been thinking about it. We are going to have to find it out in the sext chapters.
Thanks for comment.

Oh no. The train has stopped. Also nice to see him talk to Cary and the violin sounds nice.

I'm glad you liked it. Thaks for the comment and the suport

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