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You're Anon exploring Canterlot and you meet a very high society stallion who takes a 'fancy' towards you. He considers on offering you an odd job which leads to more. You can't help but love him.




Implied sexual content and slight innuendo.

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Comments ( 3 )

Like the idea behind the fic, as there is a serious lack of M/M human on pony romances, especially non-clop ones. However, I suggest you find an editor. I saw a bunch of beginner's errors.

That's when 'he' spotted you.

Use italics instead of apostrophes.

"My, you are quite a sigh to behold, ol' chap. Why i've never seen anycreature

Sight, and capitalize I've.

"a 'human'? Never have I heard of such a creature such as yourself before."

Capitalize the first word of a sentence.

Clean this up a bit and it'll be pretty decent.

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Thank you and I appreciate the feedback, I unfortunately don't have an editor to look over these things for me but I will go back to fix these errors if someone sees them.

And there he goes trotting in a circle around you, telling you what you did was wrong. You know he doesn't mean it.

Gosh darnit man, if that isn't the cutest thing. Great fic, looking forward to reading more

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