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Twilight and Cadence are determined to get Applejack and Rainbow Dash to admit their obvious feelings for each other, no matter how oblivious they are.

Written for the AppleDash Warm and Fuzzy Feelings Event being hosted by KrazyTheFox.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 35 )

Oh god my ribs

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How did you read it that quickly? It JUST hit the site.

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Oh I didn't but the picture killed me

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Oh. I was gonna say, it was still awaiting automated submission when I went to take a shower, and your comment was there when I got back. Either that shower took longer than I thought, or you can get through 8.8K words at quite an impressive speed.

What a delightful comedy of errors to read over breakfast.

why did you not use a literal cargo ship. that would have been even more ironic.

First good AppleDash fic I've read in a long time. Have my upvote

"Cadence! There's somepony at the—"

"AHHH!"

Princess Mi Amore Cadenza, Princess of Love and sovereign of the Crystal Empire, flailed at her desk, sweeping a small pile of detailed figurines into a drawer.

"KNOCK! I'VE TOLD YOU TO KNOCK BEFORE ENTERING THIS ROOM!"

"Yes, dear." Shining Armor replied. "It's just that there's somepony here to see you."

"Did you see anything?!"

"No, honey. I didn't see you playing with your dolls again."

"Good!"

Nothing like a good Spaceballs reference to kick off a good comedy fic. I already like this and I'm barely through the first chapter.

WELP. INTO THE MADNESS WE GO

Hmmmmmmmmm...
Interesting.

I
LOVE
IT.
WONDERFUL!

Omg I just realized the pink pony from the restaurant was Cadence in disguise and the purple pony was twilight in disguise-
But seriously this is so funny xd

"Wait, WHERE ARE THEY GOING?!" Twilight screamed as she and Cadence ran after them.

Reminds me of cozy glow in the season 8 finale. “Wait,where are you going?!? Ahhhhhh”

Yeah, i admit I thought love potion was on the way there. You got me.

My money is on AJ and RD having already been dating all along and Twi and Cadence just aren't in the loop.

"Cadence! There's somepony at the—"

"AHHH!"

Princess Mi Amore Cadenza, Princess of Love and sovereign of the Crystal Empire, flailed at her desk, sweeping a small pile of detailed figurines into a drawer.

"KNOCK! I'VE TOLD YOU TO KNOCK BEFORE ENTERING THIS ROOM!"

"Yes, dear." Shining Armor replied. "It's just that there's somepony here to see you."

"Did you see anything?!"

"No, honey. I didn't see you playing with your dolls again."

"Good!"

The reference is strong with this one.

"THEY'VE GONE PLAID!!!"

Ohboyohboyohboy...!!!

Thanks for the rose eating. It's just me but I kinda like to think of it as them being or sounding like horses for a moment. I admit it'd be weird if they did stuff like that all the time but I like it here and there because horses are great.

Kinda like fish jokes in Spongebob - you kinda develop a strange appreciation for them.

dam now i got to watch spaceballs

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To me it's more a simple matter of continuity. Way back in in S01E03 Twilight orders a daffodil and daisy sandwich and also eats the petals plucked off the table flowers (which I just assumed are the equivalent of the free bread). The point is, flowers are firmly established as food. Thus, a bouquet of roses is obviously analogous to a box of chocolates.

"Come, Twilight. We have work to do."

“Let’s go. In and out. 20 minute shipping trip.”

This was hilarious.

I don’t know if I’m going to laugh my butt off or scream into my pillow in frustration first.

https://m.

This story in a nutshell.

This is a work of shipping art!

I've been grinning and giggling so much my cheeks actually hurt. This was absolutely fantastic.

My poor face, my poor sides... Oh why do I torment them so? This was pure comedy gold from start to finish, made even better by the Spaceballs reference.

I did not initially intend for that Twidence ship when I started this fic, but it just sort of happened.

Don't you just hate love it when characters start living their own life during the writing process and run away from the one who supposedly has ultimate power over them? :twilightsmile:

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That was pretty much a defining feature of my extremely long running (mostly because I kept disappearing for like a year at a time between chapters) dark romance adventure fic Heart of Loyalty. I want characters that are supposedly brilliant and competent to behave somewhat consistently with as few instances as possible of a sudden onset of idiocy to drive the plot forward, meaning they need to fall for something they really shouldn't have or conveniently forget they can teleport, etc. When you have two or more such characters in opposition to each other, things get messy. My initial plans for scenes or entire plot thread trajectories end up rewritten because Character A would see such a trap coming a mile away and take precautions, and Character B isn't foolish enough to underestimate them in the first place, etc. Then I'm like, Character C probably wouldn't stand for that and would then get involved.

At the same time, I abhor the "all according to plan" chess master cliche' where a character's overly complex plan goes off without a hitch despite depending on dozens of moving parts they would have no control over, where the whole thing would fall to pieces if somebody arrived at point X 5 seconds late because they stopped to pet a cat or had to wait for some kids to cross the street. When writers mistake intelligence for omniscience. Which is why I prefer characters making additional preparations and contingency plans that might turn out to be completely unnecessary because they don't have perfect information and only guess how things are actually going to go down. Sometimes you make a Plan B, but Plan A turned out fine. Sometimes you unnecessarily cover yourself in mud and space blankets because you don't know if those cameras have thermal imaging or not.

*exaggerated slurping sounds*

Mmmm.... dramatic irony. Exquisite.

OHMYGODYES!! :rainbowlaugh:
I loved every minute of the story from start to finish!

I already love this story. Great plot idea!

i actually chuckled at this line 😂 so good!

Drawing inspiration from Spaceballs is always a good thing.

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