Cars are still parked outside. If the rapture had happened, why was it unrecognizable? Why was the sky blue? Why did no one tell me? Do these things not announce themselves?
On the run from the infamous Second Division, Rainbow flees deeper and deeper into Equestria's south, putting her faith in a newfound friend. Pursued by Rainbow's old lieutenant and haunted by Applejack's personal ghosts, the two head south in search of freedom and a better tomorrow.
Written as a gift for Captain Appledash himself, Krazy. Also written as a part of their Warm and Fuzzy Feelings event. Feedback from ScopingLandscape and Vis-a-Viscera.
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I really like the setup for this fic! Looking forward to finding out more about the army RD was drafted into. I'm sure there'll be some good chase scenes coming up too.
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:D
You just know that Rainbow is desperate when she willingly does farm work.
Seriously though, this is great so far. Wind Rider makes an excellent antagonist and I can't wait to learn more about this world you've introduced us to.
Killer set-up! I'm hooked. Can't wait to see where you take this one.
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Here's hoping I can finish this one before the deadline ^^
10401215 You and me both man 😅 This contest is unprecedented. Everyone who enters wins! Unbelievable.
I’m excited to see where this will go!
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Thank you!
Second Division of what?
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Yes.
Good chapter! I’m excited to see we here this will head
It’s OK Rainbow, You did good, it’s just that your methods were fast but sloppy. You need to work on your accuracy. I’m sure AJ thought you were good, she’s just seen better. Patience, don’t do anything stupid.
What the hay kind of name is Dash? How’d a pony like you pass selection?
How many chapters overall do you expect this to be?
Ah, you're finally writing this again, yay! I've been looking forward to this.
Whoops! That actually confused me for a while.
A lone quotation mark appears!
In seriousness: while it was really nice to finally see some action sequences, and to see Wind Rider get knocked down a peg, that felt rather sudden. I hope that's not the end of the story: what's the fallout from this? What happens next?
Also:
I personally think that that sentence would benefit from some exclamation marks to emphasize the action.
Hope this doesn't sting too much.
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O7
There's like one more resolution chapter probably? Definitely hoping to wrap this up soon because I really dropped the ball on actually finishing it lmao