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Steel Quill


A pony with too much time on his hooves and too much plot to work with, in more ways than one. Porn Pope (TM). Also on FA!

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...aaaand now I'm even more into MILFS!

Thank you for such a hot read! This is definitely going in my Favorites!

You're very welcome! I'm glad you got to enjoy it. :twilightsmile:

Reading this, it appears that hazard is just lying about the pregnancy stuff, she is just there to recieve the census, and tell them this story, adding the fun part too, so he will just go away, is a though, Bell may go to the hospital to confirm her statement, and all may true, who knows, thouhg this fic was very good dude, i wouldn't mind a sequel, it certanly has the potential for many chapters.

It's a good story folks, take it from the chief editor. I went over ever work,d anD I'm happy to see how much better it was from even the absolute thrill l ride it was before.

Read it, fav it, slap it in your will, Hazard's a joy to see when she's working her carnal magic.

And thank you again, Steel Quill, for a fantastic FIMFic.

Such A Hot Story!
Definitely One Of My Favorites.
Excellent Work Steel!

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Thank you both so much! And thank you again, Vis, for your editing work. It really helped to polish this up.

Oof. đź‘Ś

I. Hazard....
Is this an scp fiction?
I haven't finished the story yet, but I'll feel like I can call it here.

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It is not an SCP story, I'm afraid, far from it. :twilightsheepish:

I do love a thicc horny milf fiction
And I've yet to see a sub-par upload.

I really liked this! So creative and interesting. Good characters, nice simple story, and pretty sexy.

This was a lovely read! In my view at least one of your best works so far lately ♥
Not that they are not amazing, they are but yeah really loved this read

Hopefully there will be a continue or more like this.

This is beautiful stuff. Very hot.

Teach me, senpai

Steel Quill... There's a name I've seen around. Honestly never been a huge fan of MILF's - I like em young and restless, ya feel me? But you seem like a good chap and this seems like a pretty good story. Time to do my thing and give it some longform commentary.

But others have no such background; they’re registered as civilians, legal and proper. But there are holes: lacking details of parentage, who raised them, et cetera.”

The first and only time I've seen et cetera spelled out like that in pony fiction. Heh.

I’m a member of Canterlot’s Census workforce, helping to keep a proper measurement of populations across her majesty’s kingdom.

It is proper to capitalize Her Majesty which is an honorific like 'Doctor' or 'Senator' when used in specific reference to an individual. In the United States, it would be like referring to "Mister President".

...maybe he should look into that vacation option again sometime.

“...well...formally speaking, we refer to her as I. Hazard.”

“...does she work in a field of eye protection?”

This error comes up a lot in this story. New paragraph or sentence, you must capitalize the first word. The ellipses are also very excessive throughout.

Bell took a moment to gaze about the front walkway. It was a humble home, with a small garden growing in front of the window, young tomatoes still resting amongst the vines with a healthy shade of green. Their mailbox, carrying only the name “Hazard” across the metallic blue container,

Comma after metallic.

She was older than him, yet there was a serene grace in her looks. The royal blue eyeshadow offered a mature touch to her stare, with a touch of blue lipstick that brought out the fullness of her lips as she smiled. Her fur was a butterscotch shade, light but easy on the eyes.

That is a lovely description.

Hazard’s tail was bound up in a tight ball, rolled up and held in place by a blue bow that, again, matched with her previous accessories. It seemed to be a favored color of the butterscotch mare.

This is a great example of LUS that actually works correctly in context. You love to see it.

They were a darker shade of brown compared to the rest of her fur, matching with the small splotches of brown that dotted her hind legs and forelegs.

Overly verbose: I'd cut down the end to say 'her four legs'.

He ducked his head, face burning red. A quick guilty glance of the eyes betrayed him as she shifted, the hefty teats giving a small jiggle of movement. He swore he could even see a droplet of fluid building at one of the nipples-

Period at the end.

The saddlebag slid off of him and fell to the floor, papers sliding out from the opened flap while his cock slapped against his thigh, throbbing to life.

Nice equine behavior reference.

I do find it interesting given the prevalence of so many humanizing descriptions like "children" and the presence of so much human technology but you are an anthro guy at heart, so I can cut you some slack.

“Come and get some, sugar. Momma’s got plenty to offer you.” she purred, and he throbbed from the way her voice caressed his hearing.

Comma after you, not a period.

Lust overrode the feeble objections in the back of his mind as he moved over to her, standing overtop the wanton mare and letting his cock rub against her impressive mounds.

You are either very lucky or very Canadian because 'overtop' doesn't scan as a word in American English but it does in Canadian.

You are therefore technically correct which is the best kind of correct.

“B-but...protection?” he asked.

“You don’t need that with me.”

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I might be on a safe day.

What she isn't saying is that it might be her day to go into town and buy a safe. She's not one for trusting banks with her money.

“Until then, miss Hazard.”

You wrote one banger of a fic! Liked and favorited.

I really like your narration. It reminds me of my omniscient narrator days back in 2015. Pretty descriptions of colors and shapes are a nice aid, especially in your work featuring OC's. IH comes off as genuinely alluring and I say this as a guy who is in no way attracted to MILF's generally. You've impressed me; this is the hottest I've gotten reading someone else's clop in a very long time indeed. Great job!

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If there is one thing I love, it’s a thorough commentary. Thank you so much! I’ll be sure to improve and put the effort into its sequel!

“If there’s a mare offended at being called pretty by a handsome fella like you, I’ve yet to meet them. Relax, hun.” She told him,

You obviously haven’t met Heartbreak.

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