Rarity smirked as she answered, "Yes, we shall darling. Yes. We. Shall..."

oh frick this is starting out like an harem anime

im ok with this being a herd

Uh oh........ methinks a love hexagon is forming.

Something that's always bothered me with warrior/soldier HiE stories is how the author's always make the Main character immediately kneel before the princesses.

You'd NEVER see a warrior or soldier kneel before foreign rulers. Sure they'd bow their heads or show respect as according to their own custom, but never kneel unless it was their own Royalty.

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As I think about it, you see absolutely correct. While that certainly was the intention of it being a sign of respect, I not only screwed up the words, but I associated the kneeling with respect, not loyalty.

At the time, I was thinking of how kinghts and kings used to kneel down before the Pope and kiss his feet. Now that I think about it though, even that doesn't make sense, since that was more of a pledge of loyalty to the Pope than a respectful gesture.

I keep forgetting that the history and culture of soldiers are absolutely vital to this story, and I actually need the think about accuracy before posting.

I'll get this fixed ASAP. Thank you once again for pointing out my mistakes.

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The change has been made. Let me know if you see anything else

As he stepped off the train, he could hear his body crack as he stretched from his long train ride. After his meeting with the Princess', he was given some supplies and a free train ticket and promptly sent on his way. As he was leaving the castle, a mare, who seemingly worked for the Princess, approached him and handed him a box. Thanking the mare, he had set his stuff down and promptly opened the box. He was pleased to find his uniform and helmet, along with his weapons and equipment.

Wasn’t he already wearing his uniform

Can't wait to see more of this

The timid mare nodded, his soft pink hair blowing gently in the wind. Ignoring how ironic her name was, he told her, "Well, Fluttershy, you have a very pretty name."

Her name isn't ironic. Or she isn't acting in a way for it to be ironic. She would have to be more outspoken, ie gushing at how he's a different species she has never seen before, like she did with Spike for it to be ironic.

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Duely noted. I'll have to do that for the next chapter that includes her. I kind of forgot about that completely, so that's on me. Thanks for letting me know!