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Ice Star


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What is colder than the stone of a statue? Discord knows, and he cannot tell a soul.

All he can do is remember, alone, what it was like to love and envy.


A reading of this story by StraightToThePointStudios is available! The title is derived from this song. Please blame ChappedPenguinLips, Soaring, and FamousLastWords for the source of the inspiration. Contribute to the TVTropes page!

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Any second now, probably by morning this will hit the featured page
I loved this! Thank you :twilightsmile:

The prose in this one is certainly very, very... purple. So purple in fact that I think it might spontaneously sprout wings and get a new playset (batteries not included) castle of it's own around the third/fourth season! :moustache:

10392436
Can you tell the future, cause this is featured. :rainbowhuh:

I know that half the point of these kind of stories is for the reader to try and figure out exactly just how the characters actually feel about each other and how they're painted by the writer, but I feel like some of the "confusion" created by the dialog is exactly how we're supposed to see it.

It feels like not even Discord knows how he feels about Celestia, or how she, him, and it builds up the idea of two, all-powerful beings who don't have a clue what they're doing.

Great take, wish there was more.

"Follies of Youth" is a very apt chapter title! I want to echo what 10393107 said--the ambiguity to Discord's internal monologue strikes me very much like that of a young person thrown into a situation so complicated they're unable to really parse it out, thus leading him to act rashly. It toes the line of being incomprehensible but never goes over. Well done, thank you for sharing!

10392436
You're very welcome. When you first posted this comment I would have scoffed at the idea of this getting featured. It's shorter than the usual mark of featured one-shots, has the sad tag, and just has about a dozen other little indicators that don't scream featured material to me. Then again, the featured box is quite fickle with what gets in, of all my stories.

Thank you for taking the time to read my story, and to everyone else who kept this in the box so gosh-darn long. I'm actually scared how well this ended up turning out.
10392473
I understand that this comment is meant to be confusion of some kind, but I'm not sure what you're confused by. Is there a particular part that you feel was particularly perplexing? I'm sure that if you're more specific, it can be put to rest super easy.

10392747
I have plenty of other Discord/Celestia stories published. A few ideas are sitting around my google drive, though they're not super high priority stuff I'm racing to finish. This was just an idea that demanded to be written as it struck me. There is no direct sequel planned, but not all of the ideas in the brainstorming/half-written stages are one-shots if that makes you feel any better.

My other romance stories that aren't Discord/Celestia feature a ton of other fun pairings too. They're all teen and everyone rated (except for an M-Rated horror story) so there should be something for everybody.

10392778
Considering the writing I produce with more editing behind it and just... when I'm more awake, I'm more surprised that this got called purple compared to... erm, my hundred plus other stories. Honestly, I'm more surprised by that than the feature.

10392963
That's what I was thinking! Hopefully, they keep telling it right, too!


10393107

I know that half the point of these kind of stories is for the reader to try and figure out exactly just how the characters actually feel about each other and how they're painted by the writer, but I feel like some of the "confusion" created by the dialog is exactly how we're supposed to see it.

This is an interesting take! I thought that I made the fact that the feelings were well-realized, just slow-growing, and that neither party ever acted upon them, though not for any specific reason. It was just that by the time these two ran into one another again, they became something that the other both recognized and was threatened by. My guess is that the confusion came from a) I wrote this around midnight seriously wtf me and b) I tried to offer a few tidbits to suggest these two realized their feelings at the speed of molasses. Feel free to correct me if either of these assumptions were wrong, though.

It feels like not even Discord knows how he feels about Celestia, or how she, him, and it builds up the idea of two, all-powerful beings who don't have a clue what they're doing.

Kind of, yeah! I normally focus more on Celestia, partially just because she's easier to write, but they just... they're all over the place. As organized as they may think they are, they often deny themselves what feels more vulnerable.

Great take, wish there was more.

If you want to read more, just click here. I have a lot of Luna/Sombra stories you might like too, if you're super big into in-depth looks at long-lived characters in love and what leads them there and after. (I'd try to say more but I dunno if I'd end up spoiling stuff if you ever decide to check this stuff out.)

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"Follies of Youth" is a very apt chapter title! I want to echo what Hyperon_Ion said--the ambiguity to Discord's internal monologue strikes me very much like that of a young person thrown into a situation so complicated they're unable to really parse it out, thus leading him to act rashly.

Thank you! Funnily enough, this popped into my notifications just as I added your most recent story to my read it later. I'm glad I was able to get even Discord to convey a sense of youngness and immaturity without writing him the way I wrote him as an actual child here. And that I nailed complicated feelings! Even at past midnight, I can do something right, woo!

It toes the line of being incomprehensible but never goes over.

This feels like a way of saying 'Ice Star please do the edit more kthnxbye' and honestly, probably, yes.

Well done, thank you for sharing!

Thank you for reading! There are only 111 other stories if you want to check another out.

10393575 Haha you killed it dude! Hope you like my recent story too. Drop me a comment if you get a chance ;)

10393830
I sure will! (And holy heck how is this still getting so much attention?)

10393835 It's a good story! Your great choice of cover art sure helps, but I think the dynamic you strike between Celestia and Discord is a really fascinating one to think about. I don't think there's enough fanfics of them interacting together. A lot of writers play their relationship as purely antagonistic/rivalry-based, but there is so much potential for more.

10393842
I’m just totally in awe that it’s this little piece. I’ve used the concepts and dynamics in other stories before... and it just is so close to my usual lush 1st person prose that I figured it would be such a turnoff to anyone who wants the site’s brand of the Usual (tm).

Hit or miss reception continues to perplex me.

10393846 What even is this site's usual? I've seen so many niche weird fics make it I don't even know anymore :rainbowlaugh:

I think it does have to do a lot with prose. Straightforward styles like gapjaxie's tend to fare better cuz they're easy to read in small chunks as opposed to more floral writing. I'd be curious to see what the average read-time per session would be, if fimfic's algorithm could track that. I'll bet it's five minutes or less.

10393856
Porn/comedy/Slice of life/humans/not Sombra/the same 20 ships and 17 are probably lesbian ones/underage content/“I read ‘On Writing’ and will never deviate from the Bible I see it as during my writing journey” is very much the usual for this site. Other than dipping into comedy and slice of life on occasion, I don’t write that way.

That, and simple prose is a death sentence to me. I can certainly tone mine down (and I have, especially for some characters) but I’m not going to put mine down like a dying dog. It’s just not the Ice Star way! :raritydespair:

10393867 Uh oh you have personally attacked me for having "On Writing" tattoo'd on my bicep for easy reading at any time. Time to do some more blow and write a scathing rebuttal without any adverbs.

In seriousness, I turned off mature stories awhile ago and my feature box is no worse off for it. The spike of views you get when you write mature is intoxicating, that's for sure. Not to vibe any clop writers! I think a lot of site-goers have a clop phase, which most outgrow.

10393873

In seriousness, I turned off mature stories awhile ago and my feature box is no worse off for it.

My stories used to only appear in the SFW box, like they were pulled in to clean up a mess last minute. I’ve only had a couple stories really make both boxes, and I guess now it’s starting to attract attention.

But yeah 99% of finding my stuff seems to be either “you write SFW” or “you write that gore stuff sometime” as far as I can tell.

The spike of views you get when you write mature is intoxicating, that's for sure.

>has never had a popular mature story
>oops all gore

10393876 Man I used to be so obsessed with getting featured, it was bad! :twilightblush: Now that the show has stopped I wonder if the amount of readers will change in relationship to the number of writers. My guess is there will come a time when nearly every active user on this site is a writer to one degree or another.

10393901
Getting featured has always been such a surprise to me, even though I've been on here for years. I'm just not used to all the attention, and certainly not so much at once. It's just too fickle and far between. I just write, y'know?

Holy crap, this is good and weirdly thought-provoking!

Gonna let this one sink in and then re-read it in a few days.

10394067
I AM BOTH EXCITED AND MIDLY PERPLEXED AS TO WHY THIS IS SO ATTENTION GRABBING!

e n j o y

Will read. And now it has exactly 800 veiws!

Nothin' like a deep lovely fic that can get to your core! MMM, quite a nice little read to really make you think! I hope ya didn't mind, but I made a little reading on this interesting story of yours!

Audio Linky!: https://youtu.be/weB87llMKa0

(I Don't Mean To Offend Anyone With This Comment In Any Way!)

10394547
Thank you so much! Once the reading has premiered, I'll be sure to link the finished version in the story description. It's quite the honor to finally have you comment on one of my stories with how often I've seen you around.

I both like it, and am confused...

Nice.

10409036
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Though, is there any particular part that confused you?

10409391
just the way it was written. i had to slowly read a few areas repeatedly due to odd sentence structure. but i liked it. I kinda have been looking for a really well written romance story for these two.

10409739
Oh, so it was a matter of style. I did get a couple of comments that I felt were leaning toward the style being odd. Yours was probably the first to clearly frame it though, so thank you for that.

I have a couple of other stories that are already published and focus on the relationship between Discord and Celestia if you want to read them. There are some more stories planned, but I don't know when I will be able to publish them, so I'm hesitant to offer anything beyond a ', yes there will be more eventually'.

10409760
EEEEEE *dives into your stories for more dislestia!*

10411175
Enjoy! I have lots of horse romance.

This deserved so many more likes.

So good.

10434890
Oh gosh, this is actually one of my most liked stories so I’m not sure how much more liked it can be! :twilightblush:

10434963

Considering I have a 1000+ like story that's a piece of trash, this deserves at least 2000 likes minimum.

Seriously, this is the type of fic that makes me love this site :twilightsmile:

10434974
Thank you so much! I really hope you like my other stuff.

A nice little stream of thought, frozen in time...

10438002
Did you just do what I think you did? 👀

Who made the cover art for this? I can't seem to find the artist's name.

10462786
Their DA is deactivated. I linked the derpibooru page because that was where I was able to find the image outside of my Google Drive. Here it is: https://derpibooru.org/images/453500

10462790

Oh, so you didn't commission this from the artist?

If not, then thanks! I'd love to get a commissioned pic from this artist.

10462793
The artist appears to have quit the fandom some time ago. I wish I had commissioned the picture! If you want to read a story with art I've specifically commissioned/had made for the story I would try Song of Myself, The Care and Keeping of Hidden Castles, and Body Snatchers. I have a couple of other stories with art specific for my stories, but they're longer stuff with art that was usually a gift.

10462802

The artist appears to have quit the fandom some time ago.

What a shame. Because they seem good.

I wish I had commissioned the picture!

The pic fit so perfectly with the story I naturally assumed it was commissioned haha.

If you want to read a story with art I've specifically commissioned/had made for the story I would try Song of Myself, The Care and Keeping of Hidden Castles, and Body Snatchers. I have a couple of other stories with art specific for my stories, but they're longer stuff with art that was usually a gift.

Thanks. I'll check 'em out :twilightsmile:

10462943
I wrote the story with the picture in mind.

Thank you! I hope you enjoy them.

jmj

I loved the imagery. I've always thought you were talented, though. Your stories always rank in the higher tiers. What gets me is you have an absolute ton of stories and they never disappoint. Kind of like Harlan Ellison. He would sit down and write out some magnificent piece of literature in an hour with no ideas going into it. Wish I had that ability.

10522968
Broski, this is such high praise! Thank you so very much.

This is REALLY good and I'm somewhat angry that this didn't get the attention that it deserved

10584822
It got featured and over 100 upvotes, that’s more than I can say for the vast majority of my stories. I’m not sure what kind of reception people wanted this one to have any more! :twilightblush:

No, he just craved that taste of victory, the idea that he could be a being of effortless like a little white filly of grace and poise who grew into an ethereal mare

An effortless what? Missing a word there, bro.

I think this might be my favorite of your DisLestia stories. There's such an old-world feel to this prose. An almost otherworldy feel to it. I think it's the masterful use of the evocative third-person limited style, coupled with some of the vocabulary, that lends to that. Lines like:

She spoke of him as a child, with her sister as her own ghost, though neither of them could know death. His own friend had a war declared on him and his grand design of un-design and disorder. In doing so, she who thought herself so adult made him a child.

This is the kind of delicious prose that I just gobble up. So esoteric and winding, like a serpent coiling across the pages. Like Discord himself. It also kind of hides and reveals its meaning as the story goes on. Again, fitting for the character whose eyes we are seeing through.

The implication that Discord was worshipped by the ancestors of Saddle Arabians is something that stuck out to me, in a good way. Makes me think of Tiamat and Marduk... or even Lucifer himself. Creating the world out of chaos and bringing only more. If Discord were God, that's the type of God he would be.

Really love your take on the deistic characters of the show (mostly Discord and the alicorns thus far). It's always neat to see stuff that is not only in line with my own preferred interpretations, but such stuff that is done well.

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An effortless what? Missing a word there, bro.

Shit. Believe it or not, I think that 'of' might actually have been the wrong one. Reading over this, it looks it should have been 'so' instead. That is fixed now.

I'm super shocked people like something I spilled out at 1 AM and only minimally edited.

Really love your take on the deistic characters of the show (mostly Discord and the alicorns thus far). It's always neat to see stuff that is not only in line with my own preferred interpretations, but such stuff that is done well.

And to think, you haven't gotten to the main stories yet, where this is the fuckin' bread and butter of it. The lore only gets thiccer from here, dummy thiccer.

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