Trixie's Father's Final Show

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Was Trixie's last magic show with her father a failure, a catastrophe, or a new beginning?

Nopony ever gives Trixie credit for her greatest act.

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Flora Blossom

Flora Blossom #1 · Aug 23rd, 2020 · · · Pattie ·

First comment.

dark humor is my kind of thing.... I'm desperate to read this which I have. Although you could use [+h+r] that gives you a line itself (Cross out the + signs) it should look like this

well, the story seems alright. Not a big fan of thrillers though, but... that's just me... maybe in the future I may write one.

Phaoray

Phaoray #2 · Aug 23rd, 2020 · · · Pattie ·

Not a bad read. A bit too dark for my normal tastes, but it was well done. This also does work with how messed up of a pony Trixie can be sometimes and how little she connects with others.

LunaJack

LunaJack #3 · Aug 24th, 2020 · · · Pattie ·

I think it's good. Reminds me of reading "Water for Elephants".

Ditz

Ditz #4 · Aug 27th, 2020 · · · Pattie ·

While clear where it was going, the way you wrote really kept me reading. Something about the lack of emotion out of Trixie as if she were retelling the story about herself. Relying on implications without clearly going into details, I feel you really did a nice job on this one.

Definitely a little dark, but not over-the-top like a bunch of stories like this like to do. Good work!

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