Good start, love the intro - and NICE TWIST at the end, there! Completely caught me off-guard!

Looking forward to seeing where this goes; kudos to you!

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Thank you kindly! I appreciate the comment and I'm glad the twist worked the way I wanted it to. ^^

Second chapter is already in the making, too, so stay tuned!~

damn this is good good. excited to read the next installment!

I haven't finished this chapter, but so far it just feels really... dull.

It's not the worse thing ever written, but so far it isn't really doing a good job at hooking my attention due to feeling like it's trying to heavily emulate the first chapter of FoE (and emulate it without figuring out what made that chapter work).

When I first read the part where Tink was snooping around his dad's room, I noticed the bit where it said he didn't see any negative emotions coming off of him but didn't think much of it at the time.

Very nice hinting.