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underrated Drake


Just a regular guy who has very little knowledge on MLP but a lot of creativity.

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I am loving this so far and can't wait to see where this goes this had a fun and interesting beginning.

Wow this was a epic and fun chapter all I I can say is I'm happy Sunset changed back and that I feel for her and understand by she changed.

Very interesting on making Twilight the main character this time around. I am curious on how your gonna introduce Spike in this one, though at the same time, I'm a little worried that your gonna have him completely steal the spotlight from her once he does show up.

The team is gaining momentum and new teammates!

This was a awesomely wild and fun chapter, I'm happy Pinkie joined the team. I wonder who's will join next.

Ever since the end of the battles between kingdoms in Equestria,

Will we get a prequel story elaborating on this?

This was epic and fun chapter 1 I'm happy Fluttershy is not only ok and those assholes got what they day deserved. I'm also happy she joined the team and there new overall scores. I can't wait to see who joins the team next.

Slowly but growing to a formidable team!

Here’s what I think is gonna happens next after forming the team, Twilight and Sunset went to the dragonlands and there they meet Dragon Lord Torch and Ember, and ember is a leader of the most popular and strongest gladiator team of Dragons in Equestria, and the best one is none other than Spike who is the smartest, powerful, handsome, and strongest

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Maybe, maybe not, the only way of knowing is to keep reading, I'll make it worth your time

Maybe Spike is a 'Diamond in the Rough'?

Awesome. Good chapter and glad to see Sunset good again

Woot! This was a lore/ action packed chapter. Love it

This was a beyond epically heart pumping lore chapter, this was a blast. Looks like AJ mite be next.

Aj in coming and I suspect a sunset vs Big Mac rematch

“The male furthest to the right, next to the other girl, is Big Mac’s and Applejack’s cousin, Bright Mac…” said Sugar Belle as the girls saw him using a special treadmill that included obstacles, which he avoided with such ease, it almost seemed illegal to be so agile ‘He is also a 1st division gladiator, and a darn good one, yet, he has only ever finished in the mid section of the log, since he isn’t particularly strong, but he is coordinated, almost TOO coordinated,” said Sugar Belle

“And finally, the girl next to him, using the punching bag is Bright Mac’s wife, Little Strongheart…” said Granny Smith as they saw the girl pommuling the punching bag left and right, her arms moving so fast, they were barely visible “She is a 2nd division Gladiator, actually, she would be a 1st division, but was on maternity leave for 3 years, so she never took part in the promotion battle, until this season, she is first place of the Marexas arena, she is fast and strong, plus, the only word she doesn’t understand is “quit”, out of everyone, I feel bad for whoever has to fight her,” said Granny Smith as they turned to face the girls, who were completely pale.

1) Don't you mean Braeburn? Bright Mac is Applejack and Big Mac's father.

2) Also, I noticed that this story is in the Spike's Harems group, but so far, we haven't seen a single sign of Spike. Will he appear soon?

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Maybe also, thanks for pointing that out, type half of this chapter on my phone, autocorrect came in.

Pegasy is plural, and it's with a "I".

You need a proofreader.

“Giving birth,” said Pinkie

“Gladiator related darling,” said Rarity

“Oh… I have nothing,” said Pinkie

1) You mentioned Pinkie twice. Was Fluttershy supposed to say that last line?

“To the starting line,” said Rainbow Dash as she opened the door to a roaring crowd cheering as another team was being kicked out of the first step

“Wait! You want us to start now?” asked Rainbow Dash

2) Did you mean Twilight? It sounds like RD was talking to herself.

1 Those were Pinkie's lines, 2) my bad

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Twilight Sparkle 27 5’7” (1.68M) 37 - 28 - 40 Field General Sunset Shimmer 27 5’9” (1.75M) 39 - 31 - 40 Paladin Pinkie Pie 27 5’8” (1.72M) 40 - 31 - 42 Winger/Tank Fluttershy 26 5’6” (1.67M) 45 - 30 - 39 Defender Rarity Belle 28 5’7” (1.69) 44 - 32 - 32 Defender Applejack 28 5'9" (1.75) 43 - 30 - 40 Warrior/Tank/Winger Big Macintosh 30 7'0" (2.15) Tank Rainbow Dash 29 5’4” (1.62M) Warrior/Winger

You also forgot Rainbow Dash's BWH measurements.

1) Sorry, misinterpreted.

I though she hate pies: the deserts not the family.

Still excited for this and overlord to update there gonna be good

Love this and you got me there was not expecting old man Red to be used

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Red isn't Redsopine, he is yet to make a debut, he'd be around Spike's age... I actually left a small spoiler about him.

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Ah il need to re read but yikes gonna need google translate for half this chapter

(accent) One long, extravagantly, compelling, must-see, tale of a story later.

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