• Published 23rd Jul 2020
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Going out with a boom - Shaslan

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The end

“Holy horseapples, look!”

Thunderhead’s excited shriek reclaimed Scootaloo’s attention from the papers she was grading. Thunderhead was out of his desk, test abandoned, face pressed tight against the window of the classroom. The other students were starting to shift as well, and those closest to the windows were scrambling over to see what Thunderhead was looking at. Scootaloo knew she had to move fast. Thunderhead was a chronic disruptor — much like Scootaloo had been at his age, Sweetie Belle liked to point out — and if she didn’t get this under control fast the whole class would forget what they were doing and she’d have to make them start the test from scratch.

“Thunderhead, sit down!” Scootaloo tried to make her voice sound stern. She usually tried for a chill approach with the students, but Celestia knew she needed to sound authoritative right now.

“Miss Scootaloo, you have to see this!” Thunderhead insisted.

More and more of the students were hurrying over to the windows now. Scootaloo sighed, and stood up from her seat, giving her wings a threatening buzz as she went. At least, she hoped it was coming off as threatening.

She walked over to Thunderhead, fully prepared to drag him away if she had to. “I don’t think Headmare Starlight will be pleased to hear what you’re—”

Her words cut off mid-flow as she caught sight of what Thunderhead was looking at. Outside the window, the school grounds were awash with light of every hue. When she looked up at the sky, she gasped and her eyes filled with tears. A tidal wave of rainbow power was washing over Ponyville, the curve of it so vast she couldn’t even begin to guess at where the epicentre would be. The heavens were alight with radiant power, so raw Scootaloo could feel the electricity from here. She hadn’t seen one of these in decades. A sonic rainboom.

“What is it, Miss?” Thunderhead demanded, tugging at her foreleg.

Tears filled Scootaloo’s eyes, and one spilled down her cheek.

“Miss Scootaloo?” Thunderhead’s tone changed to one of concern.

Scootaloo smiled through her tears, crying freely now. She knew exactly what this meant. “It’s magic, Thunderhead. It’s — it’s Rainbow Dash.”

Comments ( 28 )

Can't say I enjoy AppleDash, but you did this very well - certainly how I'd expect her to go.

Really like how this story worked out, especially with the scenes split into their respective chapters to help bring in the proper flow.

Good work, Shaslan.

Me likes this story. Even if it sad.

This is beautiful, heartwrenching, bittersweet, and wonderful. Goodbye Rainbow Dash.

I like the build-up to the conclusion of the story, though maybe a bit dragged out.

IDK. This was good. :pinkiehappy:

Great story. Loved the emotion

:moustache: And guess who had to clean up her mess? ME THAT'S WHO!
:rainbowlaugh: If YOU CAN DO A RAINBOOM AT MY AGE WITHOUT POOPING BE MY GUEST!
:duck: Before Canterlot or the Crystal castle,,
:moustache: The Boutique. . .Yes Dear
:moustache: 75th anniversary - She knew how to train her dragon
:pinkiegasp: You're all invited to Rainbows poopy rainboom party! Yea! With casket dancing!

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Wow, thank you for this comment. I'm really glad it had an impact on you.

Several times when I was reading this story, I realized I was holding my breath. Probably so I could read it without as many distractions as possible.

I love this story. Thank you for this.

I must say, I do not like appledash at all, but you shone in this story, and you managed to get a tear out of this reader, you earned my follow.

Do not,
Go gentle into that good night.
Old age,
Should rage at close of play.
Do not,
Go gentle into that good night.

Very good stuff. I totally see Rainbow taking the glory exit.

I broke my back years ago and it's almost impossible to accept that there's just things you can't do anymore.

You have a new follower.

And then Rainbow Dash for the greatest of her greatest magical accomplishment the Rainboom ascended into an eternally in her prime Alicorn preventing her from seeing and resting with Applejack in whatever pony afterlife they believe in. Well at least she’ll be able to fly and do rainbooms whenever so yay I guess

Edit- actually kinda wanna see that now lot a drama and slice of life to be had oh well to bad for me

I like how you left it ambiguous whether or not she managed to pull out in time. Sure, you built up how unlikely it was, but the possibility was open.

A very difficult subject that you handled with great delicacy and care.

Wonderful

Exactly how I'd wanna go out. Doing something I loved to do.

It's 7:48 AM, I've stayed up all night writing, and now I'm sitting here crying instead of getting my pizza out of the oven, damn you, you beautiful bastard

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Just reading the chapters following up to this I am pretty sure Dash knew well ahead she was never going to pull up in time. Whether she wanted to or not. I believe it was well beyond anything she was capable of. The impact would have been as spectacular as the sonic rainboom that preceded it.

Really would like to see her friends reactions as well as zap apple. Otherwise wonderfully told story. I definitely think this is how rainbow would have to go out,lighting up the very heavens with a magic that none other than her could produce.

This has made a man shed a tear you have a follower congrats

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I bet the crater would become a national monument, quite a hell of a way to remember one of the original six elements

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Its kinda implied that most of her friends (aside from Rarity, Twilight and I think Fluttershy), are dead.

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Here lies Rainbow Dash. And here. And here. And here. And over there. And way over yonder. And in those bushes. And over that hill...

Love the story, one thing though is I'm kind of curious as to how the rest of the gang reacted to this.

god, i'm sobbing. Thank you for this beautiful piece of art.

That does ring true in how Rainbow Dash would finish things

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