(Teen for gore towards the end)
("Reminisce: Swift Slash's Shadow" is canon with this, with permission of Neon)
After living in Ponyville for almost a year, I finally became Fluttershy's coltfriend. My life couldn't get better.
Also, a little filly would become an apprentice of mine! Finally I had somepony to teach my knowledge in combat, and I couldn't let pass such an opportunity.
But one day, all that joy went to hell, as Fluttershy dissappeared one day. She was fillynapped!
This isn't a story with a happy ending folks. Today I shall tell you, how I lost the pony I once was; how my heart and my sword, finally were stained with blood.
When my world only became blood and swords.
Please critique, comment, and rate properly!
Chapters (19)
Dont make people read your other stories before reading this one, this will just put them off
try to make each main chapter over 1000 words. Making them too short doesn't immerse the reader in your world
Yeah you dont need that, you are on a MLP fanfiction website
Hmm... Sounds interesting. I'll set this to read later. Most likely a review incoming when I get around to it.
Would you mind making an optional chapter before the prologue that summarizes any necessary information from the previous works for those who have not read them and lack the time to read them? Because while I hate starting a story midway through, I am somewhat short on time for fan fiction.
1407014
Hey you've got a point! I'm starting to get repetitive with random prologues... but I can't do it now, I have no way of making a chapter summarizing everything that can be on the top of the list of chapters, I'd have to delete everything and start from scratch (should I do that?)
1407008
I know I'm in a fanfiction site, but it's not bad to give credit either. And I do the chapters as I can, lately I have been rather clumsy with the stories...
1407217
A disclaimer may not be bad, but it's unnecessary. It greatly detracts from the appeal of your description and it some cases, can constitute an instant downvote. Believe me when I say you'd have to show quite a bit of proof before we believed that you, or anyone on this site for that matter, owned MLP.
1407248
You've got a big point, and honestly, it does detract some appeal if I look at the description carefully. Thanks for the suggestion.
I see you took mine and 1407248 's advice on removing the disclaimer
The description looks a lot neater now!
1407346
Thanks man! Did you read the story anyway? We've been just talking about the description...
1407785
not yet, but i will read the first few chapters and give you an honest review..
Just gimme a few hours first xD
Yay, the story continues! I'll be sure to read later.
1437026
Really? Well awesome! I was starting to lose hopes on this after all the dislikes it got...
Good thing there are still people liking this, thanks!
1519729
On a side note, I wanted to give Applebloom an extra scene after the battle of Ponyville, but I discarded the idea because I couldn't find a way to connect it properly to the story.
1519750
Be sure to check my other work (if you like)! Everything is cannon so far.
1520040
Sorry, I don't understand your point.
Wanna explain a little more?
1520123
Ohh I see what you did there... good one!