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"Show my head to the people, it is worth seeing." - Georges Danton

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Posh #1 · Jul 20th, 2020 · · 2 ·

Twilight and Rarity end their third date exactly how nature intended: by fucking.

Quite a feat, since, according to your cover art, they have no genitals.

JackRipper
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10343793
Where did they go

That was delightfully cozy. Also really hot, but I really like how natural the Raritwi dynamic felt.

Also Twilight as a top is always good to see.

Posh #4 · Jul 20th, 2020 · · 1 ·

10343807 Toplight Sparkle.

10343799 A farm with lots of squirrels and rabbits to chase.

Imagine minding your own business in a field somewhere when suddenly a bunch of dicks and vaginas stampede toward you.

That was hot, but also really adorable. Two thumbs up.

10343799
Mystery for the ages!

10343816 There's no mystery. I solved it already.

JackRipper
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10343813
No thanks.

Figured I'd give this a go, since I read your The Enchanted Library erotica without triggering my asexual unease, but alas, I had to skim through the sex scenes regardless. However, I adored the dialogue, and I loved how Rarity and Twilight's relationship was portrayed here. Also, first time reading a story that uses it, I'll just say that "hen" is an absolutely adorable turn of phrase.

A trap? What kind of trap?

10343982
"Trap" is often used as a fetish, including here on this site. It refers to male characters that look female, but it's frequently used as a derogatory term toward trans women. Gara is establishing that it isn't that kind of story.

10343813
I can't UN-imagine that you fuck. So thanks for that. Never gonna unsee that.

Hallelujah, someone who's willing to actually write trans mares. The extra characterization of Twilight adds so much to both partners and their relationship. It's a damn shame other writers don't have the guts to write stuff like this, but I hope this story helps them reconsider.

10343793
They put their genitals away for the sake of fimfic's TOS.

10343807
i started writing and somewhere a small Mono-like voice sung to me. "kim please make Twilight a fucking top."

10343815
Thank you very much.

10343834
i'm glad i was able to provide what enjoyment i could and thank you for the nice comment.

10344176
Oh there are plenty of authors fighting the good fight, just so few of them ever make the feature box. But if you did enjoy this i do have a few other trans eroticas and stories (though they sadly all involve humans).

10343993
depending on your background it's just anime short and for newhalf. I was quite angry off when I found out it was being used as a pejorative, kind of like how I lost faith in humanity when I found out about the ok sign. assholes need to stop appropriating terms and symbols for there one assholeishness. Buddhists can barely get away with the manji now.

So let's see what piece of degeneracy may I found in this hell hole of the site...

Vanilla

You fucking monster.

10345055
It's extremely out of character, i know.

10344484
Though the difference is that "trap" was used as a pejorative for trans women since the very beginning of its common use. Contrapoints had a good video about this, though her own questionable views make me less interested in linking her.

10345121
no, it wasn't there was an anime watching subculture that was using it benignly for years before it was a pejorative. the reason it is not brought up often is it was
A small
b lurid
c not well documented

10343834
I might have to steal that term myself. It's cute.

It's so refreshing to see genuine, well-crafted trans clop on this wasteland of a website. I've seen Rarity guiding Twilight through a nervous, self-doubting first time before, but recontextualized with a trans Twi it works incredibly well. And I'm fascinated by the way you feminized the usual epithets. "Hen" caught me off guard the first time and so did the reference to Twi's marehood, but they flowed really well afterward and made me realize just how thoughtlessly gendered genitals are in porn writing. I'll definitely put a little more thought into throwing around the word "cock" the next time I'm writing something queer.

Anyway, great fic. Sometimes a bit of vanilla is good too.

Wow, what the fuck is that dislike count, this was excellent. Is it seriously just because you had the gall to make a character trans? No one would've batted a fucking eye if it was just rule 63 or futa.

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*sips coffee* you get used to it.

10345984
Gender terms for genitals is one of my favourite tropes to deconstruct :P. i can't wait to write some trans masc stuff and see what i can do with that terminology.

I’m going to piss people off with this, so normally I’d do something utterly insane like keep my opinion to myself, but in this instance, I feel the need to address my own feelings.

I do not like this fic. Because of this, I am reluctant to upvote it.
Allow me to explain why:
This disagrees with my own understanding and feelings about the Mane 6. In my head and I have no doubt (although I have no way to prove/disprove it) within the confines of the show, the Mane 6 are and were always intended to be biologically and mentally female.
Regardless of how well-written it was, I do not like this fic because it challenges my own beliefs, and doesn’t mesh overly well with my own personal tastes.

Now here’s the kicker.
I’m going to upvote it anyway.

It is extremely rare (within my own field of vision) to see a transgender character or person these days that isn’t borderline or downright extremist. I fully understand why many folks within that circle are that way and I sympathise, but that’s my own experiences thus far.
So to read an overall fairly well-written fic that treats it “normally” is something that should be supported.
You have written this in a way that doesn’t make light of, sexualise or degrade the issues facing these individuals, while still going into details about how treatment affects those affected, while still keeping an erotic air around the fic.

This is a classic example of what this site is for. It’s a fiction site for fictional stories about fictional beings. You can create your own world. And damn if that isn’t pretty fuckin’ cool.
This is an intriguing fic, even if I personally dislike it, and I wish you the best for the future.

Comment posted by heirofaniu deleted Jul 22nd, 2020

An interesting idea. I very much like the concept but the story feels forced and stilted.

It would help if you described the location the two are in and gave more detail of what the two looked like. Another thing that could help is using Twilight and Rarity's name less. If you scroll down the story you can see a large number of the paragraphs start with either Twilight or Rarity. It ends up making this feel more like a rough script then a story.

“Well shit,” Rarity murmured, pouting out her lower lip. “I’ve become predictable.”

Ok, this story is getting a like. Possibly a favorite, we'll see hpw good the rest is.

“Tell me, what kind of genitals would you like to have tonight? I have a diversity to select from.”

Gara how are your fics always so damn quotable? have an upvote.

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