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About time Murk's life went positive! Quick, somebody make a picture of Chainlink Shackles' face when he finds out Murky doesn't work for him anymore! Please?
I just loved this chapter, I had the biggest smile thoughout pretty much the whole thing, I love how you're taking this story and hope you keep it up!
Resurrection, not just of the body, but the mind and soul as well...
Even as I am jumping for joy, I cannot help but be hesitant, for you, Fuzzy, are quite good at raising hopes high only to dash them upon the cold stone floor. As much as I enjoyed this marvelous chapter, where our characters are all together, and happy, for... well, the first time, I know all to well that it will not last. The plot has not even begun to unravel.
There's a storm a-brewing.
The bar scenes were just great. I loved Murky being all happy, and drunk Murky was just so fun. Too many little parts to point out, damn I hope to see more art of it! What few I've seen so far were good.
Ending was nice. Thank the fucking gods Protege is back! I knew at some point he'd get around to teaching Murky how to read. Though I can easily imagine Glimmer teasing Murky's "study sessions".
Generally, this chapter was great. Murky's day of rest doubles as our emotions day of rest as well. Easily one of my favourite chapters. It's just so damn great getting a happy Murky! Worth the wait, in my opinion.
SO MUCH HAPPY
Shame it won't last for too long, though. Shackles is still out there. But at least for now, everything is just fine. And Murky's finally learning how to read!
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I think this would be a good start...
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I am also waiting for the hammer to drop...
Remember, it is not a party unless someone is chundering...
I love the new development with Murky and Protégé. I am glad to see he made a comeback after the riot/uprising. I do find his willingness to "help" Murky by making him a "personal assistant" somewhat suspicious; keeping him enslaved because it is the "right" thing to do.
yeah totally glad you've gone and updated this bastard! now i have to wait for another 3 weeks, which is reasonable
Urgh, this will be a long night...
We need art of that birthday scene. Now. Brim in a party hat is too silly to imagine properly.
I have this strong feeling of pride from watching Murky become so much stronger. He's been dragged through the mud in the worst possible ways (seriously, I'm currently trying to re-evaluate my thoughts on who has it worse between him and Blackjack), but to see him come out of it all and be happy like this made sticking through the dark times oh so worth it.
Also, I think you single-handedly justified Pinkie's "Watching you forever" line with her parting words. Tears brimming in my eyes!
Love how the story's going, and it's good to see Protégé making a return. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Oh god things are actually going well. RUN MIURKY when things start to go well in the Equestrian Wasteland it can only mean that something twice as bad is going to happen next!
Well....
Dat just happened.
Now I need to find a mop...
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Mentioned this in the /mlp/ thread but I just missed you, and then the thread died.
It's a minor thing but I feel like you're laying the "there's a political storm brewing" bit on a little too heavy in the first part of this chapter. It's like every character has to bring it up and mention it in case we missed it the first time. I think we kind of already figured something was happening and didn't really need to be told, and Murky seemed to know too. I feel like you could be a lot more vague on that point without any more than a line from Protege about things changing. I don't know. It just felt like first Murky tells us there's a lot of inner politics about to happen, then Wormtail tells us about it, then Murky reflects on it again, and then Protege tells us a couple times. Unless the angle you're going for is to pull the rug out and make the politics irrelevant to us, or as a changing point for someone like Protege to realize how pointless they might be and get out, then you could probably be a little more subtle on the point.
Loved this chapter. Gushed about it endlessly in the /mlp/ threads already so I'll try not to too much here. I love what you did with Pinkie. She's always seemed the most tragic in these fics because of how her story ended, dying alone and friendless knowing the future that was likely coming and being powerless to stop it. In this little chapter you brought a closure to her character in the FO:E fics that no one else has managed.
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Thanks for the feedback, that's actually a pretty handy observation to be aware of coming into next chapter. I'll do a little thought and look into it to avoid that becoming a more widespread thing. Thanks man!
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It's very satisfying to write that as well. It's been great to share a build in character like this as he grows up a little inside. :)
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Thanks for the big appreciation there! It was a very fun chapter to write for that precise reason. Even I get to have a little entertainment and just make a positive chapter for it all sometime. :P
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THIS IS SO AWESOME I COULD JUST %*#/%*#*#*#@@@####.......
Noticed some mistakes in Pinkie Pie's speech. "of" instead of "off" and a missing word in one place. Might want to quickly go over that again.
So, I guess now we just wait for the soul-crushing despair to return to your words. ...Unless it's not coming back? Do we dare to dream?
FUZZY!
Hi.
Got a new computer so now I can read it on Gdocs (oh happy day!) and enjoy it on the day of it's release. I could tell by the title of the chapter alone I was going to see my favorite character make a triumphant return. I'm also glad to see that it isn't all doom and gloom for Murky and I have to commend you on your ability to paint a picture with your words alone, and if a picture's worth a thousand words, I'm certain you (and Murky for that matter) have more to say than anybody. I honestly don't think I've ever laughed harder at written word and I think my vocal chords may have snapped right about here:
I also saw on Gdocs "rough planning up to finale" and just wanted to know what chapter that would be. Like 30-ish? Guess all things must come to an end, huh?
One final thing that's been bugging me though has to be this:
***POSSIBLE SPOILERS AHEAD***
Ever since the chapter where they had to excavate a stable and Glimmerlight said something along the lines of technology has a habit of picking its owner, not the other way around, I haven't been able to shake the feeling that Sundial is one of Murky's ancestors. It just fits too much for me.
Sky Dancer and Murky are both blond pegasi.
My prediction is simply that Sundial didn't have enough funds to get Sky Dancer and himself a ticket, so he bought a ticket and gave it to Sky Dancer who was already pregnant by the time she reached the stable. I also think that Sundial placed the messages in his Pipbuck specifically for a pegasus since messages only play when there is a substantial change in elevation, i.e. taking flight.
This would also mean that Murky is related to Weathervane which I just find... strangely adorable.
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Glad you found the humour good, I did want to go all out for the light heartedness this chapter. Sometimes a bit of humour is just as important for a while.
While I refuse to be drawn on theories for right or wrong, I will simply say I love that you're looking nto it like this to try and find things. As I said, no comment on whether you're piecing together coincidence or spotting something deeper...but I'm glad you feel it has that sort of readability. Thank you.
I... I don't believe it. You are a wizard, Fuzzy. That's the only possible explanation.
Taking the boogymare of the city, the incongruously cheerful and macabre seer who was the stuff of nightmares and making her a human (pony? O.o) character. In FoE, she was the strung-out druggie who flung a light into the future and eventually got it right. She was the pony who abducted and interrogated anyone even remotely suspicious with a zeal that rivaled senator McCarthy. She was Equestria's gestapo. Her investigations included her friends and their departments. She was practically Big Brother, if only his eyes, ears and fist.
And you managed to make me feel not just pity for her, but a genuine sense of warmth. Words fail me at describing this transition from a piece of creepy scenery in the city (starting with the FunFarm) to a fully-fledged being who has been with Murky from the beginning. The letter did a little for her, but the scene (complete with song and dance!) blew me away. This is a towering accomplishment, even more than Pinkie's Rube Goldberg machine. Bra-vo!
Moving to another scene that tipped my view was the party. I believed that Murk was considerably younger than what you have portrayed him. (I assumed he was around the human equivalent of 7-15, but this chapter made me realize that he is somewhere in his late teens at his youngest.) The combination of size, meekness, innocence and inability (I'd say unwillingness, but he's tried) to swear was the main piece of this theory, and was compounded by his more simplistic thoughts when Shackles began breaking him in earnest. It's refreshing to see that I was wrong in regard to his age, as the idea of a 7 year old planting live grenades in a pony's pocket (I still love the death of Barb) severely dampened the accomplishment.
It was also awesome to see that party, as it indeed was a piece of Murky we didn't get to see in earnest. There have been glimpses in the past, but nothing more than a moment of cheekiness. This on the other hand, was something that was sustained long enough to enjoy. Even in this moment of 'rest', Murky grew as a character.
It seems like Murk is also mirroring Protege with that flip-out sight. Though the mounting and functions are different, this could be used by comedic effect. (Especially if Murky wants to tease/mock Protege by imitating him.) With that said, I did pick up on the fact that Protege seemed to only talk to Murky. He's had Ragini for the duration of this epic, but she seems mostly unapproachable (albeit we are seeing her from her interactions with Murky. It'd be nice to have an interaction between the two that solidified whether the relationship was strictly business, or there was something else at play). In regards to Protege though... I really feel sorry for the guy. He did his time and joined Red Eye, and invested so much of himself into the 'betterment' of Philly that doing anything else seems a waste. (His name, eyepiece and belief in Red Eye's city eventually returning to civilization are core parts of his character.) When he dismissed Murky, he did so without rage. The way he told Murky to leave was closer to "I need time to think". I'll ruminate on the effects of that as later chapters come up.
And finally, well, I hope Murky does not tell Doc. Weathervane that his son is dead. I think any pride the doc would feel in his son serving Equestria is more than mitigated by the fact that Sundial didn't make it. Having Weathervane go off the deep end would effectively remove the ability for the group to heal or reset. The sorrow would not be worth the truth.
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On a different note, did you see the cover Mech busted out!?! That thing is AWESOME! (It captures small little Murky quite well, I think.)
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Thank you a whole bunch for the wealth of feedback there! I always love to really hear in depth what people thought of elements. Pinkie was a tough balance. I didn't want to seek to justify everything she did as that's a part of the core FOE world and it is not my place to ever retcon Kkat's creation. I just wanted to show that in the end, it's still Pinkie Pie and she doesn't bear that Element of Laughter for no reason. That there was perhaps a little side to it that could still shine in her more well meaning aspect. As you said, 99% of the population might have been scared witless by her big brother element. To her, it was likely just wanting to keep an eye on them. I find them quite tragic and heartwarming at once and wanted to highlight that within a scene.
Murky's party has about 10 cut scenes from it. I just had too many ideas. Unfortunate losses to the eternal god of writing called 'pacing' included him getting into a raucous brawl after cheating at cards (having seen someone else do so and thinking it was meant to be done) and having a crazy western style hoof up of it all for more comedic effect to round off the night. In the end it was just too bloated for the scene and I dropped it for the joke with Glimmer instead. It's a pity, but even in crazy fun bits I need to keep my eye on the ball. :)
And yes! I have seen that picture. I'd like to think so, I did commission it after all. :p
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Then again, this may have been recorded before Pinkie really started hitting the Mentats hard. Kkhat’s portrayal of her was at the height of her addiction, and I think that the problems she was beginning to have with coping were explicitly made incredibly apparent through the other Ministry mares worrying about their friend. Pinkie also has experienced a very menacing image in Project Horizons, almost as much as Goldenblood. In either case, her paranoia was more fear-based than anything else.
It’s nice to see a break from that. Your version of Pinkie is indeed more in line with the character in the show, and not just because she sings and dances on a whim. She is caring here, (her line about making someone smile is all that’s important hit this perfectly) and much less a psychotic schizophrenic. Even though I realize that Pinkie recorded this memory orb more than 200 years before Murky found it while alone in her office, there is a very real aspect to her presence here. She’s not a shade or ghost of the wastes, but closer to a watchful guardian. It’s what she intended to be.
Heh Murky using sleight of hand to win at cards? Never. (Though all the practice he’s had at his slight of hoof might not help if he’s absolutely toasted. Poor guy would probably lose the brawl though, unless his opponent was far drunker than he was.) I feel the pithy Glimmer comment was enough, as that caused me to chuckle.
Excellent! Mech knocked it outta the park with that one. Would you be replacing the current image with the new one?
... Absolutely amazing! I Enjoy reading this fic!
2426563 Although he has a history writing scenes that are excruciating to read, I feel things are ultimately moving up from here. Everything horrible was leading up to the previous chapter, and now Murky's redeemed himself. He's got his six elements, and they have their Murky Number Seven. No more uncertainty as to his fate, the future is clear: all that needs to be found is the path.
With the explicit reveal of modern machinations and ancient age-old super items, I feel there's going to be a shift to a more adventurous tone. The darkness is broken, the light is turned on, and the radroaches are exposed and scurrying. It's time to go on a bug hunt.
>11 PM, browsing through FO:E fanart
>finds Murky Number Seven stuff
"I really should get to reading that, hope the first chapter isn't too long."
>sees wordcount first chapter
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Think of it more as a collection of interconnected stories. There is no shame in taking breaks per "chapter! :p
Wow. I'm not sure if I have any words. I found this story a few days ago, goddess knows when, and I've been reading it non-stop, day and night, ever since. It's been one hell of an emotional rollercoaster, especailly with each chapter taking forever to read—seriously, 40k words per chapter? What the hay is wrong with you?
I'm just glad this last chapter was a happy one, or I would have spent the rest of the week being all mopey and shit.
Goddess, I'm tired and my eyes hurt, but damn, was it worth it. You have a talent I can only dream of.
And fuck yeah, Pinkie proving that she is, in fact, Best Pony
*Sniffles* I hate it when I read though a long fic then hit the to be continued point...
That reuse of the smile song was just beutiful... and just what I needed with my chronic pain acting up latly.
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You'll be glad to know 20 is this Weekend then. ;)
Glad to hear it's given you something through whatever illness or injury has caused the pain. Thanks for checking it out and hope you recover!
2507573 Don't you go worrying about me, I'm called "Hopalong" for a reason and I've had 16 years experince living with it. Murky gets it worse at times eh!
*Sees three new chapters for Murky number seven squees and get's to reading*
Seriously this kept me from going awol at work
you just said "20 is this weekend" three weeks ago
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Actually, it came out on the GoogleDocs version back on May 3rd. Why it hasn't been updated here yet, I have no idea, but I'm guessing it has something to do with Fuzzy's noted dislike for the upload system for FIMfic.
That's still no excuse, though.
Red Eye wants so much to be an alicorn that he's channelling Celestia. Go forth my student, and save the world from things that I can't bother to spend time on!
Man, Murk's really coming into his own here. He's doing the spy thing really well!
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Certainly more of that to come from him. :p
It took a while but I finally caught up after a chapter a day each day and even then I had to pace myself. I wanted to read it all in one go after the first chapter! Your creating an awesome story, one I think is certainly the best fanfiction I've read. Can't wait for the next chapter to be out!
Loved the chapter, when can we expect the new one to be posted here?
Also, this chapter was all happy, From the other chapters I am expecting something really sad to happen
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Thanks to a friend, I can now get it up, just need a little time in my days to do it as it's fairly long winded on account of Fimfic's upload process being nightmarishly archaic. :p
Well, time to read!
Allright, I have totally no knowledge about Fallout: Equestria, so I thought I could ask for help here.
It looks very interesting and I totally want to read it, but should I read the original Fallout: Equestria first? And where can I find a downloadable version of it?
Thanks alot in advance!
~Bladluis
Pretty much how I feel reading this story.
Murky are you still writing this story?
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Hey there, I'm definitely writing more. Just been working on a backlog. No worries, this is VERY much still underway. :)
In fact, the next chapters are already well underway right now.
- Fuzzy
Oh my fucking god I am finally caught up with this, and I am so glad that Murky's life has taken a turn for the better, and I smiled so hard when it was pointed out to him that the shackles were open I mean from the very beginning that point was what struck out the most to me, and it made me very curious about his cutie mark story, I am so glad that we got to hear it...
2780155 I can just imagine glimmer laughing at Murky's expense if he were to say those words
Ooh, so many good feels 'nd stuff in this chapter.
I just wanted to say I like New Vegas' songs better than Fallout 3's.
Great chapter!
Alright. Drunk Murky is best Murky. Hands down. I've never seen him so goofy and happy before. And his jokes get everyone laughing!
Seeing "Smile! Smile! Smile!" was beautiful. in fact the entire Pinkie orb scene was beautiful. I didn't think of it much, but the fact he always saw Pinkie as creepy did feel like he was missing out on her real personality. Meeting the real her just felt satisfying as hell. Also love that she breaks the rules of physics even still.
Just thank you for this chapter. The entire thing.
As a side note I noticed Pinkie got sad wen Murky mentioned his friends making it out with him... That's some serious foreshadowing to a death scene...