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This was awesome, took me longer to read it than I would have hoped, but you made an amazing chapter! Keep writing this awesome story, because I don't plan on forgetting it anytime soon,
Thank you for this chapter, Fuzzy. After all of Murky's recent failures, it was very satisfying to read about something going right for him for once.
So, I'm guessing that the fourth magical signature was from Unity, via the Littlepip statue? (Also, I note with amusement that Littlepip is no longer being referred to by her name now that Murky's faith in her is restored. A heroic icon can't be a living person with a name, after all.)
My most favourite chapter so far. Can't pick out the exact moments, but this chapter was just amazing. Could feel tears welling up at some parts.
HA! I KNEW IT! {dances} Thank you, eye for detail!
I literally cried through half of this when I read it. By the end of the last chapter you almost had me in tears, and I dreaded going back to this when it updated. Then all throughout this chapter you both had me hoping he'd die just to get rest and that he'd make it so he could get out.
I don't know how you do it, but this probably marked the most emotional chapter so far. And I still haven't decided if I'm happy he awoke again, it means the pain will go on.
Excuse me while I go and cry myself to sleep for the night now.
2313630 To be fair, all the other statues were from Rarity but they still had her friends signature. It's entirely possible Unity somehow infused a little of LittlePip in the statue with her magic as she made it, or at least a replica of her signature.
Both of them appeared in his escape though, so I don't know.
KNEW IT! I FUCKING KNEW IT! *Does a little jig*
Wow. This was an amazing chapter. It cheered me up. Thank you for writing it. Please let Murky escape Fillydelphia.
THAT. WAS. AWESOME.
Somehow, I think there was a fourth one there all along...
This chapter. This chapter right here. This is the reason I've stuck with this story. Granted I've also stuck with it because its well written with awesome characters, but getting through a lot of the chapters up to this point has been an exercise in patience with the sheer amount of crap that's gotten thrown Murky's way. I kept reading with the hope that eventually we'd get a peek at the light at the end of this long dark tunnel, and this chapter delivered that in spades. Sure it was a little existential, but that's pretty part and parcel with a near death dream-sequence soulscape kind of scenario. From the second Murky realized his shackles were open the chapter became an immensely satisfying emotional roller coaster capping with just the right kind of pay-off at the end. Haven't felt this satisfied after reading a chapter of a story in awhile.
loved it
Most waited for chapter ever, best chapter ever. AWESOME!AWESOME!AWESOME!AWESOME!AWESOME!AWESOME!AWESOME!AWESOME!AWESOME!AWESOME!
There are no words...
...A chapter which wasn't mind-blowingly sould-crushingly excruciatingly depressing? Who are you, and what did you do with Fuzzy?!
On a different note for the same melody, oh hell yes. Finally. Freakin' finally. You know what I'm on about. Yes, you.
I read this chapter mostly on the bus and had tears running down my cheeks. And yes, they were partly tears of joy.
Thank you for this chapter and finally giving Murky a break. It's wonderful to see all of his friends help him survive, because: Friendship IS Magic
But TBH I'm just waiting for Shackles to come into the room and crush his wings again...
But one thing I had to think about over and over again was the following scene I imagined: They all got out, lived somewhere in a house in peace (Brim, Glimmer, Murky) and after a few years Murky dies because of all of his diseases. Their little Murky they all tried to give a better life. And Glimmer kneeling in front of his newly digged grave with Murky in her hooves, weeping. Gosh, I'm really crying right now, your story is always so touching
Very powerful chapter Fuzzy, lots of stuff I liked and one or two nitpicks.
Nitpicks first, I think it took a little too long for Murky to meet 'The Ruin'. Yeah I know you were building up to it, but it felt like it maybe took too long. Okay that aside, I don't really have any more nitpicks.
Now onto the good stuff: So first off, I like that you have Murky face this inner crisis, this sense of identity that Murky has struggled with, since meeting Glimmer, Brimstone, Caduceus etc. A manifestation of this as Murky meeting himself, tortured and brutalised as he looks to others was a good idea. I did enjoy the idea of The Ruin trying to get Murky to let himself die to spare himself more pain, he's been in a dark place for a long time and did try to kill himself, so it would only make sense for a part of him to want to end his life really badly.
What I really, really enjoyed, was the reveal of Murky's cutie mark meaning Freedom. I had strong suspicions that it did, what with the manacles being open, but Murky's reaction to the revelation was what I enjoyed the most. I liked Murky confronting all these things that haunt him, gathering up the mental projections of all his friends as he ascends towards the light. Good use of imagery throughout the chapter as well. I enjoyed Murky waking up alive again + Restored Perks, upgraded perks and a new perk. Yeah I'm a big perk guy, I like to see them used in some way, in a story.
I hope to see a more confident Murky in future chapters, keeping some of his quirks, but being a more confident pony overall.
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Thanks Tonto. The opening wasteland segment I'm chalking up to experience. I wanted to give an unending feel and then -just- come off of it before it become monotonous. As it seems from a lot of feedback, I missed that mark and overshot it by a couple pages. A good learning point, I feel and one I'm glad a lot of people observed and pointed out. :)
Imagery was just a ton of fun being able to go absolutely buck wild with it given it's all unreality. Fantastic fun and the response has been very high about it too. Makes me feel rather satisfied. Murky will certainly be a more confident pony from now on...but he's still Murky. Scaredy cat and socially awkward as ever, but he isn't going to be jolting to a halt every time someone asks him too anymore.
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I sense you're quickly becoming one of the harsher critics. But what can I say other than that there's no problem with that at all? I don't think any author worth their salt should be afraid of someone disliking aspects entirely.
In that said, I'm rather glad you enjoyed 11, a chapter that I personally consider one of my weaker and more meandering ones (There is one scene I'm tempted to remove entirely, the one where he gets trapped in the machine as it serves literally ZERO purpose other than to act as a scene break) but it's always nice to hear the elements people do enjoy. While I won't mention future stuff for you, there definitely is a couple of looks into Glimmer's past in future chapters for you. (And will be a continuing element of the story as well as a subplot)
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Aww, that's such sad imagery. The horrible thing is, Murky's lifespan is likely destined to be less than any of them for the very same reasons that Pip's was. He's too weak a pony exposed to too much radiation, chemicals and disease or physical harm that he definitely has had a chunk taken off of it. I was tempted to have Weathervane state it, but then figured it'd be very out of character for him as a healer to drop such unnessesary hurt on a pony's mind.
Thanks for letting me know you really felt emotionally moved by this one though. Means a lot!
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That bit with the machine didn't really have anything to do with anything, but I still kinda liked it actually. It was cute having Murky feel happy for a bit about doing a good job and then realize how effed it is that he's still happy to be called a good slave.
Anyway I actually wanted to add something (I tried to add it earlier, but my phone literally NOPE'D at me).
I've been thinking about what I said about the ladies being "damsels" and I don't think that's a fair assessment at all on my part and I'm sorry. Really, Stonershy always tells me that sometimes I'm damn blunt and downright rude about critique.
In truth, they are only damsels in Murkey's head due to him taking on the guilt of other's actions. If he talked to any of the ladies that old Shakey is threatening, they'd tell Murky to defy him.
So yeah, I take that back entirely. Also there's Coral now and she's more Glimmer's guilt-damsel.
And while it still bugs me and lessens my enjoyment, the amount of violence against women (I know there's violence against doods too, but I do feel that there is a heavy bias on the side of doods slapping around ladies) does MAKE SENSE to the story. The long and short of it is that Murky is a gentle pony and has mum issues, is both severely lonely and "lonely". So of course he encounters more violence against women, it's the thing that would upset him most. So while I don't like it, I get it.
ALSO I feel like I've been neglecting to talk about something that you'd think would've been the first thing I talked about: THE VILLAINS!
I'm all about the bad-guys and this story has some lovely ones. Two in particular are like R-Rated Captain Planet villains in their just OUT THERE villainy.
First off let me again sing my praises to the man, the myth, that lovable little lout: Shackles! He's such an over-the-top bastard that I wouldn't be surprised if he literally eats puppies for breakfast and only after he has had some kid raise it for a few months and with the kid watching. Then he eats the kid. He is Geofry Rush playing Barbosa in the Pirates movies, running around laughing like a mad-man and shouting ARR unironically into the camera. I know he has some big-ol' scheme, but let's face it; what he does for fun has nothing to do with his power grab, he's just THAT nuts.
The other part of the power duo is Wicked Slit. Yeah, she doesn't seem to have really any more importance to the story, but damn is she fun when she pops up. She is the picture perfect example of a psycho bitch and she is honestly my favorite gal in the story so far. She's every frustrated manager ever and she's finally been given absolute reign to beat the tar out of the employees who screw up her day. She has a major lady-boner for the Murkster, as the physical embodiment of everything that frustrates her. Sometimes I think she's in love with him, so much does she hate him.
Brim, I'm actually going to include here on account of him really just being a generally horrible fellow who just happens to have adopted two good people. He's a big savage of a thing who I actually agree with in that I think he is where he belongs; locked up and doing what little he can to make the world slightly less bad. Don't get me wrong, I like his whole little character arc and the way he plays off the others, I just won't really consider him a loss to the world at large if/when someone punches his ticket.
Now we get to Barb. He's kinda lame with a few fancy tricks. He's like a leveled up version of those bully bandits in the fun farm. He's the kinda character who I always end up failing missions about in Fallout because they annoy me so much that I shoot them as soon as the game gives me a chance. I guess that's fitting of his character, it's pretty hilarious to me how much he talks himself up in front of Murky of all ponies. Guys got a major inferiority complex.
And then there's Ragini! What can I say about her? Really, what? She's pretty much any griffon in FoE. She's rude and violent and loyal. Maybe it's just me, but her interactions with Murky seemed less hostile as of late, like maybe his repeated escape attempts has shown her that maybe he's still got some guts left after she splattered them on the ground. Maybe we'll learn more about her later and she'll be more of a character.
Now there's two other I want to mention who aren't "yours"; Red Eye and Stern.
Red Eye, oh man did you give him a lovely speech and a lot of presence. You reminded me of everything he was missing in those last chapters of the original.
And Stern, while she's also never had much of a character besides "Loyal to Red Eye so hard that she wants his little glowing eyed babies", you give her an intimidating presence. Like when she shows up, she feels like she's unusually dangerous without having to play it up.
And one more thing: Murky. I kinda like him. He's an entirely powerless hero and that makes him fairly unique (even my puny Rita has ways to get herself out of trouble). He's got issues and he's easily his own worst enemy, but I am enjoying watching him grow.
I just wish he'd do it faster.Whew, that was a screenful.
Onward to future adventures!
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Thanks Pacce, It's rather interesting to hear your alternate way of thinking upon female presence in the story. A part of it was half inspired by real world slavery where women have so so much harder than men in what can happen to them, so there is a slight portion of it that tries to perhaps shows that. It's not so much hunting for gender "equality" as it is showing the problems that can emerge if equality breaks down...if you get me? Brim's very masculine heavy raiders, slavers taking advantage, that sort of thing. Places like Burma, central Africa and the Middle East have this sort of thing going on worse than I could ever portray, so I guess I wanted just a touch of that in here, given the story's focus on slavery. I like to think the females get a chance to kick back too or have their moments of strength. (Coral especially, albeit her intro is a slow burner for a while in the backdrop, she mostly gets a better focus in chapter 16)
Shackles was always to be an outright "love to just hate the guy" villain. While he's does have one subtle trait that I like people sometimes spotting in general I did want him to be outright evil, something I feel stories in the post-Red Eye view of the main Kkat plot are too insistent on trying to copy the grey area of. Sometimes, a big bad guy is just fun and I wasn't going to worry about people saying he wasn't "top tier villain" enough. He's there to be hated. :p
Slit's a laugh to write. I've had a fair share of "middle management" horrors in my employement so maybe its a little personal venting on her but she is undeniably the most entertaining "baddie" to write. Barb meanwhile, you're actually straight up right. Barb does have an inferiority complex. Amongst a raiding band where strength is respected he is a smaller pony that relies on being sneaky to get by and while respected for his skills...he's never been one of the "big guys" and he holds one hell of a complex about that. He sees himself in Murky and he relishes the chance to finally bully someone who's actually smaller than himself. So you're on the right track, Barb should come off as slightly uppity and trying too hard. :p
Writing Red Eye was scary really. I took a few goes at it just to try and showcase him properly (especially his interaction with Protégé) and perhaps offer a new part of him without breaking the recognised pattern. Same goes with Stern really. I wanted to highlight what people liked about them and to allow them to get a little more limelight time.
Thanks for the running commentary, Pacce. You've provided a whole lot over chapters.
2324949 Yeah, it's probably going to happen that way... when they don't die before coming out. And yes, your whole story is emotionally very moving.
And most importantly (to me), you made me realize what slavery REALLY means for the slaves. While reading MNS, I sort of GOT what it means at a very deep level (beyond "it's bad because you have to do what they tell you to do"), and this knowledge means a lot to me. Thank you so much for that!
Btw: Project Horizons made me get this deeper understanding in regard of raping.
And even though it really hurts everytime I hear about one of those things, I'm really glad I read MNS and PH and got that message.
I took far too long reading this chapter, but damn it was well worth it.
My favourite part was you bringing back Caduceus. I miss that guy.
An absolutely beautiful chapter. Ones like these are why I will follow this story to the end.
I get by with a little help from my friends... [I fly high with a little help from my friends? If Murk keeps his wings covered until he has use of them, we might see this.]
Finally a ray of hope. Well, much less than a ray rather than finally a light in the dark. After such absolute, soul-wrenching, heart-rending, hope-crushing sadness, there was a moment of happiness that wasn't immediately taken away.
And it was glorious.
I was fully expecting the worst. I expected Murky to wake up to Shackles and a good amount of squick and body horror. ("See, Murky? You are not allowed to even die until I say so.") The metaphysical journey of Murky through his fears was well done, although I found his initial strategy of 'cover your eyes and don't flinch' that was deployed against Wildcard and Barb to be slightly underwhelming. In character perhaps, and heartwarming during the scene with Caduceus, but lacking an underlying decisive action.
(Side note: the brief quip by Glimmerlight to Caduceus about her appearance caused some major bittersweet feelings, perhaps the second biggest source during this chapter.)
Loved that Unity, Lil'pip and Caduceus came back. In extremely precise terms, we haven't seen them in forever, and it was extremely nice to see them again.
All that was well and good, but when Murky woke up... holy shit. That. was.... you get the idea. Murky's finally coming into his own, and it's awesome to see some positive changes to his character. How he'll conceal the fact his wings now (sorta) work is going to be interesting though. I predict that Shackles is going to be able to see through a coat. (Though he'd be saved if Protege decided to take back the reins of the mall. Protege's well enough to return to duties, right? Even then, he'd have to deal with the likes of Wicked Slit, Grindstone, and the other slavers.) Also, the way you wrote the scene where his wings flared out caused me to double take just as Murky did. Brilliantly paced, and awesome emphasis on Weathervane zapping Murky really caused that to work so well.
Finally, it seems that that little statuette is coming in handy. Unity would be happy. (God I miss her, she was one of the first windows of hope in this story. You don't forget that.) The idea that she was either able to metaphysically transfer all or part of herself to (or more grotesquely into) that statuette really is a cool plot development. I don't know what she is able to observe or feel through that statuette, but it's good to know that as long as Murky has that, she'll have him for company. Eventually Unity needs to come back, be it alicorn-ified or not... though I shudder to think what will happen when that occurs. If I remember correctly, Alicorns forget who they are until the goddess gets nuked. Even then, she would remember bits of who she was roughly around the period where Red Eye does finally get iced.
On a more pleasant (but seriously not polite) note, Littlepip and Weathervane should have a swear contest. It might be the funniest thing in any FOE series to date, especially considering the inventiveness of both parties. (Though there hasn't been a reason to see Weathervane for a while, I could eventually see Murky telling the Doc he found Sundial's pipbuck, or proc a recording around the doc accidentally. He wouldn't have to reveal anything, just that it previously belonged to Weathervane's son. Hopefully it's damaged enough that the recordings couldn't be salvaged, and Weathervane's delusions could continue. Even then, it'd be a majorly tragic thing, considering weathervane did think his son made it into a stable. The only possible way to redeem such a recording would be if Sundial mentioned he'd accidentally gotten his GF pregnant or something. That'd be the only way to soften such a blow.) I fully expect murky to be getting more recordings now that he is more likely to reach higher altitudes.
Anyway, thank you again for this, Fuzzy. As long as you're willing to continue this story, I will continue reading avidly and then asking for more.
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Pacce, you're a bro. It's always fun to find FoE authors reading FoE stories.
That commentary of yours on chapter 12 was well-written to the point where I was able to piece together that you worked on "Anywhere but Here" even before you mentioned Tap or Rita. I also had to go back and read through your comments, as they made me chuckle.
Don't worry about the future of this story, but worry about your heart when you read it. You'll see what I mean as you move forward with it.
Side note: wake up Stonershy, make him his favorite breakfast, sit him down at his computer... and then put a gun to his head and tell him to be creative. Anywhere but Here is awesome, and greatly needs some update love, especially after its last chapter.
Apologies for the random comment out of nowhere, but your running commentaries on the chapters you read are hilarious.
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It was always a tough battle to try and gauge when would just enough to have people feeling hopeless...then give them that hope back. Unfortunately, I think I perhaps overshot it by one chapter but it's a good learning point and I'm glad I caught it when I did. 18 has been really great to see people loving this upswing. The somewhat less dramatic Chapter 19 I think will be a great welcome reprieve for many!
There was a large theory going around of him waking up to be a ghoul, indeed someone even did a picture of him as one and it was honestly heartbreaking to see it. I felt so glad in secret that I knew what people were in for. it's been fantastic to finally share it.
Unity wouldn't have been introduced just to be thrown on a train, that's all I can say! But Weathervane definitely has more parts to play in the story, after all, Murky knows of his friends stuck in the metro which is at least one "side character quest" you might say. ;)
Thanks for sharing so many thoughts. Very much appreciated! =D
FINALLY! I have been waiting for Murky to realize that little point about his Cutie Mark almost since it was first described. And the way you went about it was beautiful, I have no words for how much I enjoyed this chapter in which so many of my theories came to light. Get it, came to light?
Every time one of Murky's friends showed up to help him I got a little more tuned up, to the point that by the time Protégé popped in, I was emotionally redlining. After going so long watching Murky get ground down at almost every opportunity, this chapter became all the more poignant. Watching the lengths to which his friends would go inside and out of his psyche for him was, well, it's hard to put into words, but I'll say wonderful.
Unfortunately most of my theories and things I've inferred from now on are going to suck. Glimmer's memories about what happened at the village, the eventual reveal of the doctor's sons fate and the fallout from that. All the terrible things Shackles' excavations are going to unearth. At the same time that this chapter gives me so much hope and relief, I feel like it's setting up a buffer against the trials to come. Girding me for the emotional battle to come so to speak.
I could go on and on, but I'll just say this was one of the best chapters of one of the best stories set in this universe. It just keeps getting better and better.
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Glad you're so intently following the side plots of Sundial, Glimmer and the like as well. I often times don't see a huge amount of mention about them next to the main plot's larger happenings so very glad to hear you are thinking on them too! The story still has a great amount to go yet, Chapter 19 allows people a little emotional break to perhaps kick back a little...so there's that to look forward to. It'll make you smile, I promise!
*gasp* *pant* Found this story a while back, just caught up. It was good right up to this chapter. Now, now it's great. Why are Murky's memories a combination of Silent Hill and Pink Floyd "The Wall?" Well, that's how I envisioned it. Also, Wildcard's just, like, a Roberto espy, right?
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Wildcard's something of his own really, it was only post creation that I started to look at some other "insanity" characters (primarily at the first E3 when Far Cry 3 was announced and we got to meet Vaas) and realise any similarity. He was definitely an original creation before any of that, definitely not an expy of anything.
It's probably more accurate to say he's more of a sadistic Pinkie sort of character than anything else.
Best... chapter. Hmm... I might actually have to say that was the best chapter of anything I have ever read. Considering the high quality of the rest of the story and the context of just falling deeper and deeper into darkness, this was one hell of a comeback for Murky and, thus, an incredible addition to the story.
I would say there are no words, but I think I may have guessed a few of them correctly. :P
P.S. Was that a Lord of the Rings reference?
2351614 What can I say? The last chapter made me cry tears of joy. Not even trying to pass them off as liquid pride. I'd smile until the top of my head flew off if I could find more emotional significance in the next chapter. I'll take pictures if that comes to pass.
That moment when we hear "Wrong, Shackles".
Loved how so many things came together. Cutie marks, injury and destiny. A quick review and reinterpretation of events. Really became an "Element of Harmony" moment right before Big Red Appeared. Then it was a Bahamut moment.
The Wings! The Perks!.
Looks like non of my predictions panned out for the end there, but at least I've got Weathervane's medical opinion on my side... Unless of course that thing really is still connected to Unity, in which case things are going to get all kinds of real.
These chapters are so long that it takes me an hour and a half plus to read them, and I read at most one at a time. I read this one immediately after the last one, and it took me 40 minutes. This chapter is by far one of the best things I have read on FimFiction.
In like chapter 8 or 9 did i realise that murky is fluttershy incarnate, seems also like he has a bit of lyra in him. This is so SUPEROMEGAOHMAHFACKINGGAHDTHISISSOAWESOME ranked by me :D !!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Only at Chapter 8 or 9 so far... really wanna hug murky...
I probibly didn't survive the apocolypse though.... Hologram hug? Naw... he'd fall right though me...
Which fallout game are you basing this off of? It seems like your going off the third game because it reminds me of the pit dlc a lot just curious
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It isn't based on any Fallout game, no. It's a story of my own design.
There was the occasional brief reference to a Fallout element but the core tale of it is entirely my own one that is set within a world Kkat had made.
Aha! my prediction about the "true" meaning of Murky's Cutie mark is proven true!
And it's about time he came back, after all "When you hit rock bottom, only place left to go is up."
Words escape me right now (i'm tired, and this was an astounding chapter,) but i'll be writing a much more in depth comment tomorrow.
When will the next chapter come out?!
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If you check the story hub on Gdocs, that always contains the future dates for chapters.
In this case, it's tomorrow. (For Gdocs, FimFic is usually slightly behind)
2410704 oh and when did blackjack come up? Because I didnt catch that name anywhere in the story so far...
I must say, the argument between murky and blackjack on tumblr was hilarious!
2410704 Never mind, just remebered that there is another FoE story where the main characters name is Blackjack.
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The whole guy being crushed thing I guess I saw more comically, like if Wild E. Coyote got flattened to the ground or something. Probably because the whole escape was as silly to begin with. I can see where it might take a dark turn though!
Unity's speech is...how to put this. I'm trying to think of how to say it without coming across as defensive or grasping for straws but I guess the best way to put it is that it's slightly deliberate purple prose. In many ways, she speaks like many of the show characters might given half a chance to spout about friendship or goodness. Possible even slightly exaggerated from them even. The idea of a character who, when unchecked with someone around talking back on a level with her, might run off her mouth in a way that seems at odds with the wasteland. She kinda notes it with Murky though, I like to think she at least realises it. I think there was a line before they go to the FunBarn where she lampshades that...
As for the future, well I wouldn't introduce someone simply to kill them off but I cannot say anything as to the exact nature. Don't make leaps from that, I say that to everything. ;)
Glad you like the sense that things develop around him rather than because of him. I never wanted Murky to be the centre of attention of the greater story, simply the one we see it from. (Even if he does occasionally come to the fore of it)
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Oh I found it funny in and of itself, it was just odd to have Murky make a joke about someone being killed is all.
I also got a nice grin from it busting up Whiplash's place.
But you don't have to defend or explain Unity, I get her. I figure she just sort has a running narrative in her head to keep herself distracted from focusing on the wacky fun and that leads to her spouting off at any chance. It's just not every character is gonna click with every reader and she just doesn't do it for me. She's like poor dead doctor what's-his-face, a nice person who is destined to have bad things happen to them. Also I need more unique flaws as well as their positive traits before I can really like a character. Now if we find out she compulsively steals library books and is just a horrible tipper at restaurants, then we'll be talking. Though I guess her always going off like Max Payne during a cut-scene could count towards that credit.
And of course I don't believe she's dead, heck, I expect that any moment Murky will be sitting around eating stale popcorn and she'll just walk in as an alicorn and she'll just reach into the bag and start munching while he just stares in tearful horror. Okay, maybe not that exact scenario, but, yeah, she'll be back.
ALSO, I dunno if it was intentional or not, but the bit with the ponies chained to terminals just made me think of writers banging away for hours on end.
ALSO x2, I started the next chapter already. I can't help but read Murky's struggles to draw Pip as tumblr posts from a depressed artist.
But in a bit of serious critique, I think you should include that actual radio transmission or at least a summary. Some folks actually eschewed the original fic, but read this instead. For the most part, this story has done a real bang-up job for introducing folks to FoE concepts and the like barring this bit and the first chapter where there are parts where even I had to rack my brain to remember what was going on at that point so I could understand it. Of course if there IS a summary, or what have you, of what Pipper done did do, then please disregard this message.
Murky is the best thief and escape artist ever! He escaped death and stole his life back!
Oh no! Once I finish the next chapter, I'll have to actually wait for updates like some filthy peasant...
This was wonderful. The chapters have been getting worse and worse. This finally marked a turn for the better. I felt emotionally drained reading this story each day yet compelled to continue reading it. The "afterlife" scene really helped to show how little Murky had grown, and how his friends helped him in his hopes.
I'm glad he lived. All those chapters were worth it.
Oh shat Sunbutt's ascension song. When I heard that I thought for a moment that Murky would become Murkycorn. And then I would have broken my computer
Good on you Murk, good on you...
Oh, what fun is Glimmer going to have now with teasing him! Wonder if constantly getting a wingboner will help with learning how to use them...
Also, awesome chapter. This was really a long inner battle wheter to live or die, and it was done masterfully. I kinda expected there in the middle that Murky would descend in a ball of light into the Pit, with his wings outstretched and a horn, and kick Wildcard's ass, but I suppose that would be a tad too much. This was better.