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NintendoGal55


I'm a Canadian gal who loves to write. :D

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Determined to win Fluttershy's heart, Rainbow Dash takes her out on a nighttime, moonlit flight. To show her a lovely time and hopefully come off to be as romantic as possible. All that's left is to confess her feelings.

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Didn't read it yet, but I love it already.:yay:

I can't remember who used the term "February fiction," but this story fits the bill. Regardless, there's nothing wrong with a little extra sugar in your coffee now and again.

1153452 Unusual? People write those two as a couple all the time! Before I read this, I love how you set it up as a romantic flight with two naturally shipped characters. No twist, just a natural flight.

To tell ya the truth, I kinda skimmed the song part because I heard it a thousand times. But I loved this story. Creative and was told really good.

Nuzzled muzzles, how sweet! I haven't seen a genuinely intriguing romance story in quite some time now, and you sir gave it back. No outrageous plot, no clop, nothing out of the blue that could spoil the moment, but just a sweet flight through the midnight blue. In your descriptions of the scenes, I could feel the essence of all the romantic qualities that a true romance story needs. :moustache:

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Bonus points for what might actually have been the correct use of "hopefully" in the first sentence. :yay:

If you ask me, this is the best wooing in the air since the first Superman movie, and only one of them could fly.

I love this. I absolutely bucking love this. It is one of the sweetest and cutest stories I have ever read and you deserve an award.

I thank you for making me cry. :fluttercry:

And you know what? The song you chose was the one they played at my parents wedding.

Words cannot describe how much I love this story, and in turn love you for writing it.

Thank you. Thank you so much...

Beautiful. I loved it. The Aladdin music just made this all the more sweet. I really like that you left the ending open to interpretation. Not much more I can say, so I'll just say that I await seeing more of your awesome stuff.
:yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

1153375 :rainbowlaugh: Oh gosh those icons are so cute! Thanks!

1153417 That's what I do! Some sweet romantic fluff sugar cuteness, because why not? Sometimes we all like to sit back and read something sweet. That's what I try to give to readers. :twilightsmile:

1153559 Me too. XD it just seemed perfect, though. It was part of my inspiration for it!

1153580 Awww, thanks! :pinkiehappy: You're too kind! I'm glad you enjoyed some sweet, simple little romance! And actually, I'm a girl. :raritywink:

1153607 I do what I can! Thanks! XD Ooh, wow! Didn't think I could top that! But I felt it was perfect since they both can fly!

1153626 Wow! That's lovely! :twilightsmile: Awww, well you're very welcome! I'm glad that made you happy! :pinkiehappy:

1153664 I don't care what gender you are, this story is very dawwing!

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It took me a moment to realize this, but you're also the author of Heated...

Me gusta

1153698 XD Fair enough! Thank you! :pinkiehappy:

1153700 :rainbowlaugh: Yes, I am the author of Heated! :yay:

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And that is why author is best pony

Aww this is so sweet! It's nice to see you're posting more FlutterDash fics because I'm really running out. :ajsleepy: Not much to say here, the writing was up to your usual standard and it was super adorable. Oh, and the Aladdin song was creative and it fit really well. Great job, and I look forward to your future works.
And as always, FLUTTERDASH FTW :yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

Did I ever tell you how much I appreciate what you do on this site? You're one of the few people who can write a shipping story without throwing in a dramatic twist, or drowning it in angst, or dancing around the issue for half the story. There's no awkward love triangles, or three chapters of "how do we tell our friends?" It's just simple and unobstructed romance, and sometimes, that's all one needs.

Great work!

D'aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw........ This is so cute..................... This is such a great story, once again you bring out your abilities as an author. I love this story! :pinkiehappy:

I have a question though, are you writing these because you want to take a brake from "Heated" and "Perfect on Paper", or are you having an inspirational slump? Just curious, I don't mean to be rude, I am just curious. :fluttershysad: I do love this story. I love the duet. :pinkiehappy:

As always, remember to stay :pinkiehappy: GREAT! :pinkiehappy:

1153664 Still, I think this story could have used more tension and uncertainty. Perhaps more emphasis on Rainbow Dash's fear of being too overbearing. Or perhaps RD fears the date may not work in her favor because Fluttershy is the kind of insecure pony to go along with it (even if she doesn't like it or worse yet isn't aware of the romantic intent) to spare the feelings of her friend. Then you could play up Fluttershy's kindness as an unintentional barrier/deterrent to Rainbow Dash's desire to confess her feelings. *continues to spew supposition and conjecture*

But like I said, we need a little short and sweet now and again with all the heavy existential sadfics that pop up all the friggen time. (like how many times does Twi have to die or be in a coma? Celestia wouldn't enjoy the frequency of these occurences :trollestia:)

1153774 That's true, you're not wrong! Maybe so...:twilightsheepish: I guess that's what sequels will be for! But yeah, sometimes we do just want a little sweetness. :twilightsmile:

1153721 That's okay, I'm running out, too. XD Thanks!

1153730 D'awww...thank you! Sometimes, yeah, I do want little simple sweet stories like that! Maybe I want to be reassured the couple stays together, maybe I don't always want dramatic twists or love triangles. :fluttershysad: Both elements can still work together!

1153772 No no, they're just a bit slow in the uptake. XD I posted this a hold-over. Thanks anyhow, I'm glad you still liked it!

I want to love this--the sentiment is honest and believable. But the Disney song kills it for me. I feel like an original song would be soooo much better, even if it wasn't as long. Thumb sideways? I'll have to check out your other story.

1153818 It was part of the inspiration for this story, soooo, yeah. :twilightsheepish:

Probably doesn't help that Aladdin never did it for me :) Love the concept though!

That was so sweet and d'aww inducing. I immediately clicked on this seeing the title. Loved it and how to see more

1153799 Maybe I'm just too serious. I think the most lighthearted thing I would ever write would be a failed ship between Cheerilee and Big Mac, with just a hint of tragedy. Nah, that's not true. I really want to write stories that have happy endings; I'm just obsessed with portraying hardships.

1153730 Has there ever been a love triangle that WASN'T awkward?
But it does do good to heighten tension with a villainous rival. Take Gaston, for instance.

"...In this town there's only she
who is as beautiful as me
which is why I'm making plans to woo and marry Beeeeeeeeelle!"

1153900 Nah, I think it's more or less when the love triangle presents two good choices for the one involved. That's where it can get ugly. X'D

1153907 I prefer the rival archetype. Love triangles are typically too obvious for me; that or I watched too much anime in my youth.

I always love scenes that have these two singing.
Is there a refrence to a certan movie there :pinkiehappy: You pulled it off rather well :rainbowkiss: and I gotta say congratz on that.
Such a romantic way for Dashie to ask her out. Kept me smiling all the way...
:yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

1154232 Me too! :pinkiehappy: These two singing is just so cute.

Oooh! What movie do you think it is? :raritywink:

1154249 I think I'm going to take a guess. Hmmmmmm........ :pinkiegasp: is it...... Aladdin?

1154249 And its one thing I would love to see in the next series is these two getting to have another solo song together.

:facehoof: And you say its Aladdin... so there is no guessing.
A worthwhile filler this is. :scootangel:
:yay::heart::rainbowdetermined2:

1154323 8D I agree! I hope they have another song together! :pinkiehappy:

:raritystarry: One of Dashie's lines is a reference to another movie. Hint, it's when they first arrive at the location.

1154330 is heated cancelled or on hiatus?

1154330 nope... I don't get whatever refrence it is... :fluttershyouch:

Cute as always. Gotta love that FlutterDash <3

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Where did you get those emoticons? Is there a set I can download somewhere? @w@ They're so cute!

What a surprise it was to see your new story! :pinkiegasp: You know, I love such surprises! :pinkiehappy:
I've just finished reading it.
This is so beautiful! It's so amazingly written! Awwww, I love it! :raritystarry:

You, of all writers, can make FlutterDash so sweet! :yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

Sweetest FlutterDash I've ever read. And i'll tell you, I read a LOT of FlutterDash :D:rainbowlaugh: Keep us the good work!

So...
Much...
D'AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

D'AWWW :rainbowkiss:
I can always rely on you for some adorable Flutterdash :yay:
Excellent work!

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You mean the movie "Mary Poppins"? ^_^

T4

Look whose been rewatching disney :twilightsmile:

T4

1155993 regardless, good work.

Also...phone glitches http://photos-f.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-ash3/s720x720/552108_235158986606771_16307359_n.jpg?dl=1

That needs to be an actual emote (I know it's late)

1156045 Are you kidding? That's part of their dynamic as a pairing! They are different from one another, but that's all part of what balances them! They're not too different, but they're not too similar, either. They have a strong connection and friendship with each other, and their differences compliment each other really well. :twilightsmile:

This story is too short (only one chapter) for my typical "Good Bad Ugly" thing I do, so I'll just rattle off a few things that I wanna say.

First, Kudo's on the whole song thing. Whenever someone puts a song in a story, I always find myself skipping over the part. This is especially true with songs that are already written that everyone knows. However, you did it correctly. How? Because you actually broke up the song into their actions and such. A lot of people just write the song, and that's it, and it doesn't do anything for me. That said, I think going completely into copying the Aladdin is either a mistake or a good thing, but I'm not sure really. Unhelpful I know, but whatever :pinkiehappy: This was probably the best part.

The "worst" part was the timing in the pre-song scenes. I felt that it was a little rushed, like you were trying to get to the song as fast as possible when typing. It's not that bad, and very much forgivable considering the song was the real focus of the story, but I would've liked to have seen a tiny bit more dialogue between the two leading up to Rainbow getting the nerve to asking Fluttershy if she wanted to go out.

Oh, and on a final thought, insecure Rainbow is best Rainbow :rainbowwild:

1156244 Awww, thanks! I'm glad you managed to enjoy it and even appreciate the song bit! :twilightsmile: Yeah, I felt it was appropriate to put actions between the song bits, since the song and the scene from the movie itself had inspired me, soooo, it just made sense to do that!

You are right actually, looking back at the pre-song bits, it is a bit rushed. :twilightsheepish: I was eager to get that bit (ironic, since I wrote the song bit first and filled everything else in between XD), but I think I will edit the first part a bit sometime soon!

Thanks for your input! :pinkiehappy:

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