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Leonnidus454


Just a simple guy who likes making stories.

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Zeek was an infamous friendless prankster parkourist, he'd climb up to really high places and either defile something by spraypainting on it or drop something gross on someone. Zeek was also a Conduit Positive, He never learned what his power was cause he was drugged soon after the D.U.P caught him, he was rescued by a group of Conduits but still never learned anything about his "power".

But all that would come to an end when he is presented with a choice, either give up his life to save a child's or just run away from the scene. Zeek chooses the former and dies after saving a kid from being run over by a D.U.P truck. Zeek thought it was over until he opened his eyes to find he was reborn in a world known as Equestria, as an anthro colt and Equestria's first Conduit in an orphanage, with all his memories but still didn't know what his power was.

As he grew up, around age 9, nearing 10, Princess Celestia and Princess Luna came to the orphanage looking to adopt a foal and ends up picking Zeek for his 'Uniqueness'. What kind of life awaits him in the world? Will Zeek ever adjust to life as the new Prince of Equestria? What will his power be when it awakens? Will he get friends in this new life? How many nobles will he punch in the face? Let's find out...

A/N: Thanks to new editor; Jason Monroe

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Comments ( 151 )

wow just yesterday i was thinking of asking if a infamous story was made

I like this story and I think that you should go with smoke as Zeke's first power simply because of how easy it would be to get a source of smoke. Much harder to heal or recharge when ponies don't use electricity and ice isn't common unless it's winter.

As he grew up, around age 9, nearing 10, Princess Celestia and Princess Luna came to the orphanage looking to adopt a foal and ends up picking Zeek for his 'Uniqueness'. What kind of life awaits him in the world? Will Zeek ever adjust to life as the new Pince of Equestria? What will his power be when it awakens? Will he get friends in this new life? How many nobles will he punch in the face? Let's find out...

As he grew up, around age 9, nearing 10, Princess Celestia and Princess Luna came to the orphanage looking to adopt a foal and ends up picking Zeek for his 'Uniqueness'. What kind of life awaits him in the world? Will Zeek ever adjust to life as the new Prince of Equestria? What will his power be when it awakens? Will he get friends in this new life? How many nobles will he punch in the face? Let's find out...

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Thank you for pointing that out, anything you'd like to say about the story, including your input on the choice at the end.

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i find it to be great but i have only played second son and the first so i hope to learn a bit about the ice power

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Well, that's if it gets picked so far I've got 1 vote for Smoke.

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it is good and
give him this power first Electricity from Infamous 1 and
then give Smoke from Infamous Second Son and then
Ice from Infamous 2

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Actually, I was planning on the next three powers he gains representing each of the 3 pony tribes.

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It seems i misread i thought those would be his first three powers so i vote smoke i changed my mind ice

You can give him video wings for Pegasus

what season does this happen in?

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7
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No, because where would he get Video?

1 then 2 The best combination.

When will the next chapter come

That picture reminds me on Paths of Hate the animation.
It's on youtube. It's... dramatic and somewhat violent, yet not outright gore.

2 for smoke. Moatly because it might seem fun.

Do you plan to use more Displaced elements or just the "Character A in Equestria B" ?

The issue with electricity is it will be a bit harder to find really. Smoke nearly same issue. However ice would be a lot easier for him to locate, so due to that i am going to go with ICE. Aka 0

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Yes, but in the game those weren't an option.

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Maybe if I can think of any to add.

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You mean ice? the number isn't the one you put in the comments it's how many votes that one has.

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I vote for the ice. its not used as much as the other two.

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And it's out of that group.
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Thanks, Ice is now tied with electricity

Finally, I've been searching and waiting for a fic like this

Second son because smook is cool XD

Interesting concept since I loved those games, however, the pacing leaves a lot to be desired. Also, there are some grammar errors, though nothing that can't be quickly corrected. Examples:

"We'll be heading to Ponyville because we believe you'll grow much better there then Canterlot."

It would be than and not then since they're comparing something.

Good luck with your story. :moustache:

I'll say ice simply because it makes him unique for the hero's. Lightning was the first two, and delsen had 4 (really 5 but lore wise he can't understand how the oragami powers work.)

Pacing fast enough to give me whiplash. Hope that slows down a lil bit.

The gene bit sticks out to me as odd- sure, genetics as a subject isn’t a very recent discovery, but the ability to determine a specific gene as the cause of SEVERAL physical attributes? That seems a little odd to me. Gives my suspension of disbelief a bit of a knot to work through.

For his power, I gotta say, Ice or Neon were always my favorites. Considering how many votes it already has, I’ll put mine in for Ice. Seems like one that’ll be interesting to work with.

Aside from some punctuation issues, it's an interesting start. Some of Zeke's one-liners got a chuckle out of me.

Honestly. I want to see Zeke use Lightning powers. It would be cool to see him use them and him like getting flashes of Cole and maybe have him as like a spirit mentor. The same could be done for the other 2 powers

If you think about it which of the 3 powers would make the most sense? Smoke how often do you think Zeke will encounter smoke sources in this story? Lightning what i equestria would be powered by electricity when magic exists? And Ice...... well his power would kinda be restricted to winter and cold weather if you think about it. But!! I'm looking forward to seeing how this story proceeds. Liked what i read so far keep up the good work😉👍

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