• Member Since 4th Nov, 2019
  • offline last seen Jun 26th, 2023

Brony1337


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On what seemed like a normal-ish day in Ponyville, the CMC try their luck with demon summoning.

Unsurprisingly, they fail. Surprisingly, there is no tree sap.

But something else is different as well:
They did summon some kind of ancient magic, it just did not work as intended.

Now, they find themselves separated, placed in the bodies of three of the worlds greatest evils, and are on the very borders of the world they know.

This is the story of their journey home through snow, stone, and sand.

Oh, and Chrysalis, Sombra and Tirek are now in their bodies and have to survive the insanity school, sisters and Ponyville are.



As you read the story, you will probably notice that the writing style changes quite a bit and that the quality will improve quite drastically over the first few chapters. I’ve written the first four or so chapters a looong time back and have obviously grown as a writer since. Leave feedback to help us grow together!

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 8 )

I'm really enjoying what I've read so far and look forward to more, the only criticism I can provide is that there are some very minor punctuation and spelling mistakes such as "loose" instead of "lose" in chapter 2, one or two missing " marks and I´m instead of I'm (or maybe ´ is correct and ' is wrong I dunno) as for grammar I'm horribly unqualified so say anything on it as my brain will just auto correct any to readable so I never notice it unless it is really really atrocious and safe to say that's not the case here. So far with only the 3 chapters and prologue I'd give this a solid 7/10 most likely increasing with more chapters.:twilightsmile:

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Thanks! Yeah, I really need to work on that. If you still remember any of the other mistakes, would you please point ‘em out?

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Sure thing also sorry I posted the comment unfinished, accidentally hit the post button

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I´m instead of I'm (or maybe ´ is correct and ' is wrong I dunno)

I think ‘ is correct, but I sometimes use ´ as stylistic choice. I should’ve gotten rid of the ´’s in the rest of the story, I’ll go check that now. Just tell me if one of ‘em seems outta place. Also, what do you think about “Regions and landscapes of Equus”? I plan to write one for each time the CMC reach a new region.

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Think it's great, personally I'm a big fan of making up passages from in universe books to help with set up, gives the story a feeling of being alive

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Thanks Buddy!

I actually just came back from the offline lands and wrote a blog about it. :rainbowlaugh:
If you care, here it is.
https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/951977/what-happened
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Have a great day!
See you ‘round,
- 1337

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I know, I saw your name on it and wanted to share a nice message.

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