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Spike is her number-one assistant and that will never change. Even in her becoming a greater princess he has not failed in that role.
Isn't it odd how a dragon can compensate for a castle?
Twilight discovers his secret... and must save him from it.
All are condemned either to a passion or an obsession.
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nice work.
I could totally see Spike doing this. The Spike Master does it again!
Twilight and Spike are wholesome and adorable.
Based and epic and twipilled
Only a few paragraphs in, and I can already tell this is something special. The characters talk like they really know each other, with backstory and shared history. Spike doesn't sound like some simpering baby dragon. And just a few hints of something sexual. You've got a way with characters and dialog that I dig.
With the... cover art and the author, I was very surprised to see that it was not, in fact, clop.
I've never seen such a borderline image on a T-rated before.
checked for the thumbnail, stayed for the feels.
Not bad.
Drugs are bad, m'kay! But the story is good!
Hoping these fav and likes to the story is a restart to your Spilight juices!
And suddenly, I'm reminded - almost too vividly - of Littlepip's engagement with Party-Time Mint-Als from Fallout: Equestria. So much nearly lost, so much on the need to feel competent and a world that endlessly shifts away from your specialties - and the addictive drug that pretends to take that pain of obsolescence away.
You're a great author, man. Really, only one little flaw stands out, but it's nothing compared to the tenderness of the moment this all leads to:
Sorry. reviewing's just instinctual to me. But if you win Back At It Again, you deserve it. Good luck, one competitor to a far more passionate one such as yourself.
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Thanks for the compliment and the save homie. Kind words are what allow creative ones to go on.
Lift a Glass was an enjoyable read and I'm sure it'll do well.
Hope to catch you again.
~ Yr. Pal, B
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It wasn't the only one I made for that contest, either. I'm 2-1 in terms of entries, and yet this still feels like it's your match to lose. Again, though: Good luck.
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One never loses if they enjoyed writing their story—but I understand what you mean.
Good luck to you as well homie.
Please keep writing for all of us.
~ Yr. Pal, B
That afterword really put a smile on my face. Glad to see you’re still writing Spilight.
Quick message to my dislikers.
Dislike me all you please and press that red-thumbs down on as many ALTS as you wish. I will outwrite you. In writing and commenting and in being myself. The time you waste in refreshing my page I will already have another story written. To all the comments you dislike I will upvote and so too will others. Disliking others due to a dislike of me is silly. And others will see through it.
But continue as you are, for, at the end of all this, all you will have is wasted time.
For the rest.
Thank you for reading my story.
~ Yr. Pal, B
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Well said
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Amen, dude! Amen to that!
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Thank you homies!
~ Yr. Pal, B
Stop it. Some of this is hitting too close to home.
Outstanding and nice use of the drug from Code Geass. Great story.
Amazing story!
This story is pretty cool, didn't know what to expect from it, but I enjoyed it.
That author's note was deeep.
Is... is someone just going along disliking each comment for some reason?
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Indeed.
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Yeah. I've noticed it too. It looks like this has also been affecting a few threads in groups where there is someone disliking people's threads and replies. Not sure what is going on.
Great story! I loved the commentary at the end, it's always fantastic to get an insight into the author.
Wonderfully amazing story! 3 hrs of sleep in the past 3 days made it hard to keep up but when I could it was heartwarming/heartbreaking. Keep up the great work man.
Spike sounds like a slave who got so thoroughy indoctrinated that he is quite literally incapable of even considering the remote possibility that Twilight, his legal owner, could be bad in any sense of the word.
Funniest thing is, Twilight doesn't recognize what she has done. Through the use of the carrot and stick method, she has created the perfect slave, one which thoroughly relies on HER alone to even exist, and is willing to depreciate his own health in order to be of greater use to her,while rationalizing that, "I'd be replaced if I wasn't better".
Now, funny thing about that statement is that it implies he initially has a low value to begin with, the followup expressively states that he only finds value in himself when helping Twilight in her duties, it's true to the show, in that sense.
Also, you imply that Spike has been taking drugs, or at least became distant from Twilight over the past few years, I'd average 3-7 based on how young they behave. This shows that Twilight in fact, does not value Spike in a personal sense, but rather, she values him for what he can do for her, given that he does not exceed her in capability.
In fact, the only exception and likely the only reason that she found him suspicious NOW is becuase his ability to do her work surpassed anythign she could accomplish, the slave became better at the slave master's job.
I'd imagine she felt threatened by it or, more likely, thought something was wrong, a cycle going along the lines of "He can't possibly be naturally better than me, he's my assistant" or any variation of it. Then, she took drastic action and found this.
True enough to the show though, I will commend you on that. You perfectly portrayed how neurotic and unknowingly good of a pet trainer Twilight is.
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whack
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Thanks homie.
Reading comments like that flare another stroke of fire to writing spirit.
Thanks homie.
~ Yr. Pal, B
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Not to compare, but this is literally any and every story I create. Disliked not because of what it is but because of who wrote it. At least that's what I assume. Those brave soldiers never quite manage to explain themselves.
Carry on man, you're doing good.
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I feel that.
And good to see you still around and kicking homie.
~ Yr. Pal, B
Huh. I was surprised by the relevations in the Author's Note.
But I think that you've done very well for yourself, B. To write a story parallel to your life and struggles and write it well, all while overcoming those struggles...
It's poetic, inspiring.
I believe in you, in you without anything else.
Shouldn't this also have a narcotics tag because of Spike using Refrain?
Imcredible story though. I look foward to more of your arts!
I mean, don't get me wrong here, it doesn't really matter, but you may want to consider that the current cover art is a measly bit "showing" for a non-mature rated story, and that as surprising as it is there are a handful of younger people on the site, even if they tend not to have profiles.
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That means a lot coming from you homie.
Glad you enjoyed the work.
~ Yr. Pal, B
Truly deep.
Most excellent.
The disliking rampage reminds me of the good old days of Bad Monday's and the serial disliker, I miss that story.
Regardless, you did a good job b, keep up the good work!
Utterly amazing. Completely captivating. Adverb adjective.
Seriously, though. Hooked from start to finish, and the A/N made me realize things about myself that I'd never really taken the time to think about before, especially in regard to why I even started writing clopfics in the first place. I strive to write this sort of thing -- undercurrents of romance without being overt and disingenuous, that mutual understanding and connection between people who have lived with each other for years, and suggestions of sexuality without being blase and trashy.
I'm loathe to go "here" in a comment, especially since I feel like I'm rambling and focusing too much on myself, but my issue is I just haven't experienced anything concerning relationships; it's hard if not impossible to grasp something that I have no personal frame-of-reference to draw from. I understand the concepts, but not their deeper emotional meanings, or how it feels to be in that situation. I can gleam some inkling of it by stories like this one, and the emotional undercurrents that run through them and motivate them, but it's not the same. Or maybe it is, and I'm just ascribing too much value to the concept of "experience"? A curious thought.
I know how to write sex, and from responses I'm getting I suppose I can say "write sex well," but I don't know how to have it be anything more than trashy, fetishy fap-fuel. I know that's what a lot of people who read clopfics want anyways--because porn is porn at the end of the day no matter how you arrange it--but still. It's hardly wrong to want to write with more emotional depth...
I'm gonna stop here before I make this comment even longer and more self-indulgent than it already is, lol.
Ruddy good job, B. Stay clean and stay awesome.
I've got to say, B_25...as someone struggling with a potentially lethal alcohol addiction and trying to find a way out of it, without the help to get out just yet...this story really touched me. Thank you for this piece of art.
oof
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Real good hard hitting moments. Love the long tail-end on this piece.
I got to say your writing is amazing compared to many authors I seen on here
The fav is 2/3 for the AN. I loved the story, and it would've been faved so hard. Then when I read the Author's Note, my mind was blown in the best of ways.
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Not to mention, sometimes the romance is so thick, that's what makes the clop good in the first place. They don't have to cancel each other out. A very different style of clopfic, it can be. And yet, clopfics that major heavy in emotion so deep? Rivals only with cheap, empty, fangirl-coated, Mary-Sue Hermaphrodite Twilight Sparkle.
Anyone ever notice how wonderful her name is? The letters are all so even. short ones, tall ones, danglies. They're all so well placed and distributed. It make me so happy to see in a cartoon character. *sigh*
P.S.
If you want me to remove the "H" word from my comment, just say so please. Or any others for that matter.
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I feel that. I've no experince with romance or sex—which, as can be joked and gleamed, is apparent in the writing—but it also allows a new spin onto things. The subject and the act is born from the desire and your current interpretation of it all. Therefore it becomes unique. And that which you do not know can be learned via other means.
And you seem like an interesting fellow. Comment often and ramble about yourself. It's exactly that expression that causes others to become interested in us.
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Thanks for the kind words homie. One never expects their work to do more than merely exist. So it's always a pleasure to hear it's done slightly more than that. Keep well broski.
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Thanks for the kind words from the two of you. Glad those moments mattered to another. And thanks as well for the compliment.
To all.
~ Yr. Pal, B ~
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I suppose there is, indeed, a beauty in perspective. There's no instruction book for the finer points of fiction crafting, and it can be both exhilarating and intimidating in equal measure. Inventively filling in gaps in background knowledge can have a charm all its own if it's done well--covering for a lack of familiarity with a unique touch to the end result, another facet of the gem.
I suppose the best way I could put it is that writing, like any art form regardless of its topic, medium, era, or intention, is a reflecting pool that crystallizes our thoughts, emotions, and experiences into something tangible, something with permanence, something real that others can take in and ascribe their own personal significance to. Perhaps there are more "obviously" appropriate forms of art to apply this line of thought to--classical music, modernist paintings, organic architecture, you name it--but the medium of the message (in this case, My Little Pony fanfiction) does not, in any measure, inherently detract from its significance, importance, or meaningfulness.
Wow. Saying all that makes me remember why I love late-night writing so much; the night provides a window into the mind that I find myself struggling to look through in the light of day.
Thank you, I appreciate that greatly. I guess it's just that I'm not too used to putting my introspections down on paper, so to speak, hmmhmm.
10296685 Yes, there is definitely a danger in overly flowery, prose-filled language. SS&E's Background Pony, cornerstone of ponyfic though it may be, is heavily guilty of this--many enjoyed it, obviously, but even as a voracious reader I found myself unable to overcome the difficult-to-read excess of words where far fewer could have been used.
On the more extreme end, and speaking generally: nobody wants to hear someone go on-and-on about how great their waifu is--it comes off as irritating, self-centered, and "cringy" (as nebulous as that word is.) Even someone who shares a fascination with the same character isn't likely going to appreciate it--they have their own reasons for liking the character, and the beauty and curse of fanon is that everyone fills in the blanks in their favorite characters' lives differently.
My friend it has been too long since I've come back to the fandom. But I am glad you are still here and writing wonderful fiction. To the days ahead :)
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Glad to see you back homie. You got me started on this path. So I can only thank you for it.
~ Yr. Pal, B
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Very happy to read those words, been jumping between fandoms recently but hopefully I'll find the energy to write again for this one. Cheers!
The amount of downvotes that this has is staggering and incredibly surprising. Especially since this is a real gem of a story. The prompt is unique and personal, and I'm glad to be competing against it. Your usual delicious banter is in top form here and your flowing prose keeps a fun rhythm for the story. Character voices are easy to spot and fun to listen to. I couldn't believe the word count had gone by that quickly either.
Keep slaying monsters, 🅱. Whether that monster is a box of green sludge that shouldn't be touched or the top o' the feature box.