The day after Hearthswarming, Marble and the others return to the Rock farm, and Marble ends up crying in the arms of her sister. Will her sisters be able to show the mare she is loved even if it's not the love she was searching for?
This story was inspired by the song "Last Christmas" by Carly Buchanan.
Last Christmas
Preread by: Zontan, Koren, Ruby, The Red Parade, Krazy, TheLegendaryBillcipher, and Drider.
Thanks to the Quills and Sofa writers for always encouraging me to put these story ideas up long after the contest is over.
Edited by: Ruby.
Art credit to: https://www.deviantart.com/zodiaczero/art/Limestone-And-Marble-Pie-568189767
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I like this one, it channels the feeling I had when Big Mac choose Sugerbelle, I felt so sorry for Marble. Also thank you for giving it a positive ending.
Such a wonderful, beautiful and we'll written piece.
Excellent job girl, also love the characterization of Marble.
Another beautiful gem of a short Nailah. You really know how to tug at the heartstrings and get your audience caring for your characters! I think you did a marvelous job with Marble here, her characterization feels so real!
Like Defiant, I felt the same when Big Mac choose Sugarbelle. Our poor, sweet, little Marble! *sniffs*
Just yes a gem of a tale, where the love that matters is that of ones sisters, and really in the end, that is all that matters anyway, the love of our family. Friends/Significant Others will come and go, but family is forever.
Time to ugly-sob a bit.
The worst part about Marble, from that Hearth's Warming special? If you look closely, her eye beneath her mane was still open. That little tidbit (thank you, DWK) always gut-punched my heart, and I can say with honesty that this story follows through on that tradition. Well done.
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Thank you for sharing this nice piece of sisterly comfort received in the face of disappointment!
Sort of surprised we didn't see Maud though, given Limestone's comments about her sisters being there for her.
Definitely in-character.
*Minor:
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"finally LET go of her sister"
Howdy, hi!
Ah, this was cute in a bittersweet way. I definitely feel for Marble here as losing out on someone you have a crush on always sucks, but I'm sure she'll find someone else or, at a minimum, she still has her family who will love her unconditionally for who she is. I liked the big sisterly energy Limestone has in this, and it definitely gives off the vibe of that protective sibling who's only doing the best they can for their younger sibling.
I also enjoy the random inclusion of Pinkie Pie in this. Probably came when her Pinkie Sense told her her Marble was upset and needed some affection from her sister. Overall just a really cute story about supportive siblings.
Thanks for the read~!
This comment will be unfair to the others due to the fact that I now have a deeper insight. First off, I had no idea it was based off the song Last Christmas by Carly Buchanan. Knowing that now, it gives deeper insight to the story’s feel.
What a line to begin off on! The stark contrast between the calm on the farm (outside) and disquiet in Marble’s heart (inside) gives the fic rich flavor!
Definitely could be Limestone quotes if they’d let Limestone curse in the show.
Heartbreaking dialogue.
Love this. I know it’s not explicitly written, but I imagine if she’s still hiding her face in Limestone’s chest floof. In the same vein, just imagine the brief respite Limestone would feel to know that humor isn’t lost for her sister.
Dawww.
Tough love—Limestone style.
Also, its good that Limestone is distracting Marble. I wouldn’t say that it’s the best place to start, but nonetheless, it’s a start. It is the first step of grief; denial.
You will, Marble. Just be patient. Kinda makes me think, has Limestone had relationships previous that cause her to speak from experience? It would add depth to her character if so. How much of her personality is nature and how much is nurture? It would be interesting to explore.
Denial again.
I like this bit of characterization.
As said before, one of the reasons why I selected this fic is because I’m a sucker for Limestone and Marble heart-to-hearts. Very different personalities, but family nonetheless, leading them to care for each other in very different ways.
Even more so, I’m a sucker for Pinkie and Marble interactions. Especially Pinkie with her constant tangents would be acutely aware to how Marble was feeling without saying it outright.
Minor things:
Think these should be in italics, though did she say it aloud? If aloud, probably add ‘to herself’ at the end, since this is a weird thing to say to Pinkie.
aww, this was a cute one! i really liked how Limestone Limestone was in this. protective, combative, blunt, and believing in hard work as the tonic for all things, including not having to think about some things for a while. i definitely understand Marble admiring her and wanting to emulate her, as i have some of those feelings myself! and i can tell a lot went into this Marble, who feels very much like a real person here.
and it was a nice touch to end this with Pinkie, who always seems to have a knack for being where she is needed!