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FoolAmongTheStars


Just another dummy on the internet, with too much imagination and not enough time on their hands. Sometimes I write cohesive stuff...mostly StarBurst.

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Sunburst is a stallion found on the sandy shore near his home after everyone had taken him for dead. When he swears that a mare of great beauty saved him from a watery grave, he is taken for a madpony.

Starlight Glimmer is a mare whose voice was taken to keep her from revealing the secrets that only she knows. Now, she has to choose between the life that she knew and the new world that's opening up to her.

This is the song of the mermaids, the sea, and the storms that kept them apart.


Mermaid AU. Inspired by the song Swallowed in the Sea. Original artwork by Oneiria-Fylakas, edited by me.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 43 )

This is an amazing beginning! I really would like to see where this goes!

awesome chapter keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

You caught my attention, like a fish on a hook.

I really enjoyed the beginning and really look forward to seeing where this will go. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you so much! I'm glad you like the story so far!

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You're very welcome.

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I hope the last part amused you in some way.

Can't wait to see where this goes....

Please continue this.

I am a fan of three things that you have put in here:
1. Starlight x Sunburst
2. The little Mermaid (this is close to that)
3. Stories that make a splash.

That was a great second chapter! I usually don't like cliffhangers but the one you left us on is amazingly suspenseful! I can't wait to see what comes next!

Darn you, cliffhangers! Now I'll have to stick around to see what happens.

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Thank you guys! Hehe, I hate to leave all of you hanging but that's the way I roll :pinkiecrazy:

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Ahh, I see what you did there. At first I thought the pony was Tempest, but it was Starlight. Cool

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You're a PUNny individual, too.

Holy heck, this is out and I didn’t even know!? :pinkiegasp: glad i checked your stories when I did or I may have missed it! I’m super excited to read this one:pinkiehappy:

”So, is it worthwhile?”

Very much so. Ooo, that was so lovely! I’m half wondering if the vision type thing was a result of his mind still recovering, or in this mysterious merpony was, perhaps, performing a spell...:duck:

Another great chapter! Loving this story!

“You’re taking in a criminal and obstructing the law, Sunburst. There will be consequences that even your title won't protect you from, once Chancellor Neighsay hears about this.”

That racist pony is in a higher position than Sunburst?

Can anypony say bad guy foreshadowing?

ENJOYMENT INTENSIFIES!

as does megalovania

It's good to get a chapter from Starlight's perspective.

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Subtlety isn't my middle name, unfortunately :unsuresweetie: buuut there's a little more to him, you'll see

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Aw crap plot twist dead ahead

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Lawful Stupid is what he is, somone in enemy uniform doesn't always mean they're part of the enemy.

I really liked how you started with just as much urgency and tension as you left off with. Makes the cliffhanger rewarding:twilightsmile: That ending bit was so amusing, and the silent panic Starlight goes through was done nicely! I’m loving that Goldie Delicious is here too.
I’m beginning to sense that this is not quite the “Little Mermaid” plotline we’re familiar with - though, of course, there are similarities. I’m intrigued.
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Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! This is a little mermaid inspired story more than it is a straight-up retelling, as the story progresses you'll see more differences :twilightsmile:

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Ooo, even better! Doubly intrigued.:twilightsmile:

awesome keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

Aww, that was a sweet chapter ending. Looking forward to another chapter!

Sunburst you are smart but dumb XD

Great new chapter! Sad about the delay of updates but looking forward to another chapter! (though is it handmaiden or hoofmaiden?)

nice new chapter keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

This is a story I'm willing to wait for.

Interesting chapter.

Flurry is going to be the best knight.

I love your world building in this story.

Wo - ho - ho things are gettin’ a little steamy in here :derpytongue2:
Ugh, great writing as always FoolAmongTheStars!!

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Hoofmaiden. After all, as Rainbow Dash so eloquently put it, 'what are hands?'

I read all of the chapters. That means I'm interested.

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