Princess Luna was the younger of the two sisters who ruled over canterlot. Her job was to raise the moon and to watch over the dreams of ponies all across equestria; however, Luna felt jealous of her elder sister and betrayed by her ponies. This feeling allowed a darkness inside her to take control and to transform her into Nightmare Moon. Princess Celestia, Luna's older sister, made the decision to banish her sister to the moon in order to save their subjects. What she didn’t know at the time was that sending away Luna would set free an ancient beast, The Lorik.
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You could do some really interesting things in a sequel to this!
Not bad and I really like :) need/looking for a proofer?
it’s an intresting concept to say the least. Although my two biggest critiques would be one with the memory spell. At least when it got to the books, kind of pushed my suspension a bit. Although a solution came from the Eragon books where such a spell was used on the traitor dragons where their names were erased, and while they can be found in books, the spell works to make it where you’ll easily forget it even after you have read them.
The other bigger thing was the bit with ponies not being able to sleep and it’s consequences just seemed to happen. I mean, eight days and celestia is just now hearing about this? But aside that, but for that you’d have to be willing to spend a little more time detailing and showing ponies becoming sleep deprived, and I get if you’re happy enough with it as is and as is, I’m happy to have read it
That's roughly 80 years, what's her punishment for the other 920?