Twilight makes a visit to the school of friendship to check on Starlight in her new position of headmare of the school. Starlight is really nervous, there’s a crack on the wall, and there’s a looming threat of eternal doom upon the entirety of Equestria. But surely none of those things are related. Right?
Inspired by The Hole, unholy birth-ground of The Orb.
Reviewed by Light Heart101: Review
...did anyone else get Who flashbacks, or is it just me?
blinks repeatedly
O... K, didn't expect this to happen.
Me: Turns around. Notices the crak on my bedroom's wall.
Also me: F*CK.
The Hole? You've seen that too?
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But yes, indeed, short works that get the job done in terms of storytelling's like Peking Duck to me. (Means its awesome.)
Good work.
This is crazy, I love it
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/213901/my-little-reviews-feedback/thread/440135/reviewing-the-crack-on-the-wall
I think you should have replaced the tragedy tag with horror. Even though this type of story isn't the type I'm used to, you did a pretty good job.
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Did the change. thanks for the review!
Hey, comments on your story here, as requested. Enjoy!