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Mica


I don't bite, but my writing does. You can give me money here.

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Rose Lizhi is a young kirin attending the School of Friendship. She and her family are the first kirin to move to Ponyville.

Cover image is a screencap from The Last Problem.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 16 )

I like all the kirin worldbuilding you did.

Since the protagonist has a defined personality, why is this in second-person?

Also, what does ABC stand for?

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This is second person point of view because the narration is "you," instead of "I" or "he/she."
ABC is American Born Chinese.

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I'm guessing "American Born Chinese." Google unfortunately doesn't help.

I also agree about the second person part. I think it would be better in first person. Especially since this is supposed to be something that is from the character's perspective and based on the author's experience.

The story itself is interesting. It both works well as it was, but could be expanded further.

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I meant, why did you need to use second-person to tell this story?

Oof. This sort of cultural conflict is unfortunately all too common. Even the show touched upon it, with Spike grappling against his draconic nature. Though, he was never really exposed to dragon culture - or lack thereof - at all. Rose's story serves as a negative counterexample to his success. And a reminder of why empathy for another's values is so critical. In these times especially, that's a message worth spreading.

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To be honest, I'm not sure why this is in second-person. It just kind of came out that way as I wrote. Perhaps I was talking to/scolding myself.

I would say I'm somewhere between Stage 4 and 5.

This is going to fly over nearly everyone's heads.

Nearly.

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I like that it's in second-person. I think it's important that it feels personal, like a guide.

Problem was, it didn’t taste like “home” anymore.

Oof. Hits very close to home.
While I know all "my" places to eat around me, I always take a fried chicken sandwich with fries any day. Even so, eating "my culture" dishes is like a novelty amongst my friends, a destination to go to every now and then. It makes me feel special if a little bit awkward, like I have to be an expert on the subject matter despite not having really lived it firsthand.

While I've grown older and began to learn my parents home language, going back to their home country is still foreign. Like I'm a tourist who happens to know too many people there (aunts, uncles, and cousins) , and they knowing I don't "really" belong but still enjoy my company regardless. It's incredibly complicated and strange situation to communicate and I doubt I did 8t a modicum of justice. But you did very well here with so few words. I'm very glad there's someone out there that has had similar feels as I do.

who had never even out of Canterlot

Missing word.

Hm. This was... something. More than a touch uncomfortable to read, I have to say, which I suppose may be part of the point.

The immigrant's lot, eh? You either feel terrible for not fitting into the culture you feel you should want to join, or you feel terrible for throwing away yours.

I like the choice of writing this in the second person. At least on my end, it made it a lot easier to empathize with the main character.

The issue with her name's probably the one that hit closest to home for me, chiefly because it's one I've run into a lot with my own. I mean, your name's you, after all, your identity you give to the world. Giving that up isn't exactly a trivial matter, and changing what you call yourself is a pretty strong symbol for how you're trying to change your identity. It's especially poignant in these cases, of course, but Lord knows it's tempting to just take the easy way out of the daily shame of trying and failing to explain to people how not to mangle your name.

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Thank y'all for sharing your stories. I can definitely relate to the experiences that you described. Maybe not so much when it comes to food and my name, but I definitely feel like a foreigner when I go to visit relatives. "A tourist who happens to know too many people there" is a very good way of describing the feeling.

Your headcanon of the kirin being an ultraconservative, traditionalist, Asian-style society is an interesting one. Considering the kirin are part of Eastern mythology, it makes a lot of sense. The kirin, without hesitation, accepted their leader's demand to get rid of their speech and feelings.

Autumn Blaze must be an outlier.

I found this story in the "Also Liked" column, and I found it really interesting! Although I haven't been through the types of struggles the main character here has been through, I can empathize with how it may feel to do so. Your writing definitely helped convey those feelings well.

This was uncomfortable for good reason, I hated to see Rose completely abandon her original upbringing... I really liked how the use of second person aided in that, and I normally don't like the use of second person perspective. I was cringing with her a little when she scolded her mom about the hot pot. And then there's the ending... It's one thing to embrace the culture of a new country you've been brought to, and it's quite another to show disgust with yourself for being foreign. Rose may be Rose and not Lizhi anymore, but she's still a Kirin and just as worthy of friendship and acceptance as ponies.

The headcanons you have for the Kirin was also cool too. It makes sense they'd have a more conformist and collectivist culture given their issues they have when their emotions get out of control. And the whole thing of turning into Nirik being a natural part of their life cycle and culture was cool too, I might have to use that myself if I ever write about them. Kirin are just cool in general if you ask me.

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I sometimes feel a little like a foreigner visiting some relatives even when they're in the same country... But that might just be social awkwardness.

Dan

Markiplier's brother swears he isn't a furry, and his long-running comic is really about cultural differences and the challenges of growing up biracial, but c'mon...
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Your parents had found a job in Ponyville, as researchers in Doctor Hooves’ laboratory.

Because Kirins are good at surviving explosions?
Let me guess: That was due to the fact Kirins are fireproof?


Good story!
I enjoyed reading it.

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