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"You think you know me..."

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It was just three simple words that Gallus heard her mutter as they lay in bed together. Three words that he had heard many times before, but never did he realize just how beautiful they sounded when it was addressed to him.

(Just a short practice I gave myself that I decided to post)

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I know this is going to break the mood and people are going to hate me for it, but here it is:

It took the second dance of the school the year after to get him to ask her out. To kiss her beak, and ask for her to be with him not a friend, but something more. She was more than happy to do so and they had been together since. They had their ups, their downs, but one special hug and everything was as it should be.

get that 'the' out of the way and replace it with a number or adjective or whatever please.

This was such a touching little story. You did a superb job in capturing the changes Gallus went through as he went on adventures with the rest of the Young Six. The part with Silverstream was such a sweet, tear-drawing bit. Ten out of ten would give it a reread sometime. Have a fav and a like.

there is always fanfiction.

Yup, that's unfortunate thats how things are now.

Well, good job on this story Rated, cheers!

For something you claim you did in an hour this is really impressive and well structured. It does a great job showing how much Gallus loves each of his friends, especially Silversream, and how much better his life has become.

This is why Gallus is Best Birb and one of my favorite characters of the entire show despite not being in the majority of it.

I've always been a sucker for "Found Family" stories (It's why I like Guardians of the Galaxy a lot too), but Gallus' just kind of hit me in the right place.

I really hoped MLP would have gotten more time with him, but I'm glad we got the time we did.

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Of all the things I expected to see in this comments section, Cotton Hill's face was not one of them.

Really good story! Agree with all that has been said.

Found this for you, Granded, Smolder had a family growing up [Granted ]

This was really a touching story that I read and it just melted my heart. Gallus x Silverstream are very cute together!

Gallus and Sandbar accidentally getting married.... Was that a shout-out to the "Gallbar" ship?

Finally read this. It was perfect, I made an idea similar like this that I never ended up writing.
This perfectly captures my feelings towards the young six, and Gallus most of all.

I finally got this off my backlog. This is really good. I cried when you made me realize Smolder will outlive her friends by hundreds or even thousands of years.

Thank you for this.

He couldn’t sleep, and it wasn’t because he just had sex two short hours ago

Woah, woah. Way to set the mood!

Silversream

Typo. These two comments aside, this is a nice story. It really emphasizes on the simple but wholehearted love that friendship brings.

This put a warm feeling in my heart. The kind of feeling where everything is good and right with the world. Everything is as it should be.

This is some masterful introspection. Gallus lying in bed ruminating on his relationships and how happy he’s become struck a good chord. As someone who suffers from self-worth issues much like Gallus does, it’s heartening to read about him finding joy. I could really feel his love radiating out of every sentence.

I think you struck a very good balance between things like sex and virginity, and the more love related topics. Neither overshadowed the other, being present in the story without being obstructive. I enjoyed Gallus’ initial hesitance at taking her virginity, and Silver’s assurance that despite several obstacles involving her people, this is what she wanted. And continued to want every chance they got!

I’d also like to express my sincere thanks that you mentioned Gallus being the Element of Magic in their group. I’ve long asserted that to be true, but too many mistakenly give that title to Sandbar simply because he’s a pony. Out of all the Student Six, I maintain that Gallus fits that role as well as the role of leader the best.

To top this off, I want to praise how absolutely everything you wrote about is entirely plausible and even likely to have happened within the confines of the show. Perhaps not the part with booze, but I imagine Gallus and Sandbar would somehow accidentally end up married even in a world without it! But everything else; from Gallus and Silver becoming a couple, to Smolder’s fears, to Ocellus’ empathy and occupation. It’s always very special when a story not only stays true to the show, but is also compatible with my own beliefs and ideas. This was a story that I enjoyed very much! Thank you!

Then there were his friends. Friends that became his family. His pack. The ones he would live and die for. Even when he almost ruined it in his selfish attempt to keep them with him during Hearth's Warming Eve they stayed for him. He was welcomed to their homes any time. Their families treated him as one of their own. They were there to laugh, cry, and chill with him whenever they could. He was always there for them and they were always there for him. Maybe that’s why the Tree said he represented the Element of Magic so much.

That's what I thought because magic doesn't mean like literally having magic I think it's about the spark inside of you realize what's really important the ponies and creatures you care about coming to know one of the other

That, and she had helped him overcome his fears of confessing to Silversream. A changeling always knows what the heart wants as the saying goes.

Silverstream

Awww that was the sweetest thing I ever read aside from the sex thing it was pretty nice that gallus looking back throughout his younger years yes it was never a good year for him when he was a little kid having nobody to love him and no parents he was basically alone and his home land but when he came to Equestria things were looking up for him yeah sure in the beginning he didn't want it to be there but then after meeting his new friends and forever he never thought he will feel something that he never had back home and throughout the years they did a lot of things either get in trouble having a good time and hanging out and I do like how he really loves his friends especially his love one silverstream yes I ship those two so much and not only that he became one of the first non Pony to be one of the royal guards of Princess Twilight Sparkle and despite all that he had a bright future ahead of him and he's not going to do it alone this was a pretty sweet story and I really like this one keep up the good work

Beautiful! Well told story. :twilightsmile:

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