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I am a teenage Christian Brony with Asperger's Syndrome who lives in Kentucky, and I like three things: Writing stories, magical talking ponies, and writing stories about magical talking ponies.

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THIS STORY IS CANCELLED. THE OFFICIAL STORY IS LOCATED ON MY STORIES PAGE. COVER ART DOES NOT BELONG TO ME


It’s been almost three years since the Legion of Doom have been turned to stone, but an ancient evil rises from the ashes of the battle. He brings back some of the most dangerous villains the ponies have ever faced. The Mane Six could have never imagined how powerful this ancient beast truly is!


This story takes place after the End of the End. Any type of continuity errors should simply be considered my own headcanon.

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 82 )

Wonder what are Luna and Celestia doing during this being started?

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Since End of the End, they’ve been living in Silver Shoals.

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Is it really a retirement place?(place full of old wrinkled ponies)

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Over the last three years, it’s become more of a vacation spot since the sisters came.

I got this idea from MelSpyRose’s “The Return of Tambelon.”

MelSpyRose appears to have taken the story down. Is there anywhere else I can read it?

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It may be on her deviantart account.

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How would Luna feel so far after she retired?(Especially after ending her rule on a pretty crappy note due to Discord's plan.)

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Let’s just say that after three years, Luna’s forgiven Discord and moved on with her life. Fun fact: she’s made friends with some of the older folks.

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I really don't think she would forgive him like that.
Since he ended up making her look like a failure on her last days as ruler.
And since she barely ruled compared to Celestia, she won't be remembered much compared to Celestia and most likely what will be remembered of Luna is mostly the failures she suffered in her short rule after her return.
She really shouldn't be brushing this off honestly.

And the fact even if Discord's plan didn't go haywire, most likely he planned on the sisters getting taken out.
So Discord essentially planned on sabotaging the sisters' reputations for Twilight pretty much.

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What if Discord was being controlled?

Maybe by some outer force beyond Equestria? The pieces are falling into place.

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I still feel like she would have issues with him about what he did even if it turns out he was controlled.
Such as the damages of her reputation due to they ended their rules on crappy notes. And also with what he said to the girls with "You don't need me or the princesses" during the Sombra thing. Since the sisters didn't get to stop any threats at all and Celestia forced Luna to stay out of stuff to "test/teach" Twilight(and other times getting instantly taken out during a villain crisis), Luna didn't get to help Equestria much during threats since her return. Basically people saying "You aren't needed anymore" to her would surely cause problems to her since she just got back from the moon and barely ruled.

But who was controlling Discord anyway?

If you need to borrow an OC as a background/one episode only character, let me know

Wonder whats happening with human-world Spike since it looks like the Dazzlings are wrecking havoc in the human world?

Comment posted by Mixmaster226 deleted Sep 6th, 2021

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I’m sorry you didn’t like it, but I like to do it. If you don’t like the story, then find one you do.

So the main villain behind Grogar shows himself.

I do wonder if Spike is linked to this "Heart of Eclipsa" too?

Will this story have a happy ending?

The villain behind Grogar is actually Orthodox. There is more to this story than you could ever know.

Glad the royal sisters are now involved and such.

Wonder what will be touched on for Luna's dark powers given the Nightmare spirit is here?

There is literally only one problem I have with this.

Multiple times have characters referred to Grogar as a myth, while in the actual series, Discord says the words “Now they have all of the real Grogar’s magic” or something like that, implying that at least Discord knows he was real at one point.

I also realize that there’s that whole thing in the description about plot holes and headcanon

Anyway, all that aside, the premise is very cliche *makes terrible attempt to hide a fic that does almost the same thing except the heroes are the ones who are gathering the army for the final showdown*. I mean, all the remaining unreformed villains team up? That’s literally MLP S9/MLB S2 finale Heroes Day/my entire story idea section of brain.

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Now, I do understand that Discord mentioned the real Grogar, but in this story, the ponies believed Discord was only "pulling a Discord" and that the magic the villains had was simply that: dark magic from an old talisman. In this universe, the Bewitching Bell was simply believed to be an item created by an ancient race called the Troggles. So, they would believe that Discord was lying about Grogar being a real figure.

As for the heroes and villains gathering together, I understand that can be a cliche in movies and books. In this story, I have a greater purpose for all of this. The characters coming together is simply a way for Grogar to use them in order to inevitably free his master. As for the heroes, they are coming together because the final battle will require multiple forces on both sides. I have big plans for these characters, and that plan can only be executed if they are all together. Just wait and I promise that what I have planned will blow your mind.

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Approximately how far are we into the story? Probably not too long, given how far along it already is

I’m guessing Orthodox isn’t gonna help Grogar

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We're about a third of the way in.

Really disappointed Luna and Celestia were so easily taken out by Storm King like that..

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They had actually been in a long fight before that. I just had to cut it or else the word count would have been 2,000.

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I don't think it would be bad if the word count reached high 2,000 though.
Like when writing a chapter, one shouldn't cut out any details just because of worrying about if the word count is too high.


Still disappointing that the sisters lost badly though.
Like this is their first fight after their awful sendoffs in the finale(and after leaving the throne) only to lose again just like how they kept losing years ago.

“First, we evacuate the empire, and then we go straight to Grogar… and destroy him.”

That is, no more mrs nice guy :twilightangry2:

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And if you think she's mad now, just wait until later.

Kind of surprising the other villains didn't feel digusted on how the changelings are all skittle bugs now.


Really wished Luna and Celestia didn't brush off that they lost(AGAIN).
Like shouldn't they feel issues due to they kept getting taken out when a villain attacks?

Bummed that it looks like the sisters choose to be sidelined from the main fight like that..

Wow that was my idea! (minus Tirek but close enough)

I HAVE MORE! I HAVE AN ENDLESS SUPPLY! You want more? You got more!

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They'll come back. It's a temporary thing.

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I have mentioned Cosmos, Discord's ex at least three times now. idk maybe just an off-hand reference about how she's too much of a wild card to recruit or something (unless comics are non-canon)

What are the pillars doing at this point in time? Might not be relevant, but sends the message that other characters that don't make physical appearances are still doing something to help.

And then there's a whole lot more things, like how the universe was made (probably not a good idea to do that here), how Orthodox came to be, and more which can probably be touched upon in a possible sequel.

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Define come back in this case exactly.
Like they be missing the fight in Tambelon it looks like.


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If Cosmos will be used, I am really hoping she is introduced in a different way instead of having that horrible arc(and the retcon it done to the sisters) be canon.

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Oh, they won't be missing the fight.

“As in the Tambelon? The city where Emperoor Grogar came from?”

yeah there's a typo

Calling it right now, Orthodox the Fallen One will do to Grogar what Grogar will do to everyone else

Are you sure that's not Discord in disguise?

Grogar was watching the heroes on a Crystal Ball. “So, the daughters of my old comrades are helping in the quest to defeat me? Oh, this will be fun.”

woah wait what

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The Nightmare Spirits? They are real, and Discord has learned not to disguise as a villain unless absolutely necessary.

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Nightmare Spirit? Never heard of it from the show.

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Then what did you mean by Discord in disguise?

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Btw, the Nightmare Spirits are from the comics, but this is my own take on the character.

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I was confused. I'm sorry. But this Grogar is real.

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