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Meowofy


I miiiiiight be just a teensy bit too obsessed with Twilight >;3

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A small, frightened, lavender filly saves Princess Mi Amore Cadenza from a band of menacing stallions who took out her guards and cornered her in an alley.

But who is she, how is it that she is there, and will she be able to find comfort in her new surroundings after what has happened?

Will she learn to trust the new ponies she is surrounded with, will she learn to embrace a new family after all she’s lost, and will she learn to find solace with boulders seemingly aiming to break her will at every twist and turn in life?

Only one way to find out.

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I'd say this is a good start, just something is bugging the heck out of me; what happened to Cadence's two guards? I know they were knocked out but nothing after that, I'm guessing they were picked up when the others came but a small part of me is fearing that the hostile Stallions made off with them. Speaking of the Stallions. I know they but their leader retreated so I'm guessing he fled before the others arrived?

Cadence's two guards are safe and tied off to the side, I may mention them reporting back to duty next chapter

The stallions all retreated quickly save for their leader

I was thinking the cloaked sidekicks were caught, and the 'smarter' leader was able to escape, but suggestions are also welcome!

-Meowofy

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Cadence's two guards are safe and tied off to the side, I may mention them reporting back to duty next chapter

Okay that's a huge relief for me, I was worried for a second. Going to keep an eye on this story. :twilightsmile:

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Thanks for your support!

I, the Mighty and Majestic Ebonyknight both approve of and support such a creative beginning and thus encourage the continuation of said story :).. Joking aside a great start would love to read more and I agree a clever get away for main villain is a must but capturing underlings could give useful story narrative which filly Twilight might lack

Oh my gosh this is amazing.

Great start! Shining Armor may have found his successor.

I am intrigued.
Very intrigued.
I can’t wait to see where this goes.

interesting, very interesting. I will assume this is an AU and in this world Shining isn't related to Twilight

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You would be correct, they are not related, but I would assume Twilight still has the same parents, as for Shining, I'm not yet sure who his 'new' parents are, but it likely would not be relevant.

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what about Fancy Pants and Fluer? could be interesting if they were Shining's Parents.

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It would be interesting, but they don't seem like the 'parent' type, if you get what I mean. It seems like they go out most of the time to attend parties, charities etc. and it would sorta be weird to have them staying at home for a child...

Good suggestion though, I'll definitely think about it!

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My suggestion comes from the fact of all the Nobles I have seen in the series, only they seem actually WORTHY of the title. Also I have actually read a fic (celestia's tiny student) and in it Fancy and Fluer actually have a son. :twilightsmile: So for me its not hard tp picture them as loving parents hehe.. Either way I look forward to the next chapter of your story! You have a wonderful setup going on here

Great Story already! I look forward to the next chapter!

The Princess of the Sun flared her wings and the temperature around her rose as she bent down over the limp, lavender body once again, charging her horn and crumbling the medal band, the filly's tears finally ceasing.

Small spelling error. I really like this concept!

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Oops! Thanks for the correction!

Can't wait to see what happens next. Great first chapter, keep up the great work.

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Honestly, I have no idea, I presume I read it in a novel somewhere and it just stuck to my memories...

This is a great start to a potentially engaging story. I hope you do continue with this because it has my interest.

Instantly hooked! Would love to see more

Very intriguing. I think you have something good here, can't wait to see what happens next.

I am intrigued and hope for more

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I’ll do my best, although I’m experiencing a writers block and can’t seem to get any new ideas? Suggestions?

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Perhaps you could do a series of arcs for Twilight where she slowly opens up to them over time, suffer an experience that closes her off again, and then finally allow her to view the princesses and Shining Armor as her family.

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Sounds like a great idea! Thanks!

Great start! Need more, please. :twilightsheepish:

You can do the hospital and an adoption scene next. If not adoption then protection of the crown

Definitely going to be tracking this story. Sounds too good to miss

I haven't read a story in a long time that made me want to keep reading it so badly, please continue this!

You caught my attention, like a fish.

Can't wait for morr

They all stared, wide eyed, as the golden circle around her horn melted, and the aura around her pointed appendage flared, turning from a magenta color to a light indigo as she fed it more power.

How does that makes sense?

Twilight stood before her, staring at the incoming ball and flaring her horn.

Why not wait until one of the characters says her name?

The stallions all retreated quickly save for their leader, who was still gazing at the lavender foal in disbelief.

Where is he then?

This seems to be a great start of a great story :)

Hey how's it going with the next chapter

Woah, that was a very interesting chapter. I know that I am late to read this, but I find the plotline very intriguing :twilightsmile:

That was a great story.

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