Luna is pregnant with a colt. A colt sired when she was still Nightmare Moon.
One thousand years later, the foal is born into a life of secrecy.
But the father, the troubled stallion who stood by the princess' side even as she turned into the dark queen, did not perish in the intervening millennium since Nightmare Moon's defeat. Alone, but not entirely forgotten, the sire of an age past begins a new life in Ponyville, unaware of the existence of his foal.
But starting a new live is never easy, especially when your past invades the present.
Chapters (19)
that was excellent! tracking and 5 stars
Deep
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More shipping to come, don't worry.
(Props for guessing who gets shipped, though.)
Nothing explicit, of course.
Ahh, now I get it she says her son is a abandoned pegasus colt. Great story by the way 5/5 stars if I can give it ten stars i do.
to be honest the description of this story got me reading(and the fact that i love luna
) *tracking*
interesting
Looking forward to the next chapter, so far so good
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84360 i agree completely.
not gunna lie i skipped this chap srry... it was kinda boring. but i like the previous ones mainly with luna. i don't really enjoy flash backs srry
74722
GET IN MAH BELLY
From what I read it's a very nice fic. Certainly an interesting plot to go from (and one that gets at me because I'm a sucker for deep relationships- e.g. what Luna feels for Starshade), and executed rather nicely. I can't name any specifics, unfortunately, but that's just because I have a hard time expressing my feelings.
Do carry on!
another excellent chapter, hope to see more soon
This is Great! ...but.....
And with that, give you 3.5 stars for the first 12 chapters.
ALLONS-Y!!!
I want to see where you go with this... it should be interesting, i think.
This is really good, and I think deserves a lot more views.
I don't think you should change your story at all, but try to change the description because at this point in time it sounds like a luna shipping fic and that might turn some people away. Try giving more about how it is a story about him coming back and her having to live with a unspecified secret (At least in he description) That should help to get some more well deserved views!
Like 73879 said, it's extreamly slow. I occassionally like the slow stories, but for right now, I just can't seem to get into it.
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Don't give up yet. A lot more action is on the way.
You can expect some more action with the next chapter update, and it should ramp up as the story goes on from here.
I have quite a bit of actual pony-on-pony battles planned, including chapter-4-style fighting.
I have a lot to explain to set up the story and characters for the end.
Each chapter so far has had a very specific character or plot point that needs to be made.
Very little of what I've written is just filler. The only thing one could really get away without reading is the Prelude.
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
aww, they're so adorkable
I cant help but think of discord sitting on a cloud and laughing his ass off at the events going on between Luna-Tantalus-Starshad-Fluttershy-Twilight and thier thoughts
I cannot wait for you to post more of this, I have read the whole thing and thoroughly love it. You're doing a really good job as I am not usually much a fanfic lover
so cute
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Sliver spoon you evil little filly.
fantastic
"Luna is pregnant with a colt."
I'm sorry, that's as far as I got before immedietly doing a double-facepalm and flipping over my keyboard.
One does not simply say things like that... Just sayin'... In my opinon.
There is my advice to you...
I'm sorry to be a negative comment.
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While I thank you for your honesty, I would appreciate it if you took the time to read a chapter or two before deciding that the plot isn't worthwhile.
This story isn't for everyone, but I think you'll find that the pregnancy itself is a rather minor concern in the scheme of the story. This story is about its consequences, not so much its happening.
I think you did read the entire description, even if you only quoted back the first sentence. But in case you didn't, I'd recommend that.
man, I don't want to hate Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara, but oh these fillies, they test my patience haha
good work friend, looking forward to the next chapter
Judging by scoot's reaction at the end.....
SHE KNOWS
Wait, so Starshade is only one? Are you using the timescale where the ponies mature like normal Earth horses, or mature like humans? If the latter, then is he just like this because of some weird alicorn biology/magic thing making him grow faster?
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I'm using sort of a hybrid between the two options. I didn't try to rationalize it too much, though.
The primary reason is that Starshade needs to be able to operate at the CMCs' level, but in order to keep consistent with canon I needed some mechanism to make him age faster. His heritage seemed to fit the bill quite well.
I look forward to reading what happens next in your story
Interesting...
Another excellent chapter, looking forward to the next one
While the buildup was done well, the transition from the beginning of the picnic to the crash seemed a little sudden. Additionally, the scene itself seems like an unnecessary ending in the sense that you could have easily ended the chapter before the transition and leave the reader on a cliffhanger so you can hook the reader in to reading the next chapter. However, this is still a great chapter and I can't wait to see what happens next.
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To be honest, I really rushed this chapter to make the weekly update promise I made.
It's definitely going to get some attention as a result of the EqD overhaul.
Thanks for the cliffhanger tip, though. I'll probably implement that.
Maybe Twilight gets roped in, being a fellow student of a princess...
great
74722 I'M BIGGER THAN U I'M HIGHER ON THE FOOD CHAIN
Meh, bit of a suspension-of-disbelief breaker to have the kid grow up so fast in less than a year, and have it NOT be alarmingly unusual. If it was described as something common to alicorns to go through childhood so swiftly, I could see it....
you have the CMC FAR too young. They should at least be 7 or 8 years old.... and probably closer to 12, seeing as they're old enough to have cutie marks, which is a pretty obvious allegory for puberty.
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It is alarmingly unusual, but so is Starshade. He's the foal of an alicorn, but is not one himself. There's not many historical cases of alicorns to go off of, so it really couldn't be something that could be said to be normal.
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My reply to 135245 helps to explain exactly what's going on. Here's a link: 136502
Furthermore, age-wise I'm trying for a hybrid between human aging and pony aging. The reason is derived from canon, primarily. The characters, expecially the mane 6, seem to hold a great deal of responsibility and appear physically mature, but are at the same time rather mentally immature.
I'm not going to go into a full-blown explanation of my headcanon on pony aging and maturity, but suffice it to say that this is a rather minor point in the story. Starshade is the same functional age as the CMC appear to be in the show. It's a plot device to make up for the fact that Starshade must be much younger than the CMC and yet still be able to interact with them and be in their same class. No more, no less.
And now everything goes wrong. Just watch.
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Eesh.
I'm not sure whether or not I wanna know what that tearing sound was. Then again....I'm quite curious...
Heh. Seems like it's about to get interesting here shortly.
Looking forward to it. I wonder if Luna will see Tantalus at all. I am mildly eager to see that particular reunion.
Nice update!
It got kind of slow with the CMC business but it looks like it's about to pick up.