The spark
I sat there frozen. Whether it was due to shock or fear or a combination of the two. I simply could not move my body no matter how much I wanted to or tried to. My heart was racing a mile a minute and I was beginning to feel faint. As the dust began to clear in the library. I was able to get a better view of the lunar goddess looking at me with murder in her eyes. Not exaggerating if you look up the dictionary definition of ‘murder in one’s eyes’ it would be a picture of Luna looking at me. So, after I finally got my body back under my command I went to try and run the hell away from her. ‘Then what?’ came the question. That would just confirm to them I could be bad in some way. So, I decided to do the one thing they would never expect. Something so monumentally stupid it just might work.
*Crunch*
I ate a cookie.
I just took one out of the jar, looked Luna right into her murderous eyes, and took a big bite. Thinking back on that moment I knew I could have done something better than that.
“W-wha… what art thou doing?” She said her previous murder eyes transforming into a face so full of confusion you would think she was trying to understand quantum mechanics using pinkie pie as a calculator.
“E-eating a-a c-cookie?” I manage to stutter out. My body still screaming for me to run as far away as possible. As adrenaline began to flood my system involuntarily.
Luna narrowed her eyes looking at the cookie I took a bite out of. Then she looked towards the jar I got it from. When she saw the moon emblazoned on the lid of the jar, she did a double-take.
“I-is that my old cookie jar?” She asked suspiciously her eyes narrowing even further and her hands curling into fists and wings flaring out.
I gulped, now realizing that this was and still is a terrible idea. Now slowly scooting myself closer to the edge of my chair getting ready to make a run for it. “M-maybe?”
“You think you can distract me?! With COOKIES?!” Luna shouted angrily the murderous look reappearing in her eyes intensified by a factor of ten. She begins to slowly approach the table looking incredibly intimidating as she began towering over me.
“I-I was thinking more to c-calm you d-down p-princess,” I say voice shaking with fear as Luna’s horn begins to crackle with energy.
During all this Spike was still sitting next to me in shock while Twilight was in a near-catatonic state outside muttering something about books. Seeing that Luna was likely charging up a second death beam or something that I do not want near me I booked it back to my room.
Running into my room I slammed the door behind me and held it closed my back to it. Hoping beyond all hope that someone would snap Luna out of it.
“That will not save you from me, demon.” I heard Luna say through the door. Her tone so icy and sharp it could have frozen magma to ice then cut said ice into statues of her blasting me to the moon and back. The distinctive sound of magic being charged became audible through the wooden door.
That was all the warning I got before the door behind me exploded inwards knocking me off my feet. Pain exploding throughout my small body. The door was not blasted off its hinges or anything like that. It full-on exploded sending shards of the door flying at high speeds. Unfortunately, due to me trying to hold the door closed, take a guess at what most of the extremely fast, sharp debris ended up hitting.
My vision went white as pain exploded all throughout my body as I went flying through the room. Time seemed to slow down during my short flight, but I could not concentrate on anything other than the enormous amount of pain I was in. I was able to get a glimpse of Luna out of the corner of my eye. The expression on her face surprised me. It was not one of murderous intent, not one of the satisfaction of having injured me. But one of indifference.
After flying through the room for several more seconds I went flying through the window I had been looking through earlier. Thankfully, I was able to bring my arms up in front of my face at the last second before I went crashing through the window. The glass cutting up my arms as it shattered, injuring me even more than before.
When I hit the ground outside my vision flashed white for a moment when my head it the ground. I started to feel nauseous and tried to sit up. But for some reason, I could not move my arms or legs. They would not respond to any of my commands.
So, there I was lying on my back in immense pain after having the door behind me explode and being thrown through a window. I heard a commotion behind me and soon after a face became visible.
The face was yellow with pink hair. I tried to move away but was unable to. No matter what I told my arms or legs to do nothing happened. As my vision began to slowly clear up and the ringing in my ears slowly started to dissipate. I was able to make out pony who now seemed to be looking me over. It was Fluttershy. Her face was one of shock at my condition and she began to try and stop the bleeding.
I knew she was trying to tell me something most likely as to stay calm and or still but all I cloud make out were muffled voices. A second different voice also became known, but this voice was not full of worry or concern. No, that voice was full of so much anger I thought the Hulk was about to be released. I noticed that Fluttershy stopped tending to me and began to look in the direction of the voice. I was able to weakly turn my head to also see what was going on.
What I saw is the definition of the phrase ‘you dun goofed son. Big time.'
Twilight, Luna, and Spike were there and having one heated conversation, but something was different about Twilight. She was the voice I heard, and she was pissed. I swear for the briefest of moments no longer than the blink of an eye, one of her eyes became like mine. Twilight was livid, yelling at Luna as if it were going to go out of style. Whether she was yelling at her about the damage to her books, the damage to me, or a combination of the two I was not sure. Spike was called over to me by Fluttershy most likely ordering him to go grab a doctor as even I could tell moving me right now would do more harm than good. The argument between Luna and Twilight began to pick up intensity then it all culminated due to one action.
*Slap*
Twilight slapped Luna.
Twilight the anti-social bookworm who always tries to find a peaceful solution. The complete egghead that wants to learn anything and everything. The shut-in who needed being forced to move away from canterlot to make some friends slapped Luna.
THE TWILIGHT GADDAMN SPARKLE JUST SLAPPED LUNA!
That shut Luna up quickly and like a parent who told a child to go to their room Twilight pointed at her, then at me, then she pointed off into the distance. At that point, I could not see the pair anymore as my vision was taken up by the form of what I assumed to be this Equestria’s version of Nurse Redheart. She seemed to have some sort of first aid kit with has as I began to feel bandages get put on some of my wounds. As well as some type of painkiller.
“Don’t worry you’re going to be fine just stay still and everything will be alright."
I could very faintly hear it. I’m not sure who said that to me but I know that the pain slowly began to subside but I still couldn’t move my arms or legs and my wings probably looked like pincushions with the amount of splinters and debris they must be filled with. Ugh makes me shiver just thinking about it.
As the minutes ticked on and I felt myself get progressively weaker. I started to think about my family. How must they be handling my disappearance? Did my house burn down? Will they ever know what happened to me?
I started to feel sleepy and the temptation to close my eyes grew by the second. But I knew that that was the last thing I should do in this situation. I wanted to become a doctor before all of this. But I was not even able to start my first year in medical school before all of this happened. However, I still learned as much as I could about the body, and I knew that this sleepiness is due to blood loss.
As blackness began to envelop the corners of my vision, I was able to feel the vibration of multiple hooves begin to approach. The faces above me looked towards the source of the vibrations and waved them over to us frantically yelling something about blood and heart just before the darkness consumed me. And I fell unconscious shortly after. And as I fell into the void known as unconsciousness, I heard a voice.
I’m sorry
You go Twilight, Luna really deserved that slap for trying to kill a child.
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over-reacting? she flat out tryed to kill a child if she doesnt get some legal troble for that then she isnt going to learn i mean this is the luna that is supposed to be reformed.
I just thought I should share this. The final few paragraphs of this chapter
This scene at 7:18 onwards was going through my mind.
Just thought i should mention it
Yay earlier than expected update.
So I'm curious. Did our heroine de-age, or is this a case of massively different lifespans coming into effect? Like how in DnD 40 is a 'teenager' for dwarves or something, did however old she was translate to the equivalent of a foal in Equestria or something?
Also, aren't ponies usually more durable?
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Its the classic Old mind child body. I believe I mentioned in the second or third chapter that she has the emotional stability of a 6-year-old because her brain is one of a 6-year-old.
Oh, sure they are. But when a thing behind one of them explodes with the force of a hand grenade turning a wooden door to nothing but high-speed splinters and debris. One simply aint durable enough.
Also, u gotta remember she is still wearing that magic inhibitor ring. Weakening her.
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*DBZ announcer Voice*
FIND OUT NEXT TIME ON
MY LITTLE SUNSPOT
THE JOURNEY OF THE FORBIDDEN COOKIES!!!!
Lol
🥃
I feel sorry for Daybreaker also f*** you Luna
Well not only Twilight isn't happy , Celestia won't be too
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I actually hope it's letter (longer life-spans) because that to me seems more realistic then a being de-aged for no reason
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this isnt going to do luna's image any good and will proberbly traumatise daybreak in other words luna needs that slap and then some. i hope you dont go down the road of quick forgivness for her because if thats how she would act to an actual child nightmare moon without memory of being the nightmare then it kind of shows she proberbly shouldent be back on the throne yet at least untill she has the reilisation that her anger for nightmare caused her to try to murder an innocent child.
"Im sorry"
Huh now i want to kniw who said that but ... We all must wait camt wait for it though doing very well
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Okay I greatly loved the chapter and fact Twilight slapped Luna.
but I do see something wrong with it that could easily be fixed by the word "alicorn" our MC didn't die sooner due to blood loss and/or internal damage, as you said the door exploded with force of a hand grenade which would by itself do good bit of damage plus the high speed splinters, being sent though a window and hitting the road at speed so all that would probably caused some internal bleeding and worsen her already bleeding wounds.
PS: this is just me over thinking this and I am no doctor so I'm probably wrong on some things anywho please keep up the good work and I look forward to more. (and you're reply.)
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You're right, she did tried to kill a child.
Well ya done fucked up luna
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Oh believe me our little Jolyne ain’t leaving the hospital with a few scratches
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Hmm, interesting.
On
a more serious noteother side, I hope Luna Atleast gets bitch slapped by sunbutt or gets into legal problemsDamn, story already over? I was really liking it too.
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Well from the looks of it she's been paralysed from the neck down and will have multiple scars running throughout her body... I wonder why sunbutt isn't doing anything? I'm guessing that she's either shocked, hasn't arrived yet or is busy at day court
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LOOK OVER THERE! A COOKIE!
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MAIDEN HEAVEN!!!
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yay
yay, exactly friday
when will it be next?
he, he
🥃
Well, the cookies almost worked. A for effort.
I hope Luna sits down and thinks long and hard about what she did. Judging a book by its cover and immediately turning to the most violent option. You'd think Discord being reformed would give her second thoughts. Yeah, she might look like your sister's evil counterpart, but considering that they are a filly version and aren't acting malevolent, you really should think before you act.
I think Jolyne will be fine, her Alicorn physiology will help heal her up real good after a few days/weeks of rest, and perhaps some beefy magic infusions.
So, she found Luna's old cookie jar, will she eventually find Celestia's Cake Stand?
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Quick question, who says sunbutt doesn't have a cookie jar? She might be addicted to cake but who knows
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at least it deserves to be turned into stone
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Well, Cookie comes from the dutch word that means "little cake". It makes sense Luna likes cookies because she's the little sister, since Celestia is the bigger sister, she enjoys the full size cake.
Heck, she might have a whole bakery just for herself, to fuel her addiction.
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two options
1 - Luna
2 - who put the magic inhibitor on her horn.
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Properly twilight
i am surprised there were no Flutterstares
This chapter was a huge improvement in writing quality.
Somewhere, discord is laughing his ass off.
if you can try to make the chapters longer
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Why thank you
I have no idea what I did different but I will continue doing so
What happened with flutter at the end there? I think she would be staring down luna alongside twilight!
And did twilight almost turn into midnight! Cause it sounded like it! I guess she was really mad about those books... and the child haha
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I shall try.
No guarantees tho
A Snickers would work too.
Fandom.exe has stopped working.
"A little blood never hurt anyone"
Then you nerver read Deadman Wonderland.
I get the intent of this chapter but did you notice how much bad Luna looks when one stop to think of the situation? Not only Luna but everypony involved?
They "foalnapped" a 6 yo then blocked her only means of defene while she was unconcious just for Luna to try and kill a foal with no means of defense while looking indiferent to the pain she was causing.
Well... what can I say other than nice take...
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You could try to read it slower.
Apparently Luna need seriouse mental treatment! A Foal that has a magic suppression ring on her. Celestia rather should come herself and punish Luna for it. Hope Canterlot will be in uproar when this comes out...
Oof...
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Only a slap? That mare need:
- Professional mental counseling
- Observation placed on her! Literally attempted murder!!!
- After Friendship laser to the face eventually a court case. There is only so mutch one can away with?
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Indeed. Hope Canterlot nobels for ones ride Luna for her actions. Not for personal gaine but true consern because a ones moon jailed Alicorn after Fiendship laser to the face is returning to her past serve and maybe die or die indefinitly...
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They got wasted
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N-e-a-t ♡
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No reward for bad deeds Dont treat with a good time
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Just to hope Canterlot population foals will be save...
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The End...
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Actualy only her legs are legit. A full paralised character is useless.
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Cookies Nomnomnomnom
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Damn! That deep...
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Ouch... Game Over screen incoming...
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Priceless idea with the Cakestand
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Sounds legit...
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To bussy drinking to the chaos unfolding... I need popcorn...
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Indeed that need to be addressed
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I know... The lost of the Cookies hurt me to
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Dont you forget Spike? He was right next to her? Watching her was his duty. Is he injured? How badly?
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Spike was still in the main lobby of the library and thus away from danger. He's fine
well physically anyways
And to think Luna is supposed to be good with children.