I am fiercely devoted to the good values I would like to teach.
Based on and inspired by the Mickey Mouse short Sleepwalkin' , Twilight Sparkle, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy and Applejack have to spend a night chasing a sleepwalking Pinkie Pie all over town due to agreeing to watch over her when she thinks she have been sleepwalking lately.
This is my fifteenth overall story, and the first Pony Life story I ever wrote.
Due to being a Pony Life story, this story is NOT linked to the other stories I wrote before.
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Oh so Pinkie Pie has a case of sleepwalking which Twilight in the others wanted to help her with and I guess that's a pretty serious case I mean I felt with somebody who was sleepwalking before and it was not fun it was hard I wonder how her friends will deal with this
Oops it looks like Pinkie Pie is on the move and she's sleepwalking
Dang Pinkie is op when she sleep walking or running whatever
Ohh it looks like you got some inspiration from Pony life when Fluttershy has the power to grow big and small which that still unknown how the heck did she has that power nor was she get it from but it kind of reminds me of Ant-Man
Boy that was kind of crazy but good thing Fluttershy caught her just before she hit the floor and you got admit even the most powerful Alicorn Magic sleepwalking Pinkie Pie is op lol
Dang Pinkie Pie is a heavy sleeper how the heck do we wake her up
Wow a marathon that was she dreaming about that's pretty random but at least they stopped her and they could have asked for Luna to help but then again maybe in Her Dream she can't stop her either but anyway this was a pretty funny story keep up the good work
Sorry to be a bit of a grammar police, but it's a bit redundant saying "waking up the other ponies, who quickly woke up". You said twice that they woke up. Maybe something like "startling the other ponies" or "alarming the other ponies"?
Great writing, true to character. A few typos and errors here and there, but they don't interrupt the flow too much that the meaning is lost. Some parts are a bit wordy, but overall I think this was a very pleasant read!