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The Grey Pegasus
Pony stuff author since 2012. Writes supposedly good stuff. Still haven't made a break. Still persistent. Probably highly unlucky. Or hated by the universe. Either determined or insane. Or both.
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Note that I wrote this during "I'm going mad" hour, which is also known as "Luna's awake" hour. Because of this, I wrote something no sane person would. I am, however, aware that this story could go either way. Personally, I know it's stupid. Oh well. At least I finished this random one-shot. I also changed my author's comment to have a little more sanity in it. I've got the original somewhere else, just for the heck of it.
EDIT: Well I finally woke up, and failed moderation because I forgot to put tags.
I still don't know why I wrote this.
EDIT 2: Thanks to Altoid for telling me that this was not too insane. And I'm a lot more awake and can think more clearly. So I've made a decision. With enough comments, I'll post the original author's note.
Anyways, comment your thoughts and yeah.
I liked it
A brilliant short story if you ask me. You capture Twilight's mental process quite well, and portray it fluently. Bravo to you.
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The secret to conveying Twilight's thoughts well? Have a very similar personality.
Actually, this was on my original commentary.
good and witty, loved it
Well done, good sir.
I liked this. An excellent portrayal of Twilight's mind, and how she might think. I like that you didn't tell us what the book was actually about, as it wasn't the point of the story, and providing the answer would have taken away from the rest of it. If it turned out to be something simple, you might think "Oh, it was just a book about xxxx, Twilight's blowing stuff out of proportion again, hahaha.
Although, the ending feels a little tacked on. Twilight being confused raises the question; why is she confused? Again, this takes away from the story. I would have just had Twilight say something like "Shh! I'm reading!"
Great story though.
You get a thumb and a fave from me!
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Actually, this entire story is a reflection of the reader. The in-story book was essentially a reflection of this story (or, rather, seeing this story). I expected you to be like "I have no idea what this was" or "What just happened" after reading the story. Again, I might post the original author's note, because it is pretty informative.
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Yeah, I was thinking that while I read. Maybe I'm reading into it too much?
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If you started thinking that, "too much" is still the correct amount! But Twilight's reactions were the exact reactions I'd have.
Pony personality test is actually right this time.
Dear Celestia Twilight... just READ THE BOOK!! You're making me go crazy over here.
Seriously though, very good story, to me a story is always successful when it makes me feel something, and boy did this make me feel kind of frustrated (but in that weird somewhat bemused way that leaves you smiling and shaking your head).
And that special kind of history book what is that supposed to mean? Seems dirty but I don't know
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I hope Twilight's "I have no idea" matches your feeling.
As for the history book part, well, book titles aren't always straightforward, and history books aren't exempt. It's also my way of alluding to the "Alternate Universe" tag, though very vague... (Each FiMFic story tag, except for Human, Random (depending how you look at Random), and Crossover, was somehow referenced in her monologue.)
This story made me go through a similar monologue to what Twilight did. Only shorter, as this was tagged and had a description.
Anyway, I liked this. You kept the whole thing the right length. You had everything flow until just before the point when it'd bore your readers. If that was intentional, you're a very good author. If it wasn't, you're a good and very lucky author.
Oh, and before I leave, what was the book about? Was it even about anything? Was it this story, putting a story in itself, ending up creating an infinite fictional loop that threatens to destroy the mind of anyone who thinks into it too much?
Yeah, I'll go for the last one. Would explain why Twilight was so confused. I too would be confused if I found myself reading a book about the circumstances that lead to me reading that book in the first place.
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Fun fact: I tried to submit without a tag, but failed moderation because of that.
The book is unspecified, because the story actually reflects what you just went through. It could be technically this story, but it doesn't matter. It probably is, considering your reasoning.
1212554 Somehow, I saw that answer coming. Though I guess my last guess kinda sorta fits what little information you just disclosed so I'll just keep pretending that was correct in order to sate my hunger for completeness and self-sustaining loops of pseudo-reality. The latter of which kind of removes any hope of completeness...
I'm better off not knowing, right?
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If I don't know myself, it's probably better that you don't either.
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You did a good job with this! I really enjoyed the ending.
Wow. Just... wow.
You sir/ma'am, are an amazing author.
Six out of five mustaches for a superultraextremeawsomazing story. This should be on the featured list.
Oh, And One Fluttershy
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Yeah, well, I remember trying. Didn't happen.
This is a story that...Really made me think about how I look at stories in a rather interesting way.
Really not sure how I feel about it XD Well done