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Lunas Light

Facing tomorrow will always be scary... but we should be more afraid of clinging to the past.

Comments ( 9 )

Omg <3
Sorry I couldn't make it in time for your contest, but I hope you enjoy! Thank you for inspiring me to write!

Hope there's more incest impregnation out of you soon, dude. Because for me, this story just works.

annnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnd she gives birth to a colt!

pawii1 #7 · May 22nd · · ·

It ends too soon :C

This is your official review from Dirty Little Secret's Dirty Little Contest!
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------ Review ------

Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-It's nice how they're all so casual and matter-of-fact about it.
-Cadance secretly watching them was also a really nice touch.
-Cadance's womb could only bare one child -- bear.
-I think the sex scene could have been drawn out a little bit more, maybe with more than one position.
-But the pacing wasn't bad, and the story did manage to actually be satisfying, despite being fairly short.

------ Scores ------

To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 93/100
Allure: 85/100
Enticement: 90/100
Immersion: 87/100
Prose Quality: 89/100
Total Score: 444/500
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Thank you for reading and rating my story! I appreciate the in-depth analysis, especially with how many stories you have to go through!
I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! <3

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