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Dr Sharaz Jek

Cynically Pretentious Hedonistic Nihilist...and those are my nicer qualities!

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Thanks! Wish I'd had time to flesh it out more!

You know about super magnets?

Admittedly not familiar.

What if a spell hits someone's manhood to not only plunge into any lady's flower like a couple of magnets but humping and coming continuously to submission?

With no loss of energy and no blackouts via refueling.

Same, but it felt like I'm reading the middle of a story, then suddenly the end. That took me out of the story quite a bit.

Sorry about that, definitely the most rushed of my entries into the contest! Didn't even plan to write a Celestia fic, but sudden inspiration hit me and so I said what the hay?

As a fan of Fluttershy and by association flutterbat I must know where this picture came from.

Artist is Danmakuman

The churn of Tia's fuckhole signaled her approaching release, and Shy restrained herself, made certain they came as one.

Thanks, but since this is part of a contest I can't currently edit it.

Both characters are over 18.

an ancient immortal and a vampire is this warning actually required or are you just playing safe?

Playing safe, a mod once jumped on my case for not putting a warning on what should be obvious.

This is your official review from Dirty Little Secret's Dirty Little Contest!
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------ Review ------

Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Interesting idea to have a vampire go after milk rather than blood.
-until its upon her -- it's.
-Tense slipping.
-the fatty orb -- sometimes your wording can be a turn-off.
-Not really buying Celestia's very fast transition to calling Flutterbat 'master'. Or ... have they been doing this a lot already? It's not really clear.
-Very rushed and not much emotion.
-Flutterbat x Celestia is a very unique pairing, even among entrants for this contest's bonus round.

------ Scores ------

To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 50/100
Allure: 65/100
Enticement: 30/100
Immersion: 40/100
Prose Quality: 70/100
Total Score: 255/500
The more specialized scores for individual prizes, as well as the results of the community poll, will be published when the full results are announced. If this story wins any awards, there will be another post in the story comments sometime after June 9th announcing that this story has won.

Thank you for participating, and thank you for contributing to Fimfic's collection of clop!

"...musk of your sexhole" ? Ewww. Interesting idea, but not very sexy in the end. It's a bit rushed, and there's no real seduction involved. it just doesn't work for me.

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