I like SCP, FNAF, Mlp, BaTIM, D&D and Undertale. I use Grammarly a lot and I am solo author with 1 crossover so far.
(The translation of the title is"WAIT WHAT IS HAPPENING?") So I meet the merchant, buy the gaster mask go, to Equestria as W.D Gaster and have fun. What could go wrong? Well the author involves Murphy's law. I meet some villains and help save the world. Plus I show to the world I am not what the princess thought I was.
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What? An E-Rated Displaced story?
But how can I be a big boy if it doesnโt have potty-mouth words and naughty private-part bits?
Well I like to keep my stories for all people. Plus I usually stay out of the sex department.
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yes luna-sensei
10207188 Well I can already tell you that youโre more ahead of the curve than most.
nowhere
Decent read I hope you have a tiuburium filled day
Seems a bit rushed... but otherwise it seems like a really good story!
I'm going to guess you're fairly young, so I'll keep the criticism as constructive as I can.
The spelling and grammar check tools that you can find in most writing software are your friends. Even if you're just using Google Docs, use the spellchecker before posting. You will have a much better reception if you do.
As for writing style, it's fairly evident that you are a beginner. Something I would recommend that helped me would be to trying imitating the style of an author you enjoy reading. Read a lot of books. It will help.
But no matter what, keep writing. The saying "practice makes perfect" is a saying for a reason. Don't get discouraged by a couple of false starts. Write and write, until you can't write anymore. Then, keep writing. If you truly love to write stories, I have no doubt you can become a great author one day.
This is a nice story dude try to make more chapters and I also love with what you are going with man.
Thank you for the positive feedback!
By the way who solved the code/WingDing in the author's notes?
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Unless its Guardians of the Galaxy reference then it is Knowhere
Thank you for the feedback of the โknow whereโ part
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Anytime.
New chapter has bine posted!
I love this story and the fact that Gaster broke twilight and surprised Pinkie.
I can tell you're really passionate about this story. That's good! I think now it's a matter of articulating your passion so other people can fully understand it.
When you write a story, especially a story like this one, it's easy for the reader to get thrown out of it when you make grammar mistakes. It was hard for me to get immersed in this story because at times the incorrect grammar and spelling was off-putting. There should also be a tad more lore because sometimes things seem to happen for no reason. You want the reader to feel like they are experiencing the story.
I had similar issues starting out- I joined this website when I was 12 and all of my fanfiction is from that time period. The only reason I don't take it down now is because I think it serves as a good example and shows off how far I've gotten. I'm 17 now and I've earned multiple national awards in writing. I was also named one of the best teen writers in the U.S. by Scholastic- now I have a big scholarship because of it. I get to go to a prestigious, usually expensive school for very cheap when I couldn't have afforded college at all otherwise. All of that started from my often poorly received MLP fanfics.
If you work hard and read a whole lot, you can easily get there, too. Keep your passion burning. I can see that you like what you do, so own it and go in 100%, okay? This is a decent start, but always strive to be better. I promise that it'll pay off.
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Thank you for the feedback!
...........You have solved the riddle, half of twilights magic thing I was going to do and stumped me! I will get the chapter done way faster because of that!
by the way half of it is wrong.....Sorry
By the way if you want here is a spoiler! ็ณ๐โ โ๏ธ๐ง๏ธ โ๏ธ๐๐ โโ ๏ธ๐ ็ณ๐โ โ๏ธโน๏ธ็ณโ๏ธโก๏ธ๐ง๏ธ ๐๏ธโโ ๏ธโ๏ธโโโน๏ธ ๐โโ๏ธ๐ง๏ธ๐๏ธ โ๏ธ๐ง๏ธ ๐๐ ๐๏ธโ๐ง๏ธ๐ ๐๐โ ๏ธโ๐๏ธโ๏ธ๐๏ธ๐ and put that with Twilight.
Hey I know how hard test are so don't push yourself to hard trying to do both your test and this and I wish you luck on your test
Thank you!!!!!
This is awesome man you really know how to make a good chapter man keep going this is getting good.
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Thanks man!
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i know that is the point!!!!!!!
any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
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I think around Jul 6-10 I can finish it.
Sorry but just got a fever and sore throat I think the chapters will be delayed a bit.
Wingding is a font not a language
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Dont pull out a translator and tell me what he says then.