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Nightmare_Me


I like SCP, FNAF, Mlp, BaTIM, D&D and Undertale. I use Grammarly a lot and I am solo author with 1 crossover so far.

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(The translation of the title is"WAIT WHAT IS HAPPENING?") So I meet the merchant, buy the gaster mask go, to Equestria as W.D Gaster and have fun. What could go wrong? Well the author involves Murphy's law. I meet some villains and help save the world. Plus I show to the world I am not what the princess thought I was.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 37 )

What? An E-Rated Displaced story?

But how can I be a big boy if it doesn’t have potty-mouth words and naughty private-part bits?

Well I like to keep my stories for all people. Plus I usually stay out of the sex department.

10207188 Well I can already tell you that you’re more ahead of the curve than most.

Decent read I hope you have a tiuburium filled day

Seems a bit rushed... but otherwise it seems like a really good story!

I'm going to guess you're fairly young, so I'll keep the criticism as constructive as I can.

The spelling and grammar check tools that you can find in most writing software are your friends. Even if you're just using Google Docs, use the spellchecker before posting. You will have a much better reception if you do.

As for writing style, it's fairly evident that you are a beginner. Something I would recommend that helped me would be to trying imitating the style of an author you enjoy reading. Read a lot of books. It will help.

But no matter what, keep writing. The saying "practice makes perfect" is a saying for a reason. Don't get discouraged by a couple of false starts. Write and write, until you can't write anymore. Then, keep writing. If you truly love to write stories, I have no doubt you can become a great author one day.

This is a nice story dude try to make more chapters and I also love with what you are going with man.

Thank you for the positive feedback!

By the way who solved the code/WingDing in the author's notes?

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Unless its Guardians of the Galaxy reference then it is Knowhere

Thank you for the feedback of the “know where” part

I love this story and the fact that Gaster broke twilight and surprised Pinkie.

I can tell you're really passionate about this story. That's good! I think now it's a matter of articulating your passion so other people can fully understand it.

When you write a story, especially a story like this one, it's easy for the reader to get thrown out of it when you make grammar mistakes. It was hard for me to get immersed in this story because at times the incorrect grammar and spelling was off-putting. There should also be a tad more lore because sometimes things seem to happen for no reason. You want the reader to feel like they are experiencing the story.

I had similar issues starting out- I joined this website when I was 12 and all of my fanfiction is from that time period. The only reason I don't take it down now is because I think it serves as a good example and shows off how far I've gotten. I'm 17 now and I've earned multiple national awards in writing. I was also named one of the best teen writers in the U.S. by Scholastic- now I have a big scholarship because of it. I get to go to a prestigious, usually expensive school for very cheap when I couldn't have afforded college at all otherwise. All of that started from my often poorly received MLP fanfics.

If you work hard and read a whole lot, you can easily get there, too. Keep your passion burning. I can see that you like what you do, so own it and go in 100%, okay? This is a decent start, but always strive to be better. I promise that it'll pay off.

.✌︎♰❄︎👇⚐☀📪 ✡︎⚐♰ 👍︎✌︎☠︎ ☠︎⚐❄︎ ❄︎👈☹︎☹︎ ❄︎👇👈 ☀⚐✡︎✌︎☹︎ 🚩☀✋︎☠︎👍︎👈💧︎💧︎👈💧︎ ✌︎👌︎⚐♰❄︎ ⚐♰☀ 🚩☹︎✌︎☠︎✏ok, ok fine I will not tell! 👆⚐⚐👎︎ 👌︎👈👍︎✌︎♰💧︎👈 ✋︎👉 ✡︎⚐♰ 👎︎✋︎👎︎ ✋︎ 申✋︎☹︎☹︎ 👉✋︎☠︎👎︎ ✡︎⚐♰✏✏✏ *Gulp* By the way if you want to you can translate it!

A(V/U)

(Translating from the phone. DAMN IT WAS MUCH HARDER)

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y︎oU c︎a︎n︎ n︎ot︎ t︎ELL
THE Roy︎a︎l︎ PRi︎n︎c︎Es︎s︎Es︎ a︎b︎oUt︎ oUR
Pl︎a︎n︎!

ok, ok fine i will not tell! Good︎ b︎Ec︎a︎Us︎E i︎F y︎oU
d︎i︎d︎ I KiLL Find You...

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After First Page was easier

☼✋︎✞︎☜☼ 🏱☜☼💧︎⚐☠︎ ☞☼⚐💣︎ 🕆☠︎👎︎☜☼❄︎✌︎☹︎☜📬
RI︎V︎ER PERS︎ON︎ FROM︎ UN︎D︎ERT︎A︎L︎E.

Boss Mob Soul GASTER
Theory with Twilight Sparkle similarity

AND TWILIGHT SPARKLE IS MAGIC.

REAPER TALE. GASTER IS MAGIC GOD

TWILIGHT SPARKLE IS MAGIC MASTER/MISTREES
MIDNIGHT SPARKLE KNOWLEDGE,
PRINCESS OF FRIENDSHIP

MAGIC IS SORCERY

TWILIGHT SPARKLE IS THE FUSION UNITING ALL

TWILIGHT SPARKLE TURNED TO ALICORN

ALICORNS ARE GODS/DEMIGODS OF THEIR CRAFT

TWILIGHT SPARKLE IS MASTER TO ALL MAGIC
KNACK TO ALL MAGIC

THAT IS EQUAL TO TWILIGHT SPARKLE BECOME GODDES OF MAGIC EVERYWHERE LOCAL IN EQUESTRIA

GASTER IS MAGIC OF ALL AND IS UNDERTALE.
GASTER CAN DO ALL MAGIC POTENTIAL.
GASTER POTENTIAL IS SHOWN IN X WHEN WAS HIT DANGER 7 OR WAS 8 TIME

INK GASTER? , AND REAPERTALE WHEN GASTER WAS MAGIC GOD.

☹︎♰❄︎❄︎👈☀💧︎👇✡︎ 申✋︎☹︎☹︎ 👌︎👈 💧︎✌︎✞︎👈👎︎ 👌︎✡︎ 👆✌︎💧︎❄︎👈☀

Fl︎Ut︎t︎ERs︎Hy︎ Ki︎l︎l︎ b︎E s︎a︎v︎Ed︎ b︎y︎ Ga︎s︎t︎ER

...........You have solved the riddle, half of twilights magic thing I was going to do and stumped me! I will get the chapter done way faster because of that!

By the way if you want here is a spoiler! 申👇⚐ ✋︎💧︎ ❄︎👇👈 ⚐☠︎👈 申👇⚐ ✌︎☹︎申✌︎✡︎💧︎ 👍︎⚐☠︎❄︎☀⚐☹︎ 👉☀✋︎💧︎😐︎ ✋︎💧︎ 👇👈 👎︎⚐💧︎👈 👆👈☠︎⚐👍︎✋︎👎︎👈 and put that with Twilight.

Hey I know how hard test are so don't push yourself to hard trying to do both your test and this and I wish you luck on your test

This is awesome man you really know how to make a good chapter man keep going this is getting good.

"Of course that will cost you 2 bits and I am going there as well since you promised I can come to your house," Gaster told me.

So it 2 legged so it is Scary Minotaur and everything with 2 legs is Evil is that the assumption, it is rediculus

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i know that is the point!!!!!!!

Well now what to think?
IS GASTER REALLY THE VILIAN?

My bad time is in the best case switching megalovania in

Unless if it goes in bigger madness

any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?

Comment posted by Nightmare_Me deleted Jul 3rd, 2020

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I think around Jul 6-10 I can finish it.

Sorry but just got a fever and sore throat I think the chapters will be delayed a bit.

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