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Twilight’s surge of uncontrolled magic changed ponies into pot plants, hatched a petrified dragon egg and gave her Princess Platinum study plushie a makeover and an existential crisis.

Celestia’s still not sure how to deal with that one, but at least Twilight has someone to remind her to eat now.


Twilight Velvet's mother, Evening Star was an odd pony with a hobby of making dolls. Over the course of her life, she made many and most were simple toys to comfort a newborn foal or young filly but a rare few were far more sentimental and held more personal meanings. Some said they had a bit of personality all their own, often being in the right place perk up a sad day. Her last few creations carried with them fables of moving when no pony was watching but few ever tried to put the theory to the test.

Then again, none of her works were at ground zero to a record breaking magic surge.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 293 )

As Keeper of Fuzzy Stuffed Twilight Friends, I hereby Approve This Fic.

I don't know why I decided to read it.
I knew what I was getting into.
Yet I still decided to do it.
Now my light is turned on and this will be a sleepless night.
For if I turn off the light, I will see the black empty eyes of the doll staring at me.

I hate dolls. I hate these immobile terrors.

This is extremely neat! A very nice atmosphere and tight little buildup. I'd almost say that a majority of this could stand apart on its own, but I'm ready to see where you go.

And that submit button? You'll grow into it.

Trust me, you’re always right to fear that submit button. :heart:

Excellent start, I can’t wait to see where it goes! Princess Fuzzy is adorable.

Oho, I’ve got a good feeling about this story.

Reality: try all you want. Fake egg. So there.
Magic: what if reality was more a guideline than an absolute?
Reality: what heresy are you spouting?
Magic: alicorn level, so there. Boom!

The demand to hatch answered the spell lost its focus and Twilight found herself trapped in the grip of something else, her horn burning as wild magic lashed out, sweeping across the room. Her parents were caught trying to take cover behind a suddenly tiny desk and discovering life as pot plants while Cadance deflected the beam that surged for her with a shield of her own, leaving the pink disc cracked and creaking like glass.

Only nit pick, Cadance's magic is blue, other wise Nice start! I will be following this. I'm glad you wrote it.

This is a great start. Can't wait to see where it goes.

Ooo. Color me intrigued. Definitely tracking.

And up into the featured list you go!

Really good start. I look forwards to more.

This is off to a fun start! :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Cross Lament deleted Apr 28th, 2020

Maybe one day I'll learn not to fear that 'submit' button.

You must not fear. Fear is the mind-killer. Fear is the little-death that brings total obliteration. You will face your fear. You will permit it to pass over you and through you. And when it has gone past you will turn the inner eye to see its path. Where the fear has gone there will be nothing. Only the Submit button will remain.

"Princess Celestia brought her focus to bare on Twilight" - typo for "bear".

Fate played its hand...

Yeah, he's a gambler like that.

He also cheats.

Propped up in a seat where it could watch the proceedings, untouched until that moment, the doll, Princess Fuzzy, blinked her eyes and took a breath.

Okay boys and girls, gather around! Today we're going to learn about the ethics of unintended consequences and/or results, and the mage's responsibilities thereof.

Thanks for the support, folks. It means a lot!

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You have a point regarding the color. Cadance's magic has been shifted back to the blue spectrum.

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I read this line like, three times and it didn't twig. Celestia now keeps her clothes on.

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Yay! More plz!

You had my curiosity, but now you have my attention.

mooooooore please i can see so much good from this

Always Submit. Looking forward to where this goes.

Very interesting premise looking forward to seeing where it goes. Poor reality lost an argument with magic if it hadn't been so orderly discord would've loved it

Really looking forward to the next chapter. Also the bit about the egg is an interesting touch.

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Enjoying this so far. Mechanically very good, only noticed one grammar error ("You’re final task, Miss Twilight") and I think the premise is interesting. Thanks for writing.

Followed this from Goerg's blog post and already following.

Ri2

Well, I'm eager to see where this is going. Though if the egg was always fake, then how exactly was Twilight supposed to pass the exam?

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In some other fanfics, authors would guess that the point was not to see if the applicant could hatch the egg, but to see how they approached the problem and what spells they would attempt.

I am looking forward to more of this story.:yay::twilightsmile::raritystarry:

10205139 Its to see how they deal with failure and the methods they try to hatch it

This is cute and has captured my interest. I will be watching with much anticipation!

I like it

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More than one author has observed that if you think about it, having untested novices throw spells at an unborn infant of a sapient species is a dozen kinds of messed up.

Ri2

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Given how shoddy and racist the education system is, though...

Little did they know a changeling had taken the place of her doll... :trixieshiftleft:
Just kidding!
This looks like fun!
Keep going! ;)

An interesting beginning, i need moar.

I enjoy
Omg i never thought spikes egg could of been fake but its so obvious now like why the fuck would they bring a baby dragon egg around unstable powerful unicorns dragon eggs prob arnt fragile by any means but some of those unicorns cutiemarks might be blowin shit up and thats fuckin baby endagerment right there what if Torch found out i dont know if hed not give a shit a weakling died or declare war due to a inferior race capturing then killing one of his peeps. And what does terry pratchet say about magic he who doesnt know the rules can do anything.
Lastly spelling error turned her parents into pot plants make it potted plants not pot plants least your trying to throw some stoner pride in here. Twilights parents come out of it like woah man that was crazy i felt as high as a kite what is this reality am i right

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Ive heard that it was a test on a fillys ability to admit defeat with grace you know how some of those nobles can be, needed to weed those problem children out or at least take note of them so they dont go causing any problems

Excellent start. Loved how you described Twilight and the little hints that Fuzzy was already a little bit more than a mere doll.
Great work, will be looking forward to more. :heart:

'This egg must hatch.' Magic commanded.
'The egg is not real, it is plaster and paint.' Reality replied.
'The egg must hatch. It must be real.' Rebuke.
'There is no dragon hatchling inside. The egg was not real.' Protest.
'This egg must be real to hatch, thus there must be a hatchling inside. Thus is was always a real egg.' Ultimatum.

This reminds me of the story Twilight Sparkle Lays an Egg. :trollestia:

Okay
1: this was great, I loved everything. From the families interaction to shining being a great big brother to Spike basically being willed into existence.
2. HERPY DERPY. I read the description wrong. Cos it was a Princess Platinum doll I thought that It was the real Princess Platinum turned into a doll by a curse or something, and had been passed down generations cos twilight’s family were descents of Clover And Twilight brought her back. LOL I so sup

Can’t wait for the next chapter

A very promising, and cute, start! Love to see where things will go from here. :twilightsmile:

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Dear lord, you weren't the only one.

You have my attention, Author.

I would love to see more of this unqiue story concept

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You have mine as well.

This is GLORIOUS

I loved it!
Tiny twilight is adorable, and I really want to see where this goes. Double friend animation for the win!


Also, the submit button is imposing, but don't worry. It gets pushed all over the place.

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