On a return trip from delivering to the yaks, Applejack finds herself in the middle of a snowstorm at night. out of the corner of her eye she sees a shadow. She doesn't know what it is or why it's there, all she knows is its following her.
My attempt at a psychological thriller.
Written for the Barcast Halloween in April contest.https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/893755/the-halloween-in-april-horror-contest
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Than you for the entry. I look forward to reading it.
It’s okay, but seeing as there was word room (even if this wasn’t for a word count limit) it lacks any build up tension. Like... you seen the Disney cartoon sleepy hallow where icabob is traveling, and it builds up? Could use a little more that. Also, you have tons of run on sentences
I'm actually not familiar and would be interested to know what monster you've used here. Yuki-onna?
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Yes actually. According to legend they freeze their favorite humans, or in this case ponies, and keep them in their cave like some kind of macabre knick-knack. Since Yuki-onna are usually depicted as humanoid I figured a pony equivalent would be equine in nature.
Generally they prefer males, but they don't exclusively hunt them. Sometimes they're depicted with a monstrous face, sometimes as beautiful woman, but unlike some monsters they are always maleficent.
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Ah! My knowledge of Yuki-onna begins and ends with "it means 'snow woman'". XD
On a different note, I kinda wish there'd been a bit of a scene with AJ and the yaks. Like, I just want to know, what would they call her? "Orange Pony"? "Apple Pony"? Maybe a combination of the two? Which I now realize would be intensely confusing and possibly even offensive to her. XD
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I get that but I was worried it'd go against the tone I was going for. As for what they'd all her, at the end of not asking for trouble Pinkie calls her Applepony while wearing the honorary yak horns. Doesn't mean that's what they'd call her but it's as close to a canonical answer as you'll get. Unless they mention it in the comics.