What he found there

The Slayer has rampaged through Hell before, he has seen many foul beings down there before, but never has he found something like this.

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Perpetually Confused

Perpetually Confused #1 · Apr 21st, 2020 · 12 · 2 ·

"Damn it Fluttershy, we told you NO INCUBI!"

"DON'T KINK SHAME ME YOU OBSTINATE PURPLE PRUDE!"

MrAquino

MrAquino #2 · Apr 22nd, 2020 · 3 · ·

Plot Twist: Angel Bunny Actually opened the portal to Hell

Slayer45jack

Slayer45jack #3 · Apr 22nd, 2020 · · ·

https://youtu.be/QydzTeVCeAA it's a cool song

Slayer45jack

Slayer45jack #4 · Apr 22nd, 2020 · · ·

https://youtu.be/U4lz8MN6MQA nice

MDCommissioner

MDCommissioner #5 · Apr 22nd, 2020 · 3 · ·

Twilight...for Fluttershy's sake could you...could stop messing with things that you don't know about?

DerpedRainbow

DerpedRainbow #6 · Apr 22nd, 2020 · · ·

Hell is never capitalized, and barely keeps getting replaced by barley.

PlayerError404

PlayerError404 #7 · Apr 22nd, 2020 · · ·

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thanks for pointing that out, gramma and spelling have never been my strong suit, just gonna fix that.

FarmFreshAppleTarts

FarmFreshAppleTarts #8 · Apr 23rd, 2020 · · ·

The Slayer nodded

AmanDash

AmanDash #9 · Apr 23rd, 2020 · · ·

The problem was the horde filling in the flat ground. Arachnotrons, Cacodemons, Mancubus, Whiplash, Revenant, Pinkys, Prowlers, Hell knights, Cyber demons and the Marauder standing atop the downed titan’s hand, screaming at the hordes bellow him.

You misspelled Archvile. A Marauder never screams, not even in pain, because he is a former, resurrected Night Sentinel, the demonic version of the Slayer. Also, Marauders tend to be fairly independent, but also not commanding armies. That's something an Archvile would do.

Some minor spelling errors aside, it is an excellent story, and I loved it.

Neo Lindell