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JayBear


Well, there’s not much to say here.

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Smolder and Ocellus struggle with their relationship. Smolder isn't too fond of labels.

She constantly has problems with what they are, versus what they're not. Are they girlfriends, or are they not?

Note: There was only very minor implied sex in the beginning, if you're wondering why the sex tag is there.

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Comments ( 17 )

And they were roommates.

Hot damn there’s been a lot of Smocellus fics lately. Not that I’m complaining. Smolder x Ocellus OTP.

You’ll probably be getting a visit from the Smocellus fairy soon, by the way.

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I'll be looking forward to it :raritystarry:

Ah that was pretty darn cute! :twilightsmile: Love's always going to take a little more work when you're coming at it with such strong cultural differences. But that's what makes it so adorable when that work leads to a happy ending. Thank you for writing this and for sharing your work. I was left smiling. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you! Gosh, I have no idea how to respond to stuff like this, I swear :rainbowlaugh:

Kkat #7 · April 16th · · ·

I love this. Especially the metaphor for Ocellus' eyes. That is a new and poignantly beautiful way to describe them from Smolder's perspective.

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I read over this, like, a thousand times and kept thinking that it was way over the top. Glad to see it isn't, thankfully.

What if Ocellus is in Thirsty Mode on Smolder?

Man, this was cute. I’m still fairly new on the Smolcellus train but I’m already ready to hook it to my veins.

And then they mated.

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Oh yes, they did.

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Mhm. You'll get used to it once you have it flowing in your bloodstream.

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This is the first thing that came to mind when I read this
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A great little story—it gave me warm and fuzzies.

One little nitpick, however, is phrasing like this:

Ocellus nearly grunted

It is very passive and wishy-washy. Did she grunt or did she not? Did she make any other sound that was almost-but-entirely-not-quite-a-grunt? A little more description of what actually happened would be much better.

Keep up the great writing!

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Thanks!

Ocellus grunted, nuzzling her snout into Smolder's stomach.

Fixed it.

10187556 Nice rework. Once again, loved the story!

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Thanks again! I'm really sorry- I haven't the slightest earthly idea on how to express proper gratitude the way I wanna express it.

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