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wadebicorn


The most cheapiest alternetive to FimFic

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I might be miss remembering, but didn't this story already exist about 2 years ago?

This is a Redux version error fix and all

Will keep up with this.

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He said this is a redux.

Not futa if they dont have balls

You have random punctuation and capitalization, you keep sticking random species/creatures into the story (bi-horn, tri-horn, gullfaxi, enbarr, etc.), you have an excess of long run-on sentences, and the messed-up dialog makes it extremely difficult for the reader to get into the story.

As on cue, a group on mare walking with some foils " let me introduce you to ArchDash, RainbowLight, Mana Bow, Wind River, Razer Bone my kids."

The word is foals, not foils

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sorry was really tired when finishing this story

Did Spitfire and Rainbow Dash get their places in the wonder bolts back?

Also I kind of want to see a sequel to this.

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