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Dalek-Galvo


Hello Fimfiction Writers, I am Dalek-Galvo, EQG Fimfic writer, and Supreme Ruler of the Dalek Race!

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Normal, everyday teenager Lemon Snicket was expecting to go to a normal school as he got a letter from a school known as Hallow High. But what he got was not what he had in mind. And he didn't expect the friends that he would make there to be all monsters either.

Now Lemony Snicket and his new Ghoulish friends must not only pass their classes, but stay under the radar from monster hunters and an army of mutant alien Pumpkins hell-bent on making the human world their new Pumpkin-Patch.

All Credit goes to Delgatron and Indigo Lightning Strike. :scootangel::scootangel::scootangel:

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 19 )

I like this intro.
This is gonna be a good story, i can tell.

I checked his map again just to make sure I was heading to the right place. I thought I was going in the wrong direction because no school would be near a spooky old swamp.

I think there’s a grammar mistake here.

"Is that the new student," The girl in the murky bog thought to herself. I wonder how the others are going to react that a human is coming to our school."

Is that supposed to be pinkie pie?

"Well, duh, haven't you heard of a vampire before?" The girl said.

At that moment I have my hands up ready to fight.

"No, This school is called Hallows Eve High, you know, a school for monsters, you don't look like any monster I've ever seen. Who are you anyway?" The girl said to me. "Oh, and my name is Sunset Shimmer by the way."

Did he get the wrong school?

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1) I saw the mistake and I will fix it.

2) That is supposed to be Fluttershy.

3)Don't worry, no fight ensues.

4) He didn't go to the wrong school. That will be explained in the next chapter.

What else could go wrong now?

Goddammit, you must NEVER say that out loud!

This sounds like a rather interesting premise of a slightly spooky comedy story :twilightsmile: The story is a bit rough around the edges in some spots, so you might consider consulting it with an editor or at least running it through Grammarly or something. Also, you could slow down and describe a bit more, like when Joseph explores the empty school. It’s really hard to go overboard with relevant details when creating an impactful atmosphere, so don’t let anything hold you back! :raritywink:

Hope this is continued soon, I really like Vamp Sunny.

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The Girl in the Swamp is Fluttershy.

Lemon is at the right school, he just didn't expect it to be a school for monsters.

“I’m sorry, I have a problem, blood can sometimes be as addictive as a drug,” Sunset said with a shy look.

Then why does she still drink it?

“However, we’ll need to give you a monster title so that the government won’t be suspicious of you,” Twilight said. “How about “Chainsaw Maniac,” will that be ok with you?”

Why?

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1) Sunset drinks blood from Hospital Packs, and not from living humans.

2) The Monster Government do not like Humans and would get rid of a human on the spot.

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Hold on, let me rephrase that, a small fraction of the Monster Government hate humans, the majority will tolerate them because they invite one human as a sort of social experiment.

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But if it’s only a fraction doesn’t that mean they can’t do anything?

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So why does he need to disguise himself if the small fraction isn’t a threat?

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