Prince Blueblood is sent to Ponyville for the day, and just can't get over his hoity-toity attitude, even when the rain starts to pour down and he's seeking shelter. Only a certain Earth Pony is willing to offer him protection from the storm, and maybe, just maybe, it'll get the Prince to start seeing Earth Ponies in a different way.
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This couple needs more popularity...
Nao...
I like what I've seen so far. It's a good start to a longer story, for sure. I can't wait to see more. *fangirl squee for coltcuddling*
The one thing I dislike is your style of thoughts, the single quote 'Blueblood is thinking this' stuff. Now, I'm not saying it's incorrect, but the usual style is for thoughts to be in italics, like Blueblood is thinking this. Just something to think about.
JKinsley: I usually do put thoughts in italics and just didn't think to do that at the time. It is something I can fix and change, and will remember to do from now on. I just wrote this story late one night when the muse was with me and wasn't worrying about grammar or anything of the like. I also hadn't intended to carry this story on into something further; it was to be a oneshot.
That was really cute.
I know this is just a one-shot but I'd would of liked if this continued. Nice either way.
you make me envius... i mean i wrote my own big mac blueblood fic and yours is far better..... i want to give you a giant gold star but cest la vie. if you ever think about cuntiueing the pairing maybe we could work on something together. i love your story telling ability
A very nice little oneshot, albeit with a few errors. The only major (And really, it isn't even that) thing I saw was this-
The way you wrote it makes the reader thinks that Caramel is talking in the first sentence, and Blueblood in the second. If you phrased it like this, it would be easier to understand-
Just a suggestion.
there needs to be more pairings of these two!!!
also...it seems that there should be another chapter :
Moar!