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I sit here to smug at you, but not by choice

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Second place winner of the Equestria at War 2020 Writing Contest.

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From: COMSUBEQR
To: LAS PEGASUS SSN-192
Info: CINCEQFLT TOP SECRET

Subj: MISSION ORDERS #0-982-13212.6
07 DEC 17 0730

1. (S) TACTICAL SITUATION:
INTELLIGENCE REPORTS INDICATE ONE OR MORE CHANGELING BOOMERS DEPARTING FOR THE NORTHERN ICE SHEETS FROM CAPTURED VANHOOVER AT HIGH SPEED WITH INTENTION TO LAUNCH NUCLEAR DEVICES

2. (S) PRIMARY OBJECTIVE:
LOCATE AND DESTROY CHANGELING NUCLEAR MISSILE ARMED SUBMARINES BEFORE SONOBOUY LOSES CONTACT

3. (S) SECONDARY OBJECTIVE:
DESTROY ESCORTING VESSELS

4. (S) AVOID DETECTION BY ENEMY ASW PATROLS

5. (S) WEAPONS FREE

6. (S) EMCON - MAINTAIN RADIO SILENCE UNLESS OTHERWISE DIRECTED

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 30 )

What's with all the (S)s in the synopsis?

10159880
"Secret"
Each paragraph is marked in shorthand.

That makes sense, and is likely what a real message would do. However, if every paragraph is only Secret, I'm not sure why the author made the message overall Top Secret.

10159890
I dunno, just following USN protocol

A submarine story with ponies, huh?

Eh, I'll give it a read.

Las Pegasus let out a single, mournful screech that increased in pitch. Only one ping needed.

"My Horse code is so rusty, I could be sending him the front page of Equestria Daily.”

Haha. Nice reference to–

"As the highest ranking changeling here, I'd like to surrender this vessel, and on behalf of the crew, seek asylum in Equestria."

:rainbowderp: Holy cow, this IS The Hunt for Red October. And man, do I need to get around to watching that movie in full...

Anyway, nice work. I'm not normally one for ponies-with-human-like-warfare-tech, but this was pretty good, even if the naval jargon felt a bit overwhelming at times. But that just comes with being an average civilian, I suppose.

Here, have an upvote.

10160097

There are a lot of references to some popular submarine movies in the story, let's see how many you can pick out and from which movies.

An' thanks

10159862
Ah, a fellow man of culture

10160304
Soviets: Think Able Archer was real
NATO: Bro wtf it was a prank bro

10160320
NATO nuclear drill in the 80s
Ruskies took it as an actual nuclear attack and almost started World War III

10160339
It was just a prank bro wtf you didn't have to do that you know. Totally uncool thing to do. I thought we were cool, least kinda.

Hey, if this is for the contest, you may want to put it in the contest folder. I'm not sure if the judges will rate this if this isn't there.

10160527
I left it under wartime, is it supposed to be in the main folder?

10160892
I'm not sure if I understood the question correctly, but if the story is set during the war, it's ok to keep it in the wartime folder. I don't think there's really a main folder.

10160903
Well I added it to it either way, thanks

This better rank high up there in the contest.

Good shit, my dude.

10161204
Thanks, but I can't be sure that it will; it might be a bit arrogant of me to expect to place anywhere on my first attempt on an alternate universe I have almost no knowledge about

10161215
It's more original and plausible than most stories submitted so far, so you've got people beat there :twilightsmile:

10161279
🤔
I should read the other submissions

This was really good actually, keep it up! Would love to see this story expanded upon.

10164888
Huh, thanks :twilightsmile:
We'll see how it goes, I might do more for further contests.

Christ, now this is a bloody good story.

Loved the references to 'The Red October' (it's one of my favourite movies). Fantastic!

10167048
Idk what else to say other than thanks now :/

Two hundred nine groups!? Some of them don't even look relevant.

10176273
Did you actually take the time to look through lol

Hey there. This was reviewed here. Thanks for picking me as a reviewer, and I hope you find what I have to say useful. Deuces!

10184607
You madlad, you actually did it

"CONN, SONAR, LAUNCH TRANSIENT, BEARING TWO, ONE, SIX. SUPER-CAVITATION SIGNATURE DET- 'FOG' FAST TORPEDO! FAST TORPEDO IN THE WATER!"

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