Second place winner of the Equestria at War 2020 Writing Contest.
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From: COMSUBEQR
To: LAS PEGASUS SSN-192
Info: CINCEQFLT TOP SECRETSubj: MISSION ORDERS #0-982-13212.6
07 DEC 17 07301. (S) TACTICAL SITUATION:
INTELLIGENCE REPORTS INDICATE ONE OR MORE CHANGELING BOOMERS DEPARTING FOR THE NORTHERN ICE SHEETS FROM CAPTURED VANHOOVER AT HIGH SPEED WITH INTENTION TO LAUNCH NUCLEAR DEVICES2. (S) PRIMARY OBJECTIVE:
LOCATE AND DESTROY CHANGELING NUCLEAR MISSILE ARMED SUBMARINES BEFORE SONOBOUY LOSES CONTACT3. (S) SECONDARY OBJECTIVE:
DESTROY ESCORTING VESSELS4. (S) AVOID DETECTION BY ENEMY ASW PATROLS
5. (S) WEAPONS FREE
6. (S) EMCON - MAINTAIN RADIO SILENCE UNLESS OTHERWISE DIRECTED
Chapters (2)
Cold Waters, huh?
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1984 Campaign
What's with all the (S)s in the synopsis?
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"Secret"
Each paragraph is marked in shorthand.
That makes sense, and is likely what a real message would do. However, if every paragraph is only Secret, I'm not sure why the author made the message overall Top Secret.
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I dunno, just following USN protocol
A submarine story with ponies, huh?
Eh, I'll give it a read.
Haha. Nice reference to–
Anyway, nice work. I'm not normally one for ponies-with-human-like-warfare-tech, but this was pretty good, even if the naval jargon felt a bit overwhelming at times. But that just comes with being an average civilian, I suppose.
Here, have an upvote.
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An' thanks
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Ah, a fellow man of culture
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Soviets: Think Able Archer was real
NATO: Bro wtf it was a prank bro
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Able Archer?
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NATO nuclear drill in the 80s
Ruskies took it as an actual nuclear attack and almost started World War III
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It was just a prank bro wtf you didn't have to do that you know. Totally uncool thing to do. I thought we were cool, least kinda.
Hey, if this is for the contest, you may want to put it in the contest folder. I'm not sure if the judges will rate this if this isn't there.
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I left it under wartime, is it supposed to be in the main folder?
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I'm not sure if I understood the question correctly, but if the story is set during the war, it's ok to keep it in the wartime folder. I don't think there's really a main folder.
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Well I added it to it either way, thanks
This better rank high up there in the contest.
Good shit, my dude.
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Thanks, but I can't be sure that it will; it might be a bit arrogant of me to expect to place anywhere on my first attempt on an alternate universe I have almost no knowledge about
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It's more original and plausible than most stories submitted so far, so you've got people beat there
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🤔
I should read the other submissions
This was really good actually, keep it up! Would love to see this story expanded upon.
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Huh, thanks
We'll see how it goes, I might do more for further contests.
Christ, now this is a bloody good story.
Loved the references to 'The Red October' (it's one of my favourite movies). Fantastic!
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Idk what else to say other than thanks now :/
Two hundred nine groups!? Some of them don't even look relevant.
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Did you actually take the time to look through lol
Hey there. This was reviewed here. Thanks for picking me as a reviewer, and I hope you find what I have to say useful. Deuces!
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You madlad, you actually did it
"CONN, SONAR, LAUNCH TRANSIENT, BEARING TWO, ONE, SIX. SUPER-CAVITATION SIGNATURE DET- 'FOG' FAST TORPEDO! FAST TORPEDO IN THE WATER!"
Hunt for Red October, Cold Waters...pretty sure I saw a quickie for Hunter Killer...crap, there’s one other submarine movie. Not Down Periscope, something else...and it’s not coming to me.
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Heehee