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Omega Dracomancer
I'm not the best writer, but I can write.
Omega Dracomancer
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------ Review ------
Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Character voices and personalities are believable.
-It’s really cute how Celestia is extra sensitive but tries to remain educational and informative.
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viberators-- spelling.-
The camera is still rolling, sister.-- 'sister' should be capitalized in cases like this. There are quite a few instances of this in the story.-
will love vibrations." she said-- incorrect punctuation.-Interesting giving Luna her limited but significant role.
-Odd that there's not more discussion of lube, especially earlier on.
-It's a kinky premise, and it's fun to think of her putting herself on display like this.
------ Scores ------
To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 85/100
Allure: 89/100
Enticement: 87/100
Immersion: 92/100
Prose Quality: 86/100
Total Score: 439/500
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oof fekkin always misspel vibrators, google didn't really correct it when i searched for viberators and I always forget.
Had no idea about the family relation being capitalized in certain instances, now I have to look over some other things I'm writing.
Surprised it rated so well, it was very messy in places, but that's probably just me being overcritical of my own work. Probably didn't help that I rewrote this from its original concept in like a day and only briefly gave it a quality check.