Feeling the need to calm her young students during the terrifying weather, Celestia tells them of the first student she ever taught, the student who inspired her to establish her school for gifted unicorns, the student who showed her any unicorn could have extraordinary potential.
This story has a lot of potential.
But are several things you need to work on:
You have potential, but you need to hone your craft.
Wow that was really good I really enjoyed it