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damiranc1


Dinosaur fan. English is not my native language, and my stories can sometimes be really hard to read. Twirax shipper DERPI-LINKVALIDATION-3A1B5ADE8B

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When Ocean Flow left her family behind for a different mate, Sky Beak's life turns upside down. Everything changed immediately upon meeting his new love.

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 65 )

"Will you marry me, Princess Twilight Sparkle?"

Well, that was fast.

She must have really impressed him at the screeching competition. :rainbowlaugh:

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Well, desperate means desperate XDD

Please have Twilight transform into a Hippogriff X3

And all she did was comfort him when he was crying. :rainbowlaugh:

Where do you think Terramar's name came from?

I wanna see Silverstream's reaction to this. First Twilight was her Head Mare. Now she's her mom?

I don't think best hippogriph will know what to do.

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I can't give any spoilers about new chapters. :twilightsmile:

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PM me to avoid doing so and talk about something else :P

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A combination of ’terra’ and ‘mare’, or in English, earth and sea. Remember in his first episode he was conflicted about whether he belonged with his mom and the sea ponies or with his dad and the hippogriffs.

This is... I feel this is a little concerning.

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Do not worry, It's just a short obsession. It goes away with time :twilightsmile:

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Not the obsession part; the 'technical-forced-marriage' part.

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Well, explaining this will cause spoilers, so wait for next chapters :)

Poor poor Twilight Sparkle :rainbowlaugh:

I assume this in Season 8, cause if not, none of this makes any sense. More than it already does.

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It takes place after Season 9

Sky Beak's behavior will be explained :)

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You probably should've said when it was set from the begining. Cause now Equestria might go to war once they learn Twilight was kidnapped like this.

That's what I'm calling it anyway. Did I miss what she said to convince loverbirdhorse she would marry him? I honestly forgot if I did.

THIS IS DIFFERENT! DIFFERENT IS INTERESTING!

Silverstream was great here. :twilightsheepish:

It seems pretty good.

A few grammical errors, but I'll be happy to help with that.

The whole story seems pretty good and gripping

You have a good story here but I would wholeheartedly suggest that you get yourself a proofreader to check for things like grammar and tense, because it’s kind of all over the place. But not in a way that completely makes it a deal-breaker. I will very much put this story on my favorites list and will eagerly look forward to its next chapters.

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yes¡¡ silverstream is live silverstream is love

Waiting for the next part

I hope this continues

hmm...interesting

"Are you kidding me..." Terramar mumbled with shock going out from his insides. "...right?"

No.

Continue plz... Though Terramar is being a jerk in this... I don't like that. But good story!

Is the story going to continue on

"Will you marry me, Princess Twilight Sparkle?"

Okay that escalated really quickly lol but this is very interesting take on I wonder how this will go

Once again things really escalated so quickly lol I know what terramar is feeling right now but I want to know what silverstream is feeling about this and oh boy I wonder how Twilight got herself into this mess 😅

Pretty cute. Especially the scene with them in bed.

If you like I can help you edit

This is weird. It has weird vibes. I'm not saying I don't like it though, I might do, I don't know, this is weird.

Glad to see you’re working on this again.

"Will you marry me, Princess Twilight Sparkle?"
The new Equestria princess somehow managed to hide her shock, but all her emotions inside were confused. She didn't know what to say then, considering how the hippogriff himself looked desperate with this one question

.

This is what I was thinking when I read this.

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Thank you so much for posting that video. :rainbowlaugh:

this is getting good *grabs popcorn*

This is extremely awkward and weird. Twilight was kidnapped forced into it without her choice, was close to breaking down over it and now she's accepting it or not? :unsuresweetie:

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Don't worry, friend. It will be explained in future chapters. :twilightsmile:

The alicorn knew the young hippogriffs would not listen to her, but she just wished to have a breath. The little ones choked her with their weight.

Finally, she screamed.

Boy that must be one heck of a terrible dream but at least Sky Beak comfort her

Oh boy I feel like this is going to be a lot of drama going on here

What doesn't kill you, makes you stronger he thought. The blue hippogriff touched the vial with little struggle on the cork, but as a strong hippogriff as he was, he had managed to open it up. The weird-looking steam escaped outside, with a terrible stench that made itself known.

Oh boy please tell me this is not a love potion or poison because those are nothing but trouble

Sorry this whole thing is stupid. Been patient enough for an explanation. This isn't funny. This is do stupid. There is a better way to do this concept.

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Understandable, my friend. Thanks for critique.

I'm still trying experimenting with storylines.

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The core ship I can get, even making funny. But the fact Twilight is blindsided and even her fellow princesses just shrugging off. Especially Cadance of all ponies. Just derailed hard.

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