Banishment Decree

by Neon Czolgosz

Banishment Decree: Prologue

Five seconds.

I squeeze my legs tight, wrap my arms around the unicorn’s neck and twist my entire body. The stallion’s spine and neck break in three places. I push his limp body off, and a crosswind takes it off to the side.

That’s that dweeb taken care of.

Fourteen seconds.

My name is Gilda. I’m a griffon, and I’m about to die.

I’m about to reach terminal velocity. Sixty yards a second. A fall into deep water might not turn me to griffon jelly; but I’ll still be knocked out and drown.

Oh well.

Thirty seconds.

I’ve been falling for thirty seconds, and the wind is screaming past my ears.

My left wing is bound to my side by paralytic magic and my right has a bloody, fist sized hole through it. Both wings are still twitching from the electricity the unicorn shot through me. Can’t feel the pain. Can’t fly with them either.

Fifty seconds.

I remember to take a notepad and pencil out of my barding.

‘Hey T.’ I write, ‘I’m dead but mission accomp. RB was leak, is dead. Good working w/ you

‘See you when you get there,

‘G.’

Ninety seconds.

The adrenaline starts to fade. The pain creeps back in, and my heart rate drops. There’s a fine trail of pink mist coming from the hole in my wing. It looks almost pretty.

I thought for a second, and took out the notebook again.

‘Hey Dash, was going to come over and buy you a beer, apologise over the whole Ponyville thing a few years back. Your friends are still lame-os, but they were your lame-os and I should never have let that get in the way of our friendship. I’m sorry, Dash, and I hope you can forgive me.’

‘I guess I’ll see you when I see you,

‘Gilda - PS, good luck with the whole wonderbo’

I hit the ground so hard I bounce.

Comments

Okay Burn Notice crossover, nothing i've seen before so let's take a look at our first judgement.

Well there really isn't much that the proluge gives us, although that's what prolueges are for so, yeah whatevs. I like the idea and the concept and i can't wait to see how this continues. You've got me interested

[Neon Czolgosz]

71338

Thought the turnaround time for moderation would be longer, first chapter should be up tomorrow at latest.

[Nordlichter]

Oh gosh, oh gosh, oh gosh. I read the first sentence of the description and squee'd. Oh gosh. Been waiting for forever for this.

Will read.

[Fluttershy_Worshipper]

now i just need to see a Sons of Anarchy crossover and i will be soooo happy

nice username as well 8)

[Fernin]

Yikes. What an opener. 8 D

[mbpony 512]

Man , I love Burn Notice and to see the tagline plot of the show be influenced by My little Pony: Friendship is magic is truly a great treat.

I am track this storyline as it's off to a good start. Please do keep up the good work upon such a great idea like this one.

[LittleSallyDigby]

Your first commenter is insane.

"Isn't much that the prologue gives us"? Unless you pull a spectacular plot twist (or a spectacularly disappointing and-then-I-woke-up scene, which doesn't generally go right after a chapter break because it is the height of letdowns), we know...

* Gilda goes up against unicorns.
** At incredible altitude. (Either that or she got that high up after the unicorns shot her, which is still interesting.)
* RD was leak, is dead. Or at least Gilda thinks so. Either way, seeing how we got there promises to be impressive.
* Then Gilda hits the ground. Which can't actually be the ending, even if it is what it appears to be.

So you have my attention.

[KartalTheWriter]

Wow, you got my attention in 336 words? Great job. Great tone. Looking forward to this! I'm glad this was in my read list!

[MellowMabari]

Heya, haven't fully caught up yet, but just thought I'd comment to say this is really interesting, and I like the concept. Keep up the great work

[Dick McKickEm]

71347 Oh...my god. It's a Burn Notice crossover. You have no idea how happy this makes me. Mr. Finley,you have won an internet, use it wisely

[Borg]

What is Gilda doing fighting a unicorn over 5 kilometers up anyway? I'll point out that's high enough that air pressure is about half an atmosphere; how low can the oxygen partial pressure go before the average unicorn suffers from noticeable side effects, assuming very little time is allowed for acclimatization?

[Journeyman]

Well, you perked my interest, Mr. Finley. Gilda as a soldier/spy sounds pretty awesome. I look forward to reading some more.

[iota_epsilon]

All I read was the description and I flipped out, immediately like, "HOLY SHIT BURN NOTICE CROSSOVER!"

[CrystalWaters]

I hit the ground so hard I bounce.

It's a simple sentence but it works so well.
I could almost hear the grisly thwack-thwump sound that Gilda made on impact.

[Fome]

Burb Notice

Why did she talk about deep water if she was going to hit ground? Was the ground unexpected? Was it moved into her way just in time? And why would meat bounce?

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RB, not RD. No idea who that could be; unless it stands for Royal Butthead.

[Yubella]

So G is suppose to be banished and assisted by Rainbow and Trixie as her only friends is what I got from the summary. Can Trixie and Dashie bang? I like them together. But back to the actual story. I want to see where this goes so I'll comment here and there as I read.