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This story is a sequel to The Storm Dragon

When Spike finally gets his happy ending, he realizes that he’s not truly happy.

Prequel: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/445249/the-storm-dragon

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 4 )

Great job on the start of this sequel. The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are well done in all the right places. Yeah, nobody can deny that the Storm King definitely deserved what Spike did to him, but it IS a really intriguing detail concerning Spike's guilt about doing it, even considering what the Storm King did to him and others. And that nightmare? Yeowch. Still hoping that Spike patches things up with Ember and Calaeno in this story. And Cozy Glow? That makes an already bad feeling even worse (though, hopefully, Spike's experience with the dark side and using charm to sucker somebody in [even if he felt terrible about it] will make him much more cautious and suspicious about Cozy and able to help stop her BEFORE she is in a position to become a serious threat).

Anyway, very definitely looking forward to more of this.

I accidentally published an unfinished chapter, I’ll be done with it soon

REALLY good job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in this latest chapter. So Spike has met Cozy for the first time and is slightly unnerved by her (though, unfortunately NOT Properly Paranoid enough to avoid letting her read any of the Storm King's journal). Though, I have to admit, it IS a good notion to have a museum devoted to some of the villains that came particularly close to victory, if only to inspire the ponies to stay on the alert. And the stuff about Spike having his own secret room until Tempest got her own airship was a pretty logical detail too.

Well, anyway, I'm definitely looking forward to more of this story.

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