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Dr Sharaz Jek

Cynically Pretentious Hedonistic Nihilist...and those are my nicer qualities!


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Human on Mare Lesbian action is VERY rare, and always appreciated when it’s written this well! Awesome work!

Considering how obvious this specific setup is, maybe everyone just assumed it had already been written?

A loud slap reverberated when Bon Bon struck her love's ass, which quivered and was left with a red hoofmark. She offered similar treatment to the other cheek, determined to take the reigns after Lyra had reduced her to a muddled mess.

Beat the fucking devil out of it

So long as we can all watch!:rainbowwild:

Slap it like it's the fuckin mothman statue in West Virginia. Break sound barriers and every bone in your hand. Scream. Set something on fire.

Awesome, read it all. It all fun and games, until they feel the pain

Being human's cool, until you realise that human girls...bleed. Fairy regularly for several days every month, and I've heard it comes with cramps and stuff. Not sure if that's better than being in 'heat'.
Oh, and also inevitable back pain since our ape spines were never exactly meant for bipedal walking.

So...being human's got drawbacks.

Thank you, figure those two are used to a little rough stuff!
Indeed, I'm sure Bon Bon will agree after trying it out, but Lyra's such a fangirl she won't hear any of it!:rainbowlaugh:

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Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Very nice to see some lesbian human-on-pony. There's not enough of that on fimfic!
-Very abrupt beginning, and not especially sexy.
-Could have been better without the gynecology thing? I'm not sure what that adds to the experience.
-Really missing a beginning where they lovingly and curiously explore each other.
-An interesting angle, having them be so competitive with each other.

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Cloppability: 50/100
Allure: 12/100
Enticement: 70/100
Immersion: 65/100
Prose Quality: 90/100
Total Score: 287/500
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